A pregnant unicorn mare is sent out into the wasteland to find a suitable settlement where the people from her dying, overcrowded Stable could thrive in. But even with a task as daunting as this, things in the Equestrian wasteland are never easy.
(I will write smut when I get better at writing. I am an artist, primarily. I draw lewd, I wanna know how to write it as well. A true renascence f*ggot)
6341739 I know who you are. I really do enjoy your visual art, even when the ponies you draw are actually giraffes. I'm liking the fact that this character you've laid out is the diametric opposite of Righty. It's funny to me. Really, I enjoy anytime I get to interact with someone who has similar interests. Like seeing you in the FoE threads especially.
Continue publishing and reworking your stuff, creative individuals who keep up the effort will get rewards. But you probably already know that...
6344914 I've seen the use of "hand" in this context in the show itself "Hand me this" and "give me a hand", etc. Besides, "The Things We've Hoofed Down"? That sounds naughty and also doesn't make sense.
Yarp, 3 Doc's, thought they're going to be pretty different than the ones that were shown on /foe/. There will be one never-seen chapter, chapter 5, because I felt that 4 weeks wasn't good enough to convey a proper story.
6347214 He's a big guyfor you, I'm very very sure that he can.
From the wiki "In the season one episode Friendship is Magic, part 2, Steven Magnet is one of the obstacles that the Mane Six face in their quest for the Elements of Harmony. Nightmare Moon has cut off half of his mustache, sending him into a tantrum that renders an Everfree Forest river impassable. Rarity soothes his tantrum by sacrificing her tail to make up the rest of his cut mustache with her unicorn magic. In thanks, Steven Magnet offers his body as a bridge across the river."
Hey there! Just finished reading the 5 available chapters, and I thought I'd give a bit of feedback on each of them!
I think this first chapter is my favorite, largely because of how the narrative is delivered. I like how important details are given out slowly as the scenes progress, rather than all at once. It gives a feeling of standing very close to a painting and focusing on one aspect, then slowly backing away to see the bigger picture as more and more pieces fall into place.
Another thing I liked was the subtle hints as to how f*cked everything is in Stable 16. Rec-rooms being turned into makeshift clinics, food rationing, and their last hopes being sent out with whatever random equipment could be scraped together. But it was this line in particular that really hammered home how desperate these ponies are “...we’ve spent too many resources on you to let that go to waste.” When you need to send a pregnant mare out to almost certain death, you might be in a dire straights.
Finally, the part I just loved was near the end where Leaky turns on her radio. I remember thinking it would be DJ-Pon3's smooth voice coming through the speakers, giving our heroine some upbeat words of wisdom as she starts off on her journey. Instead it was some foul-mouthed guy talking about the time he made his own baby-launcher! It was at this moment I knew we weren't in for a rip-snorting romp though the wastes, and strangely, it's why I kept reading.
This is turning out to be a good one. Hope you keep working on. Im looking forward to the next chapter
Guy, continue publishing. Lewder the better as well.
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But that's lewd.
(I will write smut when I get better at writing. I am an artist, primarily. I draw lewd, I wanna know how to write it as well. A true renascence f*ggot)
Oh look. It's back.
6341739
I know who you are. I really do enjoy your visual art, even when the ponies you draw are actually giraffes.
I'm liking the fact that this character you've laid out is the diametric opposite of Righty. It's funny to me.
Really, I enjoy anytime I get to interact with someone who has similar interests. Like seeing you in the FoE threads especially.
Continue publishing and reworking your stuff, creative individuals who keep up the effort will get rewards. But you probably already know that...
6342246
Ye, common ground is great, when you find peeps like you
Ayyy
Thanks, man! Yer support means a lot.
I'll do muh best to not disappoint!
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6342286
We all have those days when we wake up as another species and Italian.
6342298
Don't you hate those days?
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It's scary how similar our writing styles are. Let's have sex.
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Don't have anything of yours to compare it to, So I wouldn't know!
>Let's have sex
Lewd
6342453
Believe me. When I'm all concise and brevity, this is me.
6344914 Dragons, griffons, etc.
6344914
I've seen the use of "hand" in this context in the show itself
"Hand me this" and "give me a hand", etc. Besides, "The Things We've Hoofed Down"? That sounds naughty and also doesn't make sense.
Yarp, 3 Doc's, thought they're going to be pretty different than the ones that were shown on /foe/. There will be one never-seen chapter, chapter 5, because I felt that 4 weeks wasn't good enough to convey a proper story.
6346961 "river god"? Nah, he's a sea serpent, also a reptile. Really, "hand" is used so often in the show that it doesn't really matter.
6347059
His unhappiness caused him to spaz around and wailing and twist around dramatically, which caused the river to churn
6347214
He's a big guyfor you, I'm very very sure that he can.
From the wiki
"In the season one episode Friendship is Magic, part 2, Steven Magnet is one of the obstacles that the Mane Six face in their quest for the Elements of Harmony. Nightmare Moon has cut off half of his mustache, sending him into a tantrum that renders an Everfree Forest river impassable. Rarity soothes his tantrum by sacrificing her tail to make up the rest of his cut mustache with her unicorn magic. In thanks, Steven Magnet offers his body as a bridge across the river."
6347278
Headcanons are fine and all, but imposing them on people (generally) isn't the way to go
6347286
Also, if you'd like, we can take this to PMs, I wanna keep this comments section free of fluff, ya know?
6342323
I love leaky as a giraffe, though she'd technically be an African in that case... therefore not Italian.
Make some leaky as a giraffe smut guy. It'd make my year. Anyway thank you for being there guy.
PS: Giraffe Leaky doing things with giraffe Jade Shine would be grand.
Can we expect an update any time soon?
Just found this through derpibooru art
6371567
Yup!
Chapter 2 is gonna come out soonish. Just needs a bit of editing right now.
*Grab popcorn bag* Oh, I'm going to enjoy this
Out of curiosity, when is set this story compared to the events of Fallout Equestria?
6372352 I love the song that you added. I had to look up the lyrics to see if they were real.
Hey there! Just finished reading the 5 available chapters, and I thought I'd give a bit of feedback on each of them!
I think this first chapter is my favorite, largely because of how the narrative is delivered. I like how important details are given out slowly as the scenes progress, rather than all at once. It gives a feeling of standing very close to a painting and focusing on one aspect, then slowly backing away to see the bigger picture as more and more pieces fall into place.
Another thing I liked was the subtle hints as to how f*cked everything is in Stable 16. Rec-rooms being turned into makeshift clinics, food rationing, and their last hopes being sent out with whatever random equipment could be scraped together. But it was this line in particular that really hammered home how desperate these ponies are “...we’ve spent too many resources on you to let that go to waste.”
When you need to send a pregnant mare out to almost certain death, you might be in a dire straights.
Finally, the part I just loved was near the end where Leaky turns on her radio. I remember thinking it would be DJ-Pon3's smooth voice coming through the speakers, giving our heroine some upbeat words of wisdom as she starts off on her journey. Instead it was some foul-mouthed guy talking about the time he made his own baby-launcher! It was at this moment I knew we weren't in for a rip-snorting romp though the wastes, and strangely, it's why I kept reading.
Solid intro chapter. Its funny cause i got a setting in my story based off of Arizona too. Though mine is spelled "Neighrizona"
That escalated quickly.