One of the worst problems here is that you forget characters in the background and just have them follow without talking. With so many people, we expect more dialogue. Also, some of your paragraphs are a bit long sometimes the run on and on. If you wish to further yourself then I suggest you read more. As you read more you will automatically pick up more mistakes in your writings. You also want to stick to higher level material. On this site that equates to around
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when we will read about tonoe change into woman?
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Most likely in the next chapter or two
One of the worst problems here is that you forget characters in the background and just have them follow without talking. With so many people, we expect more dialogue. Also, some of your paragraphs are a bit long sometimes the run on and on. If you wish to further yourself then I suggest you read more. As you read more you will automatically pick up more mistakes in your writings. You also want to stick to higher level material. On this site that equates to around
20 : 1 (created this year)
25 : 1 (created last year to 3 years ago)
35 : 1 (created more than 3 years ago)
like to dislike ratio for pretty good stories.
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Well, a phobia is usually associated with fear, and in his case it's not really hate, more like tension.
loving the sires so far good work
Wow love this glad I found it today
Cool your on the feature page
When is the next chapter coming up
Are there anymore stories involving male human herding with Princess Cadence and Gleaming Shield?
Hoping that this story is still alive