It was interesting to see a clop story with Celestia and Luna being more primal and incapable of communicating with the human protagonist. Keep up the good job.

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Nightmare Moon, not Luna. And thank you.

great job man

As the first in the comments I would just like to say...

THAT WAS F***ING GREAT

and keep up the good work

I WENT TO MASTURBATE AND FORGOT I HAD A KNIFE IN MY HAND OWWWWWW!

That was a pretty good clop story you made. I'll give you a thumbs up for it.

This kinda needs some more chapters to explain Celestia and Nightmare moon being all feral.

Dude, paragraphs aren't poisonous, you can employ them with frequency. I guarantee they'd make this fic read far better than the current Great Wall Of Text that keeps even non-Mongols out.

I'm impressed... Few story that can give me a boned but this?
*insert evil grin*
Nice, You do a perfect job mate.

Sequel?

Oh WAIT! I FORGET!

'What the hell did I get myself into?'

Make a Sequel mate! It gonna be Huge Hit! Don't worry about Time, Just think.

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Tee em eye, man.

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I didn't mention them being feral. Just no talking (that would freak "human" out even more and lead to more complications).

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I did it this way from learning in school about have 4+ sentences per paragraph. It's been a while since I did any typing or writing. But thanks for your input and will be taken into consideration for other stories I might make.

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Hate to burst your bubbles, but there will be no sequel or continuation. If there is, I would have to go back and redo the ending of the chapter. It took me a week to continue and finish and I can't find the time to do it. Sorry for the inconvenience.

The 10 inches comment makes me question your knowledge of human biology.

6471687 you can continue from that, it's not an ending, but it's not a cliffhanger either. you needn't change anything. but I'm not expecting another but it would be nice if there was.

6471854 Nah, it's a known fact that the average human is 10 inches. Just because you're a measly 6 doesn't mean you're average.

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6471993
I'll be strictly honest with you, I have very little knowledge on human biology, so I just chose a random number. 10 seems fitting due to the fact that the mares are taller than "human". I've read other stories that mentioned 11 or higher.

wow the equestrian ponies as cryptids.. that is actually a really cool idea!

6471993 actually from the website: http://www.menshealth.com/sex-women/average-penis-size
its a 5.3
6471854

6472348 Yay, I'm average at something!

Er, I mean. Yes. Moving on.

6472417 It's okay we all shouted in joy knowing we are slightly above the average length

cool story

6471687 I see... Oh well, It a good One-shot then?

Its the Blair Mare Project, Although there isnt anything scary about this one.

6473545 Well that's a bit rude :V Everyone starts somewhere.

6471687 Fair enough. Give us a holler if you come back to re-touch this one someday.

It's like MLP mixed with The Geek (the sasquatch porno; I know of it because of the Cinema Snob).

One day I'm gonna get that filthy alicorn!
THE END

Nice fic, and surprisingly sexy. Though if they had magic, you'd think they would first create a translation spell of some sort.

-Kirb.

Well done sir. This is awesome. Brilliant work for your first story!

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Clearly, they were a bit... preoccupied. :P

Great fiction. I don't know if I should ask for a continuation or just pat you on the back and wish you well, whatever you decide to do.

Hmmm...

Both! I do both!

6475096 Maybe they'll have to create one after they wake up from having boned him.

-Kirb.

Read the first half because I thought there was going to be some crazy subversion. Sadly for me there was not.

And that's why you always have your shotgun loaded. Kill those freaks o' nature.

Out of all the stories I've read, or started to read and never finished, I've NEVER seen anyone bold the first letter and increase it's size like that before. Ever. That's awesome

6476317 Well, it starts with a jab at the genre of the story. Then the part about "not complete shit" isn't really a compliment. It sounds like you're saying it's still shit, just a little less so. And then the last part says he's not going to have any real success just because of this first story.

So yeah, the whole thing was little bits of rudeness.

6476005 OH MY GAWD THE LUNA ON YOUR PROF PIC IS SO CUTE!

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The length of a normal human phallus is actually around 5 to 6 inches. You've given this fella something that his body may have difficulty supporting.

6476005
We need more readers like this ^

VERY nice my friend, keep up the great work, and Stay Classy

"And her bust size was an F"

Do people have this hidden ability to know how huge tits are at a glance? Does anyone actually know how fucking massive this breast size is?

My suggestion for tour clop kext time to seperate it from being sub par to good is to do away with these conceptual ideas.

I don't want to know her cup size. I don't know how large anything over a DD is realistically.

My suggestion is to not care about her tits until you start fucking her. Then describe them in practical terms such as "certainly over a handful" or "smothered my face with her impressive size."

Also smaller is indeed better, Cs and Ds are perfectly fine and dandy.

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6476005
You'll be expecting more of that on my other stories I will soon work on in the near future.

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I see. I will take your suggestion into consideration for future stories. Did I mention that the mares are taller than humans?

6476317
Thank you for your blunt honesty. However, when you said something like "it's not entirely shit", you're kind of insinuating that somewhere in the story something is shitty. It is somewhat rude in a way, as 6476375 pointed out.

Just be careful with what you type in next time, as some people will take it the wrong way and things will escalate to things which we never intended.

6478108 Here! Here! Boobs are amazing, but do authors have to condemn girls to the hell of having to lug all that weight on their chests? Jesus, if there was ever character abuse, this is it! F cups!?!?

Christ Almighty those backs have gotta be sore!

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From what I learned, horses have a very strong musculoskeletal structure, hence why we are able to ride them with no issues and why I gave the mares that size. I thought I could use this theory for anthro ponies on the story.

I did mention somewhere that the mares doesn't seem to be uncomfortable with their bust size.

I absolutely loved it! I do have ideas for a continuation of this if you plan on extending this, which I'm sure everypony would enjoy.

Your writing is impeccable, I only found two misspelled words (that I can't really recall where) and I thoroughly enjoyed reading this!

I do hope you at least consider making a continuation of this~

6471953 You do know it's not unheard of to a have a human penis to be 10 inchs. Im not saying its common just not unheard of. In fact the largest penis on record is 14 inchs. so its not impossible

6483427 what? why are you telling me this, I was only stating that this could be sequelised without changing the story at all.
wait 14 inches? he must scare every woman he meets.

wow, this was great, could to do one where they find another guy, and turn him into a stallion, anthro, and get knocked up?

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Yeeeeeeeaaah no. I don't like stories that turns humans into stallions. I'm not that type of guy.

Wow...this was a good clopfic. I needed that.

6492481 i understand

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I am the the type of guy who can write stories that includes a human impregnating ponies along the line somewhere, however.

6495052 incest impreg in there?