Octavia and Vinyl had a falling out in their relationship recently that caused Octavia to move out.
Tavi ends up in Manehattan in an apartment all alone. Her only friends now are in her new trio.
Although the trio brings in money every so often, their business isn't as good as they had all hoped. Tavi finds herself with more free time than she knows what to do with. Practicing always got bland after the first... five hours or so.
Tavi begins to have regrets as well as missing the long chats with Vinyl. Her Trio takes notice of this and tells her to try a new First Person MMORPG they had been preparing to start playing. Sparking her interest as well as giving her something to do besides practicing she decides to at least try it once.
She meets somepony she never thought she would see again. Through her best efforts she couldn't make the situation any better. Until an unexpected ally decides to step in.
Will the game tear Vinyl and Tavi even farther apart or be what brings them back together?
I only wish the chapters were longer. But I am liking this a lot. Please keep it up!!
6341407 Thanks for the feedback and I was planning on making Ch.5 longer.
6342519
right now I am more angry that no one is reading your story.
6344273 I think this is how most people's first fics start out. This started as something bouncing around in my head. Since it's the weekend though and I won't have Marching Band practice I'll be working on Chapter 5 some more.
Of course she still cares Vinyl you big dingus!
6346426 And I thought I was the only person I would ever know that used the word dingus.
Dont know why Vinyl wont try to talk to her... or even leave a not in the mail box...
WOW Octy. Might wanna actually... you know... BE CONSIDERATE OF OTHER PONIES FIRST! I mean jeez look what you did to the Derpster!
*Slaps her upside the head*
6350901 Well she is.....you know....the snobby one. At least she doesn't A: Make horrible music puns *cough* Tuning Fork *cough* and B: She isn't that pony that lives right above her. and also C: She isn't my OC. Yeah...I guess Bass embodies my Short Temper and Lack of Patience perfectly!
It also seems Tavi enjoys slapping ponies...maybe a bit too much...
Wow Octy is violent.. I don't think I seen a story where she even chucked a rock at anypony. LOL
But the story seems to be moving rather fast. Not sure if that is a good thing or a bad thing yet.
6351335 Hmmm.... I said in the author notes of "Out of Tune...Out of Everything...." that we could be nearing the end or possibly we could only be getting started... I have many ideas in my head... and some of them have manifested on some of my alter-egos much like Pinkie and Pinkamena.... One of them is an angel .... the other is rather mischievous I wonder which one will take over?
Well I like your style. Maybe we can do a collaboration on some time
It's simple purpose was to
1. Its.
6351882 Thank you for the correction
Greatswords are way to big
opposed to being a slashing weapon
Longswords it is then
the best it's going to
It's required level is
1. Too.
2. Extra spacing here.
3. Longsword, though both can work in this case. Call it preference since she only can wield one at the moment.
4. Extra spacing.
5. Its.
6353757 Thank you once again. For #3 She is talking about the category of weapon not truly just the one. So she says Longswords instead of just Longsword. The extra spacing happens because I have my gaming keyboard hooked up and after a lot of Button Mashing (haha get it?) it seems to go over-sensitive sometimes and double space (or triple space) even at one tap. My earlier keyboard actually had a busted "T" key so that when you even virtually skimmed over it it would type 20 T's. I should just make you my official pre-reader or typo-finder or whatever they're called.
Forgot to capitalise.
As Octavia looked at the wolf it did look unkempt, more so than the others.
All of these change to Its. And the These change to There.
All the finesse and subtly of a chainsaw on an operating table
Extra spacing here. Talk about... BM(Button Mash). That me when I say my puns are bad. But yeah, not much I can think of saying.
These It's should be Its. A quick note; It's is a shortened version of "It is"
You lost your formatting halfway here and all the text after this was centered.
6357173 The game is making her into a rather violent and less lady-like type of pony...
6357277 Corrections made and I will check the rest if I can, but if I may ask you to, please keep doing what you're doing. Also to clarify it's not that I Button Mash my space bar when I'm typing it's just that my Gaming prior to typing these I MASHED THE SPACE BAR A LOT. Sometimes it gets a little....spastic with the number of spaces. Thanks again!
I feel almost feel bad now.
"Does this mean....you're coming home?" super sad
6361790 You know...I'm a musical person. Music influences my actual feelings and I was listening to a sad song as I finished that chapter...hmmm....I guess that may be why....
6362170 And it just so happened to be about Derpy... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qc-YMUWvA1s&index=62&list=PLVmGq4F62nVJIF8LpD6s4389lLGa1BBJG
Forgot to capitalise in these cases.
Extra spacing in these cases.
Extra capitalisation.
Don't need the ellipses in these cases.
Extra spacing in these cases.
No need the apostrophes in these cases.
Needs a comma after Refocusing.
And.
Forgot to capitalise all your I.
Chucked.
Well, at least they didn't make anything... Noteworthy.
Good thing you went this way and didn't... Drop the bass.
I can't help but think that you might be... Stringing us along.
All these puns are... Music to my ears.
handing Tavi a paper bag ,much like the ones
Breath in....Breath out...
hugged her so tight she couldn't breath
she noticed something that
She chuckled at the thought of Vinyl ,out of all ponies
1. Spacing is in the wrong place.
2. Breathe x2.
3. Breathe.
4. Extra spacing.
5. Spacing is in the wrong place.
Seems like a fitting ending. Oh hello incomplete tag why are you still here? Don't read this if you haven't read "The Mail-Mare with a Heart of.....Sugar?"
This sounds really good so far.I can't wait to read more.
How or you so calm about this
1. Are.
Don't brake The Derpster's heart!!!
If you watched Season 5 Episode 15 "Rarity Investigates" (Lot of Rarity Episodes...) there is pony during a greyscale moment playing the trumpet with a mute... Brass Bomb now canon!!!! (Just Kidding) That would be the BOMB though. (Ba-dum-tssss)
No. THAT IS NOT OKAY.
6444612 Is there a problem here?
6444666 YES THERE IS! DERPY'S FEELINGS!
6444667 I'm just gonna go... *runs off* I DON'T WANNA DIE!!!!!
she didn't uses her magic
1. Use.
You done derped. And not in the fun way as it seems for one of your readers... Preparing a giant muffin shaped coffin for you.
6445370 hahahahahahahaaahahahahahaahaha *BANG*
Aw derpy sad now don't worry derpy have a hug to feel better
I dont get that ending? what Three?
6478112 You'll see...
fought of the grunts.
importance and why he should play it at this hour.
Vinyl asked with and grin and a blush.
Excuse me bass, You accidentally a complete