This story is told by me, Marshmallow Swirl, or Chronos, Alicorn of time! Influenced by thoughts including: what if there were previous mane 6? What happened before the civilization of Equestria? Join this adventure and watch to see the things that happened in Equestria. I'd love criticizm, if I spelled that right, and also, OC's are accepted. They must not be perfect like a universe destroyer that may not be touched. They can be any species known from Equestria, but also, you must speak of what they are, landlord, enemy of the kingdom, etc. Limited number of Alicorn spaces available that will be important. Also, I decide whether you die or not. PM me stuff like descriptions and pictures, drawn or used with pony maker, or comment on my page!
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Prince Chronos
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I AM FIRST LOLOLOL and before this chapter was published LOLOL
noobs who try to comment First.
Oh, sorry for the first comment. Anyways, many things in this chap are important, and make sure to keep a death of me count!
This is my first piece of writing on here, and please use tons of criticizm to straighten and build my writing skills!
Sorry if my paragraphs are unbalanced! I'll try working on that
Once the first trials are over, then I'll have less of Lauren appearing!
So... many... comments... from the author...
Anyway, the paragraphs (like you said) could do with some tweaks, but because I'm in a Rush match on BF3 I couldn't notice and grammar or spelling mistakes.
Good job! I'll... uh... track/favourite this out of curiosity.
I think you should add a Jester Pegasus that is crazy
725888 Thanks for the support! This will be one of the stories with lots of chapters. One thing that's a problem though, is I had a dream last night... it had the perfect "ending" cliffhanger but it wouldn't be a real ending. And I wanna post that, but I kinda can't. At least A. Someone is supporting, and trying to help, though so far, I have ideas, but don't quite know where to put them. This will slowly improve. Edit: I'll try adding less comments. too
726553 Hey, I'm all up for supporting anyone who I think deserves it! This is an interesting concept and I would like to see how you'll go about it!
726794 Cool! I'm already working with the 2nd chapter, but in August, once I have to do school again, it'll be hard to upload..... BUT! I won't dissapoint.
726994 If anyone should be worried about disappointing readers, it's me and my fanfic.
I wish you the best of luck, mate! Looking forward to more!
I got my eye on this one, seems interesting enough. Be 20% more awesome if it turned out to be canon. Anyway best of luck!
I've got to admit, I was a little nervous at first, but this really is good! The lack of paragraph division admittedly looks awkward, but I like how you provided an actual backstory for the creation of the alicorns, and how you didn't use a "Mary Sue/Stu" persona for your self-insert. You have done well, my faithful disciple.
762223 Thanks for the motivation! You were the one who got me to make this fic, and it'll be very good! Also, there might be a little skipping non important parts, only with brief explanations.
A. I guess I can make this everyone. For now. Im not sure....
B. Sorry if this chapter is short, and especially sucky. I'll need to prepare for the next chapter. The Fated Night
C. I need help! I have Celly as Gen. Lu as Mag. (Thanks to Eathlome) but I can't think of the other two and i wanna no-ooow.
D. Bad names kinda are bad, if they are.