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Shrinky Frod 214757

Joined July 2011
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    Shrinky Frod's Stories (2)

    • Five Minutes

      5,082 words · 11,584 views · 190 likes · 14 dislikes
    • Picking Up the Pieces
      After dealing with Discord, there are complications that a certain party pony needs to clean up.
      4,045 words · 1,447 views · 39 likes · 4 dislikes

    Twilight has decided that it's high time to figure out what's going on with Pinkie Pie, and there's only one way to do it!

    Author’s Note:  This story was inspired by Sub-level 03’s song, “Five Minutes,” from the album Undercover.  I suggest you look it up on iTunes, or through their website at http://www.sublevel3.us!  Listening to the song and lyrics might give you some idea where the imagery came from.  And the rest of the story, for that matter.  I quote a few of them in the story, but not the whole thing.

    First Published
    22nd Jul 2011
    Last Modified
    22nd Jul 2011

    Comments ( 61 )

    #1 · 95w, 4d ago · · ·
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    I love it! Nuf said! If Twilight tastes like grape now, when she gets older, does that mean she'll taste just like raisins? :3

    #2 · 95w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>606

    Now, now - I'm sure that Twilight will age into a fine wine, not a shriveled up raisin.

    Of course, that means that by the time she's Granny Smith's age, she'll have turned into sour old vinegar, but....  ;)

    Glad you liked it!

    #3 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    First we need to jump out this window. <3

    Hilariously well written, I look forward to more by you, author. :heart:

    #4 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy: Friends with benefits is a completely valid field in the study of friendship.

    #5 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy::twilightoops: it was awesome

    #6 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    This is quite possibly the most insane and utterly confusing fic I have ever read in my lifetime.

    It is half-mad and half genius.

    My brain is exploding into a rainbow now.

    Well done, good sir/madam.

    :derpyderp2:

    #7 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    ... What the hay did I just read?!

    And why do I want more?!

    #8 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    XD

    Yes. :pinkiehappy:

    #9 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    bwaahahahaaa!:twilightblush:

    #10 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·
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    >>654

    Ah, exactly the result I was looking for!  :ajsmug:

    Try finding the song and listening to it; it explains where some of the more bizarre things come from (though the giant Gummy head was mine.  :pinkiehappy:)

    I'm glad everybody's enjoying it so far!

    #11 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    That was... Surreal.

    I pride myself on being able to imagine almost anything people write, from steamy clop-scenes to complex battle-scenes, but... daym, this strained my brain to the breaking point.

    How the hell did you even come UP with this stuff?! xD

    Also, friends with benefits is a totaly valid section of the friendship study. xD

    (Second story I've read on FiMfic. Oooh, you have ponimoticons! Sweet. :rainbowkiss: )

    #12 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>670

    How do I come up with this stuff?

    It helps when you have music like this.

    And I really hope I got that code down correctly....

    #13 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    F-ing magnets, how do they work?

    #14 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>606

    Many she will taste like wine :rainbowlaugh:

    #15 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    :twilightsheepish::heart::pinkiehappy:

    Easily one of the craziest stories I've read in a while XD

    #16 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    i......  i tink....

    i tink mi mind is broke o_O:applecry::twilightoops::pinkiecrazy:

    #17 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    :raritystarry: awesomeeeeeeeeeeee!!!!! :pinkiegasp: it is soo crazy....:derpyderp1:

    #18 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I'm finding this unbelievable enough that I'll keep a log of what I'm thinking to post afterwards.

    “Gomen,” Pinkie pouted.

    Wait...Pinkie wants what? Umm...That's..disturbing already. No doubt she could summon Cthulu at a moment's notice anyway, so she can't be too serious. She knows Japanese, I wonder if she could help with the subbing...

    And Twilight is doomed. DOOMED. Spike is underexaggerating, especially since this fanfic has turned up her weird meter a bit.

    Wait, Twilight thought she'd have to convince Pinkie? Wow. I thought they knew each other better than that. 'For Science' isn't actually all that far from Pinkie's level of insanity.

    Music to trance out to. Vinyl Scratch has never served a finer purpose. Just awesome.

    “Okay, maybe just a little obsessed,” Twilight muttered sullenly.  “But I don’t have a crush on you!”

    Right, little Twi-Twi. Not at all...

    Going into multiple musical interludes. And of course, Pinkie is in perfect control, unlike Spike.

    How did Pinkie...What? Umm...Pinkie is in way too much control.

    To continue my studies. Uh...huh. Umm...

    That was...slightly awesome. And made much too much sense for comfort. Thankfully, both Pinkie and Twilight there were slightly removed from canon, or else I would think it's only a matter of time. Twilight isn't that obsessive over the unknown, and would move on before going insane enough to try to go into Pinkie's mind. She's not that far into 'For Science', as proven by 'Feeling Pinkie Keen.' And Pinkie...wasn't quite sane enough. There were little things that she would normally have less control over. Pinkie doesn't control stories, she goes with the flow. And that was not going with the flow. Anyway, good job! I look forward to seeing more, even if it was inspired by Vinyl Scratch's trances.

    #19 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    The innocence of this show is melting away, bit by bit. I think reading shipping fanfic is bad for my mind O_o

    #20 · 95w, 2d ago · · ·
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    The open-heart scene gave it a bizarre twist while still being very :pinkiesmile:-ish.  I had to roll my eyes at the magnets reference though.

    Nice work.

    #21 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy: Nice!!!

    #22 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    That was.... weird.:pinkiegasp:

    #23 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>763

    Mission accomplished.  :coolphoto:

    And regarding #718, I can see what you mean about Pinkie being too in-control.  My justification, if I need one, is that if anypony's conscious mind is pretty much the personified subconscious Id, it's Pinkie's.  :pinkiecrazy:

    And Spike... well, the machine wasn't built to work perfectly with dragon brains, after all.

    #24 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    ... Were... Were those Sub-Level 03 lyrics?:rainbowhuh:

    #25 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>781

    Indeed they were!  :pinkiehappy:

    If you want to hear the song itself, I posted a link up in Comment #12.  Most of their music I've heard isn't quite this... trippy, in the imagery, but I like this song in particular.

    #26 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    that...was...something

    #27 · 95w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I really enjoyed this. :) Saw it on EqD but wanted to leave a comment here also. :twilightsmile:

    #28 · 95w, 13h ago · · ·
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    Nothin' wrong with a bit of Twinkie

    :pinkiehappy::heart::twilightsmile:

    #29 · 95w, 12h ago · · ·
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    Loved this story. :twilightsmile:

    Was a very nice little venture into an extraordinarily frightening place!  Pinkie is probably my favorite of the mane cast (and also comes the most natural to get into character when writing, frighteningly), and everything you wrote about seemed spot on!  I hope to see more.

    #30 · 94w, 6d ago · · ·
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    I cant figure out how to read this :( anybody help?:unsuresweetie:

    #31 · 94w, 2d ago · 1 · ·
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    ... I find my mind to be in a bit of a haze.  I find myself intensely interested in psychological stories like this.  the part with the candied heart really piqued my interest and I find myself scrabbling to find some meaning to what this means to twilight's psyche and all I can come up with is that it was a case where twilight's feelings and pinkies randomness formed a mental image that there conscious minds were able to interpret, as horrifying as it is.  I know the writer  probably wasn't thinking this, this is how I interpreted it. sorry dear author if your offended by observations, but I hope you write more because this had my eyes glued to the screen with anticipation.

    :unsuresweetie:

    #32 · 92w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Saw "Sub-Level 03" and read it immediately. Was not disappointed. I never thought I'd see these two things combined. I approve of your choice of song, too. It's one of my favorites of theirs.

    Do they know about this story, yet? I'm definitely mentioning this to them at Oklacon this year. :rainbowlaugh:

    #33 · 92w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1116

    Awww, don't worry!  I overthink fanfiction all the time too.  :-P

    This is one of those cases where the cigar was just a cigar, but some of the other stories I'm working on are going to be a smidge deeper.  Now I just need to actually focus on one long enough to actually finish a chapter....  :facehoof:

    #34 · 92w, 1d ago · · ·
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    >>1903

    Heh.  Well, I haven't told them about it myself, but I suppose that if you're going to, then there's nothing to be done about it.  :twilightoops:

    Glad you liked the story though, as well as the song!  It's just got the perfect imagery for this sort of thing.

    #35 · 91w, 2d ago · · ·
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    This was so awesome, I was like What The Hay? the entire story... the "gomen" part, and the "magnets, how do they work" reference, made my day, preety darn epic!

    PS

    >>737

    I totally agree with you

    #36 · 90w, 3d ago · · ·
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    Read this about 5-6 times now. It never gets old. goodgod above this thing is a masterpiece! Twi, forever my favorite pony, was done perfectly. Her dialogue and reactions to pinkie and the whole mix of nonsensical pinkie logic and twilight logic just...

    Why bother explaining? It would take pages to describe my love of this fic. Usually, I get waaaay creeped out by these more... amorous ship fics, but hell, if they can be as funny as yours and maintain the relative tameness yours did (enough to be cute, pinkie lickin twi's nose = adorable image) then more power to 'em!

    Seriously, I lost it at the magnets part.

    You better keep writing author! don't you dare deprive me of more of this awesomeness!

    (only one complaint: SUblevel 3? really? go listen to some glitch mob or Mt.eden. passion pit and the like)

    #37 · 90w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>2778

    Thanks for the kind words.  But as for your comment about the musical selection....

    Don't make me pull out the Gordon Lightfoot.  :ajsmug:

    #38 · 90w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Excellent story! :scootangel:

    And +1 to you for the "non-Eucoltean" remark.

    I see what you did thar. :twistnerd:

    #39 · 84w, 6d ago · · ·
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    what did i just read and why do i whant more and what was with sheriff spike part and lmao with friends with benifets [ if the world was like that sigh]:twilightsmile:

    #40 · 83w, 5d ago · · ·
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    It's stories like this that remind me why I love cartoons. This was one of the most imaginative things I've read in a while. In fact, it's so "visually driven" I almost wish it was an animation. This is the kind of thing that's very difficult to convey in words.

    I could have done without the shipping, but I think that's just personal choice. Obviously the point of going into Pinkie's mind is to escape any need for logic, and simply plaster us with colorful imagery that simply wouldn't be possible within the confines of Equestria. Of course, it's silly that Twilight would consider searching for Pinkie's mysterious "physical" abilities by looking in her "mind", so the premise itself could possibly use some work. However, I'm willing to look past this until you think up a better excuse.

    The one other thing I would suggest is cutting out a lot of the exposition. Her initial scene where she wakes up is fine. However, I would cut out a lot of the Spike stuff, and reduce all of that to a short summary. Perhaps start the flashback with Twilight standing with Pinkie Pie just as she's about to hit the button, and then give a brief summary of what happened just prior. Nothing more than a small paragraph should do.

    I loved the way you incorporated the lyrics into the story. Again, this would make a great animation, and I really wished I could "hear" the lyrics rather than simply read them. Unfortunately, music is the one thing that cannot be conveyed in prose. The closest you can do is place a footnote with a link to a YouTube video or something, although obviously that would be a bit distracting to the reader.

    Anyway, I hope to read more from you at some point. I realize that these kind of ideas are few and far between, but you have an active imagination and I wouldn't be surprised if you found yourself "inspired" with another insane idea. When that happens, rest assured I'll be right there to enjoy every last bit of it.

    #41 · 81w, 2d ago · · ·
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    "“A gateway to places beyond time and space that’ll unleash overly amorous tentacle-y beasties on all of Ponyville?  Oh, that’d be the best!”

    “Pin-  What?!?”  Twilight asked, turning to look at her bouncing friend, who had somehow found the time to dress up in a white blouse, blue skirt, and matching scarf while she wasn’t looking." Naughty Naughty Naughty :ajsmug:

    Also, Magnets. HOW DO THEY WORK?!?!

    Interesting story though, I enjoyed it. :twilightblush:

    #42 · 79w, 2d ago · · ·
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    There are things in life that one is better off not knowing.

    Pinkie is one of them. She exists in defiance of reality. She is an anomaly, a paradox, the very essence of unreason.

    Pity the foal that chooses to dive into her mind in an attempt to make sense of it.

    #43 · 76w, 23h ago · 1 · ·
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    Start reading, think: Oh hey, this is pretty good!

    "overly amorous tentacle-y beasties"

    Pause.

    Scroll up, rate 5 stars, leave comment.

    Resume reading.

    #44 · 75w, 2d ago · · ·
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    scamper among the lillies

    fly among the trees

    roll across the grass

    run through the fields

    awww  what did we miss?  your hiding something!  yea / no?    

    good read all the same

    #45 · 74w, 14h ago · · ·
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    :applejackconfused: I think me last brain cell had a accident with a truck and two chickens :derpyderp1:

    #46 · 74w, 13h ago · · ·
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    TwiPie...  Why have I not searched for this before????

    #47 · 73w, 4d ago · · ·
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    That was beyond trippy... and loved every second of it. :pinkiehappy:

    Also, Twinkie :heart:

    #48 · 73w, 1d ago · · ·
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    I loved how pinkie's mind was explored, that was fun!  Twinkie isn't my favorite shipping, but DEFINITELY not a bad one! Very fun and intriguing! Nice flow too, easy to read. Glad I read!  :twilightsmile:

    #49 · 71w, 4d ago · · ·
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    That was freaking amazing! And Twilight's letter...oh man, that just left the door open for the naughtiness of what Pinkie did to Twilight...so perfect! I really do love Twilight x Pinkie. Not sure where it ranks out of my favorite Twilight x Mane Six shipping, but...hmm...it's one of my favorites! :twilightsmile:

    #50 · 71w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Oh my...

    I'd have thought Twilight would've been a bit more shocked at the first kiss, but with her *secret desires* and such, I guess it could be explained she wanted it to happen so badly that when it did it wasn't surprising. I'd be pretty surprised if I went into my best friend's head and then they sudden;y started doing things to me... ugh.  But otherwise, great short! :pinkiehappy:

    And Tails- are you following me, or something? Every time I find a new story, your comment is right above mine. Seriously.

    #51 · 71w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I reckon twilight should taste like vanilla.

    #52 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>659

    I WANT SO MUCH MORE

    #53 · 69w, 4d ago · · ·
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    >>9828

    You're curious about Sheriff Spike, hmmm?

    :moustache:

    :trixieshiftright::trixieshiftleft:

    :twilightoops:

    :raritydespair:

    One of these days, maybe we'll find out.  :eeyup:

    #54 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    I was looking this story up to recommend to the TwiPie shippers who've descended upon me, and I realized I never actually reviewed this. D'oh!

    I love this story. I love the entire emotional mood you created during Twilight's time in Pinkie's mind. The story just feels sexy as all get-out, even though there's nothing at all explicit in it. I also really liked the flashes of humor--Vinyl deciding to plan some gigs out of town, Twilight commenting on Pinkie LICKING HER HEART, "rutabaga"--which seems very appropriate for a TwiPie story.

    Well done. Thanks for writing and for sharing!

    #55 · 68w, 2d ago · · ·
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    >>170115

    Thank you!  High praise from a great author.  :)

    I *may* be toying with a sequel to this one.  If I do, I'll be sure to post it here.

    #56 · 63w, 4d ago · · ·
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    :pinkiehappy::twilightsmile:?

    Instant win and super-powerful love. Good times. Take all my thumbs-up and all my favorites. :heart:

    #57 · 60w, 6d ago · · ·
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    First you spelled it "Sugarcube Corner", then you spelled it "Sugar Cube Corner"

    #58 · 59w, 2d ago · · ·
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    Pinkie's the headspace inside very likely not the same are it?  Two many from the other places spreads its sugar thoughts.  Very much a brain trusts not other space.

    From this the writing, several enjoyments; a quality of style and right unassociation.  :twilightsmile:

    #60 · 3w, 5d ago · · ·
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    Has to be one of the strangest fanfics I've read...but it was well worth it. Only makes sense, when dealing with any subconcious mind - let alone PINKIE'S, that it would be a trippy experience. That, and it ws hilarious as well.

    #61 · 1w, 15h ago · · ·
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    *Blink blink* okay this was just too creepy to be endearing or cute. It felt waaay too much like some form of stockholm syndrome:twilightoops:

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