You want to know how to write a good story? You take a group of interesting, likable, wonderful characters, and you turn their lives into Hell on Earth. -- Chris Claremont
Spark Plug never had it easy in life. Sure, he was born to two loving parents and lived in a quaint little town, but lady luck decided to throw him a curve ball.
He has no magic.
Normally such a thing would devastate the normal pony, but Spark couldn't care less. Besides, why would he need magic when he can just invent devices that can easily replicate it?
With the story being in constant development, I'll add characters and tags when needed.
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A nice, simple, and effective start.
Like and fav.
Moar. Gimmy gimmy.
Can't wait till the little bugger starts making things.
I await the next chapter...
I have a feeling I'm going to love this story...
Humanity approves of this.
So a story about an inventor with possible insecurities?
Alright, sounds promising, even if the pacing is a bit rushed.
6359555 Sorry if you think it's rushed. If you think this chapter is bad, the next is going to be a lot worse. I plan on time skipping through Spark's younger years, explaining his growth process. Once he hits age five, I plan on slowing down considerably.
This certainly looks interesting, I'll keep an eye on it.
This is looking like one of the most intresting stories I've read in a long, LONG time.
Keep up the good work!!
This confused me for a second,
Before long, Spark had his first birthday.
his son, the demon
bring life back to
I only picked out things I thought were really bad.
Bastards why do you want to stifle the poor kid?!?!
6361306 I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! I got plenty more in store for Spark, so stick around.
6361318 Changes have been made. Thanks for pointing them out for me!
Dang, when I read the description I didn't realize the full extent of not having magic. But that kid is brilliant.
head canon acquired: harmony magic tampers with the brain, making ponies less logical and more dependent on emotions(little proof for the emotions part yet.)
Kindergarten:
Force field to prevent foals from escaping.
Spark leaves anyway.
Because screw magic.
6361447 Typically cancer is when cells start to multiply uncontrollably and create tumorous masses. Autoimmune diseases are where the immune system attacks healthy cells by mistake.
~Someone who's not a doctor, but can Google.
(Also horses are already sentient. Sapient is the word you're looking for for intelligence.)
6361409 I accept your head canon and replace my own.
hmmm... interesting line. Way its phrased suggests that a foal is predestined to have a certain mark from birth, and the mother intrinsically has a sense of what it will be.
will watch... if just to see how else your head cannon is interesting.
6361537
Woo, someone noticed! You're absolutely right in your assumption. I figured it's the mother's instinct to name their child, which will eventually be related to their cutie mark.
I see what you did there.
6361510
to Atrunia
you have been accepted into our society with open hoofs and a tender heart.
This story....
You sir get a fav, and now time to see the wonder child and the hardships to combat his ability so!
... Am I the only one miffed about the parents telling the colt only one day before kindergarten that he will be attending? My parents at least gave me a weeks warning, letting me prepare and get excited about it.
Anyone else notice that it went from 0 to 3 downvotes in less than 30 seconds?
6361994 Believe me, I did. Either I finally got a wave of people who don't like my story, or something fishy is going on.
6361994 The misanthropic technology haters are trying to bury this story under magic-wank and edginess! Quick, we must upvote-bomb the story to stop them!
6361464 MAGIC IS FOR THE WEAKKKKKKKKKKK!
-Khorne
So... if he has no magic whatsoever in his body... how is he able to hold tools?
6362187 While I didn't cover it in the story, I see most workable objects being hoof friendly in some way. It simply doesn't make sense for ponies to use tools that would fit for creatures with fingers. I didn't mention it because it would become tedious to describe and explain how equines can use, and handle, tools.
That's just one way I see it working. The other is though magical means like you implied. If I were to go with that option, however, I would've already driven myself up a wall, and at only two chapters in to boot!
Grammar can use some polishing, incorrect word usage and lack of capitalisation appear here and there. Nothing overly bad though.
It has an okay start so far.
6361549 I approve of this head-cannon.
6362217 I like to think both are true, with Spark being able to handle tools in his own way, while most ponies have access to the magic invisible 'fingers' they seem to inexplicably have. Adds more flavor to Spark.
6361549 I was about to put "I heard that somewhere before" but then I realized, I used the same headcannon as you when I wrote my own (cruddy) fanfiction! That was an awesome coincidence.
6362247 "okay"
Okay?
Okay my left nut. Have you SEEN most of the works on here?
6362442 Oh, I'm sorry, am I supposed to have the same reaction as you and not of my own?
Also: double post.
Wow. So far this is actually very good, nice work. This is totally going in my Book Self to be read whenever I get the chance. The idea and how it is presented is great, and after reading a few comments...People are already predicting what will happen next which is really cool and interesting to see the predictions. As for my prediction, I predict that a time-lapse will go threw Spark Plug's life until he is about maybe a teenager. Big adventures occur..........And stuff happens. Not really a prediction I guess, but it is basic enough. Anywho, I so far love the idea as I said earlier, And from reading the 'Thumbnail' (I don't know what to call it.) there is another chapter, yey!
(EDIT: Oh wait, ok. I just read further down the comment page...You are doing a 'Time-skip'. Well, CALLED IT, kind of.)
6362217
6362187
No need for magic to pick stuff up with hooves.
Pioneering genius in the realms of technology? Something that Equestria needs oh so badly?
... And dude, at least tell your kid he helped you, I mean sure, ground him still, but your kind of worrying the kid if you don't let him know this shit.
Anyway, seems like your going a good direction... I'll await you next chapter, let's see where this all goes.
6362537 You've uh. never seen a real hoof before, have you?
6362217 Fair enough.
6362217 am hoping he make a transistor computer like this one or those old vacum tube ones
Shouldn't 'kindergarten' be lowercase?
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Could use a little bit of grammatical polishing, but so far I'm intrigued and can't wait to see where this will go.
Certainly following this, the story shows a lot of promise
>Magic used on him wont have any effect at all[/color
*won't
Nice, simple, and tragic start, I approve of this, and I shall be reading more.
Good job, I like the head canon about the mother's instincts.
Keep it up!
BAT PONE!