I'm um, Fluttershy. Not doing okay but wanting to write, even if it's messy. Suffering from bad OCD. Trying to overcome it, lest my, um, writing deteriorate. I can do this~
Fluttershy spends her days cooped up inside, barely speaking to anypony.
When she does get outside, it`s hell.
But is it any different to being inside?
She wants to confess. She wants to let it all out. She wants her friend to love her, to care about her. She wants to be politely turned down by those she loves. She wants to be rejected. She wants to stay indoors. She wants to hide indoors.
She wants to curl up in filth.
(Thanks to The Fruity Cousin for pre-reading 
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Hey! Good to see you published Filth! It's just as good a second time around, and I hope you enjoy writing more in the future! (by that, I mean more stories; hope there isn't any confusion!)
Curious though: why can I not like the story? I noticed this on your first story, so I'm curious if you know why.
6599581 I'm not entirely sure. I had no idea you couldn't like the story on the first one... I`ll try and figure out why.
Oh and thanks
Holy . . . um, wow. I don't think I've ever read a rendition of what depression and social anxiety really feels like that was so succinct and visceral as you wrote it here. I don't often read stream-of-consciousness fics, but this was a very good one, and the narrative mode contributes both to the story's length and its viscerality. It makes me sad how much this Fluttershy wants acceptance but how her very mental state precludes her from finding it.
The only thing I can say in criticism is to watch your conventions. You have a tendency to substitute grave accents (`) for apostrophes (') on occasion with different contractions (though apparently, this might be a problem with your keyboard drivers). As far as I'm aware, grave accents are almost never used in isolation.
PS. I was directed here by Loganberry. He put in a good review for you on his blog post.
6623605 Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
I read the blog post and I agree with his opinion on the ending, reading it over myself, it feels forced and kind of unfitting. I think I may have tried too hard to include some rather obvious meta work and I think I should have just continued to focus on Fluttershy.
And thanks for the tip for the punctuation too, I`ll try and keep that in mind.
I know you've read my blog review of this, but I wanted to nip over and write something here, too. I really do admire this story (until the very end, as already discussed) and as someone who's had considerable social anxiety issues in the past, I felt for Fluttershy even more than I usually do. This is a powerful story, and I'm impressed.
Have an upvote. Actually, have a follow, too.
*internet hug*