Man, Feather Fall seems to be he most adorable pony in this story if he can make Shy and Luna momentarily stop their heartbeats out of cuteness overload. Also, Twilight enjoying the attention of Feather was hilarious, especially with the majiculation.
um... I think a sniky "n" just managed to bypass your story.
Also, 1253 is a LOT of friendship problem letters, If she sit out to just answer friendship problems for six hours each day she would need to spend about two minutes with each one on average.
If she sit out to just answer friendship problems for six hours each day she would need to spend about two minutes with each one on average.
Which sounds exactly like something Twilight would do, including a panic attack every now and then because she couldn't speed-write an essay for every single question. Then 30 minutes break in which Spike forcibly keeps her at the dinner table. Then 4 hours Princess duties actually related to running things. Then Coffee break (2 pints). Then 4-8 hours research with papers full of coffee stains. Pass out. Repeat.
6233049 They're normal ponies with normal lives, they just heed the call. That might be an interesting topic for the next chapter... But no, not taking requests, sorry. :)
6232859 yea it makes sense I just wrote that so that people can picture out the volume of work that would imply.
That sounds like a wonderfull lifestyle, but she still must take a brake from that every now and then to chill out and bond with her friends not to mention go in an adventure whenever the map activates.
With one stallion brown and built like a dump truck, and one white and built like a ballerina, I was half-expecting a tubby purple one with a brash personality.
I really enjoy this story so far. It's light, fluffy and very cute. I can't wait to see more. Also, would you mind warning me when the more adult chapters are, I'd like to skip those.
Miles away, Fluttershy suddenly “Hynnnngh”d! as she felt the balance of cute in the world shift towards Canterlot for a few moments. She clutched at her heart, setting her teacup down to breathe for a moment.
You brilliant man!
Also, funny chapter. I liked it. 6233375 Woot woot! Tasteful limit. Well done.
This is a fascinating idea and I'm interested in seeing more of it, explicit erotica or not.
Two criticisms, though:
1) Considering this is obviously going to be a chapter fic, I think you jumped into the scenario a little too quickly. You could easily spend another whole new 'first' chapter (or prologue or whatever) setting up Twilight's introduction to the harem, perhaps after a particularly stressful moment that reminds Celestia to introduce her to them. The gathering of nations thingy from 'Princess Spike' comes to mind as a recent example. Nothing makes sexy ideas pay off better than a proper setup, and I really think this story would be MUCH improved by a bit more in-depth lead-up.
2) Why exactly is it CELESTIA'S harem if all the princesses freely make use of it/them? Why is it not the ROYAL harem, or whatever? It's sorta misleading to call it Celestia's specifically. Small beans overall, but it's a pretty significant detail, I think, being the name of the fic and all.
Still, I'll definitely keep an eye on this one. Good job so far otherwise.
These are fucking priceless and I can't wait for the next one!
... I'd rather love to see the trio with their own spin-off stories, honestly. Feather's a total sweetie, Mountain's AWESOME and Caramel just sounds like a book dork's best friend. Also, I have a mental image of Caramel, Twi and Dash dorking out for HOURS about the Daring Do books.
6233375 That's nice to hear, I think I found another favorite story, You would be surprised the number of mature stories with the sex tag that don't actually include any clop.
Harem (herəm) noun 1) When reffering to a part of a structure (in former times): The separate part of a Muslim household reserved for wives, concubines, and female servants. 2) When reffering to people: The women in a (Muslim) household, including the mother, sisters, wives, concubines, daughters, entertainers, and servants.
TL;DR- The term "harem" only applies to the females.
Okay, I loved the story and then I noticed the author. Then I said to myself, "Oh! That's why this is brilliant!" Excellent work as always. Another of your stories is now in my favorites.
6235492 In patriarchal Earth tongue, yes, but nothing about the etymology is exclusively gender-specific. "Harem" simply derives from the word for "forbidden" and it is not inconceivable that in a matriarchal society that has this as a cultural institution that the word wouldn't have taken on a different meaning.
Of course, arguing cross-universe linguistics rapidly becomes a rabbit hole because you can start headcanonizing any historical linguistic development you wish. The point is, if there WERE an formal English word for this social grouping it would be more appropriate to substitute it for "harem" here, but lacking one I think the author can be forgiven. Maybe the word exists but I don't know it, in which case I would welcome enlightenment, because Googling "male harem" just leads to all sorts of inappropriateness unrelated to linguistic concerns.
I'm enjoying the story so far. The guys have unique and interesting personalities that would be fun to get into more.
Also, the question of what a male-harem is called was bugging me too so I looked it up...and I kid you not, the closest term for it in English, that I've found so far is "stable".
Good for Twilight, except now Luna has something planned or just blackmail.
The Fluttershy effect. Ha.
6229755 Glad someone made something fitting. Just had to repeat it a few times.
6235151 The second one was something that popped into my head once you brought it up. Though maybe they were chosen by her and she has that claim of getting them together for the use of royalty? Now I feel bad for the usage of the word 'use' like that, but yeah.
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6229755 I thought it was clever.
Man, Feather Fall seems to be he most adorable pony in this story if he can make Shy and Luna momentarily stop their heartbeats out of cuteness overload. Also, Twilight enjoying the attention of Feather was hilarious, especially with the majiculation.
Ha
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Uh... okay. Well. Um. Yeah, okay. I'm... I'm keeping an eye on this one.
Alright, this is beautiful. Wonderfully in character.
Okay, new favourite story on FIMFic.
Bless this glorious story
This chapter was sweet and funny. I loved it. The bad thing is I could see Luna being into dress up.
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6230775 hahahaha epic
um... I think a sniky "n" just managed to bypass your story.
Also, 1253 is a LOT of friendship problem letters, If she sit out to just answer friendship problems for six hours each day she would need to spend about two minutes with each one on average.
~Leonzilla
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Which sounds exactly like something Twilight would do, including a panic attack every now and then because she couldn't speed-write an essay for every single question.
Then 30 minutes break in which Spike forcibly keeps her at the dinner table.
Then 4 hours Princess duties actually related to running things.
Then Coffee break (2 pints).
Then 4-8 hours research with papers full of coffee stains.
Pass out.
Repeat.
I like, Question are the harem males immortal or some spell thingy? Also will you take requests for future chapters? fetishes?
6233049 They're normal ponies with normal lives, they just heed the call. That might be an interesting topic for the next chapter...
But no, not taking requests, sorry. :)
6232859 yea it makes sense I just wrote that so that people can picture out the volume of work that would imply.
That sounds like a wonderfull lifestyle, but she still must take a brake from that every now and then to chill out and bond with her friends not to mention go in an adventure whenever the map activates.
~Leonzilla
With one stallion brown and built like a dump truck, and one white and built like a ballerina, I was half-expecting a tubby purple one with a brash personality.
I really enjoy this story so far. It's light, fluffy and very cute. I can't wait to see more. Also, would you mind warning me when the more adult chapters are, I'd like to skip those.
OK...love it...the end of 2 was epic
6233318 This is about as racy as it's going to get, I think. :)
where will there be sex?
You brilliant man!
Also, funny chapter. I liked it.
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Woot woot! Tasteful limit. Well done.
Please don't stop working on this story before it's finished. It's been lovely, funny and a good read so far!
...Huh.
Nice.
6229755 Pfffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffthahahahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!
Who even is that??
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Peter New, voice of Big Macintosh.
6234223 Nice!
very nice
This is a fascinating idea and I'm interested in seeing more of it, explicit erotica or not.
Two criticisms, though:
1) Considering this is obviously going to be a chapter fic, I think you jumped into the scenario a little too quickly. You could easily spend another whole new 'first' chapter (or prologue or whatever) setting up Twilight's introduction to the harem, perhaps after a particularly stressful moment that reminds Celestia to introduce her to them. The gathering of nations thingy from 'Princess Spike' comes to mind as a recent example. Nothing makes sexy ideas pay off better than a proper setup, and I really think this story would be MUCH improved by a bit more in-depth lead-up.
2) Why exactly is it CELESTIA'S harem if all the princesses freely make use of it/them? Why is it not the ROYAL harem, or whatever? It's sorta misleading to call it Celestia's specifically. Small beans overall, but it's a pretty significant detail, I think, being the name of the fic and all.
Still, I'll definitely keep an eye on this one. Good job so far otherwise.
--CG
These are fucking priceless and I can't wait for the next one!
... I'd rather love to see the trio with their own spin-off stories, honestly. Feather's a total sweetie, Mountain's AWESOME and Caramel just sounds like a book dork's best friend. Also, I have a mental image of Caramel, Twi and Dash dorking out for HOURS about the Daring Do books.
Fucking Feather Fall, trying to give me diabetes.
I want to know more about Luna's experiences with the harem. They sound fun.
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That's nice to hear, I think I found another favorite story, You would be surprised the number of mature stories with the sex tag that don't actually include any clop.
Hate to be rude here, but someone has to say it!
Harem (herəm)
noun
1)
When reffering to a part of a structure (in former times):
The separate part of a Muslim household reserved for wives, concubines, and female servants.
2)
When reffering to people:
The women in a (Muslim) household, including the mother, sisters, wives, concubines, daughters, entertainers, and servants.
TL;DR-
The term "harem" only applies to the females.
Okay, I loved the story and then I noticed the author. Then I said to myself, "Oh! That's why this is brilliant!" Excellent work as always. Another of your stories is now in my favorites.
Immediately thought of this:
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6235492 You need to stop being everywhere I go. plz k thx <3
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I am everywhere.
My omnipresence is not to be trifled with by mere mortals.
All the likes and faves, take them!
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In patriarchal Earth tongue, yes, but nothing about the etymology is exclusively gender-specific. "Harem" simply derives from the word for "forbidden" and it is not inconceivable that in a matriarchal society that has this as a cultural institution that the word wouldn't have taken on a different meaning.
Of course, arguing cross-universe linguistics rapidly becomes a rabbit hole because you can start headcanonizing any historical linguistic development you wish. The point is, if there WERE an formal English word for this social grouping it would be more appropriate to substitute it for "harem" here, but lacking one I think the author can be forgiven. Maybe the word exists but I don't know it, in which case I would welcome enlightenment, because Googling "male harem" just leads to all sorts of inappropriateness unrelated to linguistic concerns.
6236101 It sounds better than "Celestia's Bed Buddies"
Okay.
Sleeping Twilight is a chainsaw in terms of sound then
Have a fave, my good man.
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THE DREAM POLICE, THEY LIVE INSIDE OF MY HEAD! THE DREAM POLICE, THEY COME TO ME IN MY BED!
I'm enjoying the story so far. The guys have unique and interesting personalities that would be fun to get into more.
Also, the question of what a male-harem is called was bugging me too so I looked it up...and I kid you not, the closest term for it in English, that I've found so far is "stable".
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... I have missed a fantastic opportunity. Dangit.
XD
Don't you dare cancel. This is too funny.
Aren't all of them siblings because Luna and Celestia are is Cadences' aunts, and Shinning Armor. (Twilights brother) married Cadence?
Commence read.
Good for Twilight, except now Luna has something planned or just blackmail.
The Fluttershy effect. Ha.
6229755 Glad someone made something fitting. Just had to repeat it a few times.
6235151 The second one was something that popped into my head once you brought it up. Though maybe they were chosen by her and she has that claim of getting them together for the use of royalty? Now I feel bad for the usage of the word 'use' like that, but yeah.