Nice world building you have going here, first time I ever read a story with completely reversed social norms with gender. So a Mare saying, "Get back in the field!" to a stallion would be like a man saying, "Get back in the kitchen!" to a woman.
And Damn! So Lyra is like a magical Bruce Lee in terms of power?? I wonder, in this story is Lyra Human obsessed as usual? She has been brought up a few times, and from what we know she likes Lero, so I'm guessing we'll actually met her sometime in the story.
One thing that majorly bugs me about this chapter is how Applejack is completely out of character I can understand where it's coming from, setting her as simply not understanding Lero rather than disliking him. However, Applejack is always incredibly open and welcoming in the show which really doesn't get presented here at all. Instead, she comes off here as being very unfriendly which contradicts her character in the show.
727342 Interesting point, but at the same time Rainbow is a good friend and she's dealing with something VERY inequestrian. We don't know how AJ feels about aliens really now do we?
Sex aside (I'm not a big sex person, being asexual and all that, but I appreciate the writing... a lot. It makes me a bit jealous of sexual people), this is honestly the best fan-fiction I've ever read. Seriously, the jokes are spot on, the delivery is pretty damn good. It's very... balanced surprisingly.
727342 she wasn't very open minded or welcoming to Zecora so I could see her being wary around Lero, besides she is at least friendly to him even if she isn't close.
I didn't pick up on this until I reread this, but is the following line:
“Or… well… as bedroom toys, tools to be used to create more mares. I know there are a lot of books that romanticize or… or fetishize those periods,” Twilight looked faintly disgusted by the statement
a crack at the Gor books or just a generalized statment?
@w@ wow :D man im finding these different forms of martial arts just as interesting as equestrian culture buck >w> just give me heavy volumes of equestrian history culture some guides to equine phsycology and different equine martial arts and id be twilight studying nonstop and utterly fascinated by it all :DD fantastic story and world building!
Not gonna lie. You totally lost me with all the martial arts stuff. I don't mean I didn't understand it, I mean I just totally lost interest. ...ah, what the hell...
777526 they have the strenght and speed of lolz not even mr wesker(mr whiskers) would dare fight them but they would be destroyed if they had to fight Libert Prime
As an Mixed Martial Artist who has studied martial arts for over 10 years, your inclusion of Martial Arts in this story has just made me love you even more. This is so AWESOME!
When they started talking about pony martial arts. I thought it was kinda silly, but then the names of the styles, and the way Rainbow talked about them made them seem like any other cultures martial art.
One thing I didn't like about the chapter was very small. It was when Rainbow mentioned that Lyra could kill. I know this is a mature fic, and I know it is even a clopfic, but saying "kill" in the MLP context just seems, off.
1551219 You're fine with Equestria having martial arts, but you think that saying that Lyra could kill if she wanted to is off? Think about what martial arts are. Think about how they develop. While they're probably mostly used for sparring in modern Equestria, that's not how they started.
I'd like to see Lyra destroy something, like a large boulder, of perhaps a low-level mountain. Whatever, it's still my new un-canon realism. LYRA HEARTSTRINGS, GRAND MASTER OF THE STILL WAY. Sounds fucking incredible.
Twilight was grinning widely, clopping her forehooves together in glee. “Oh, I’m so happy for both of you! I just knew the two of you would be happy together!”
love Twilight right there. Haha
Applejack shook her head. “I never even heard of a pegasus strong enough to learn earth pony martial arts before I met Rainbow.” She glared at the grinning pegasus. “You’re just unnatural, girl.”
Lyra Heartstrings - warrior poet? On Earth, there have been poets who were also formidable duellists, Lord Byron comes to mind. There is something about the artistic mindset and the way of the warrior that occasionally meshes. An interesting different way of looking at Lyra. I suppose, given that any unicorn martial art would naturally include magical telekinesis and other magical effects, I suppose she's almost a Jedi in a way.
1853469 Cyrano De Bergerac. Beat a dude to a pulp in a sword fight while he free styled a boss mode poem (Do forgive the rather crude explanation. I seem to have forgotten the proper terms)
Dunno who wrote this (being submitted anon through someone, unless I read the summary wrong), but I'd like to say I'm enjoying the story so far. The idea of pony martial arts and then having Rainbow Dash and even Lyra having had learned them is quite amusing.
awwwww........ you make me all sappy
The amount of awesome you just made Lyra increase by is OVER 9000!!!
oh dear,
mental note:
avoid Twilight Sparkle on bad days,
Avoid Lyra at all costs
or bring Very long range sniper rifle.
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Or explosives...lots and lots of explosives.
642871 Orbital strike? You'd have to time it around the Sparkle family's shield capabilities, though.
Nope. Just bring Pinkie Pie. The disadvantage universal to all fighting styles is that they require physics.
653030 what if someone learned the legendary pinkie style? dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Pinkie_Pie_lolface.png what do you think would happen? well OTHER then becoming the 1 most dangerous person in equestria besides pinkie pie herself...1.bp.blogspot.com/-UxfoO2LTric/ThSKLIoy9iI/AAAAAAAAAAQ/SaeM77s7RVU/s220/kung-fu.gif
Nice world building you have going here, first time I ever read a story with completely reversed social norms with gender. So a Mare saying, "Get back in the field!" to a stallion would be like a man saying, "Get back in the kitchen!" to a woman.
And Damn! So Lyra is like a magical Bruce Lee in terms of power?? I wonder, in this story is Lyra Human obsessed as usual? She has been brought up a few times, and from what we know she likes Lero, so I'm guessing we'll actually met her sometime in the story.
One thing that majorly bugs me about this chapter is how Applejack is completely out of character
I can understand where it's coming from, setting her as simply not understanding Lero rather than disliking him. However, Applejack is always incredibly open and welcoming in the show which really doesn't get presented here at all. Instead, she comes off here as being very unfriendly which contradicts her character in the show.
647718 Screw that. Just drop the moon on her. That's several stages above orbital strike and probably a few steps above colony drop even.
727342 Interesting point, but at the same time Rainbow is a good friend and she's dealing with something VERY inequestrian. We don't know how AJ feels about aliens really now do we?
I've been enjoying pretty much every second of reading this.
oh, I see that you are very skilled at fighting hand-to-hand, I just happen to be very skilled at shooting as well at being very prepared.
This is one of the few stories where Rainbow is sappy and still reads and acts like Rainbow.
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I see a FoE reference (AppleSnack)
728673 You called me?
LOL Lyra is a grand-master level badass
Stallions are bedroom toys for mares? That's pathetic! A mockery! A joke! IMPOSSIBRU!! But not entirely bad for the stallion.
Lyra can kill somepony in half a second from over 300 body lengths away? Can she kill a Sniper Elite?
If Lyra is that good, then how much power does Celestia or Luna have?
777526 Well seeing as they can affect the paths of heavenly bodies. I'd say stupidly powerful.
777526>>778806
Oh, just wait until you read the newest chapter
Sex aside (I'm not a big sex person, being asexual and all that, but I appreciate the writing... a lot. It makes me a bit jealous of sexual people), this is honestly the best fan-fiction I've ever read. Seriously, the jokes are spot on, the delivery is pretty damn good. It's very... balanced surprisingly.
727342 she wasn't very open minded or welcoming to Zecora so I could see her being wary around Lero, besides she is at least friendly to him even if she isn't close.
I didn't pick up on this until I reread this, but is the following line:
“Or… well… as bedroom toys, tools to be used to create more mares. I know there are a lot of books that romanticize or… or fetishize those periods,” Twilight looked faintly disgusted by the statement
a crack at the Gor books or just a generalized statment?
it feels wierd to read this while listening to slipknot just sayin
@w@ wow :D man im finding these different forms of martial arts just as interesting as equestrian culture buck >w> just give me heavy volumes of equestrian history culture some guides to equine phsycology and different equine martial arts and id be twilight studying nonstop and utterly fascinated by it all :DD fantastic story and world building!
i think dash is forgetting about Pinkie Pie style :pinkie happy:
(or Dalek Jujitsu)
lol it took me a couple of seconds to understand that not being in the fields was like not being in the kitchen
Very clever. I love what you've done regarding the difference between human and pony societies. Very insightful.
My mind after seeing all of those fighting styles
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Not gonna lie. You totally lost me with all the martial arts stuff. I don't mean I didn't understand it, I mean I just totally lost interest.
...ah, what the hell...
Oh sweet Celestia! Every time we see Lyra sitting around on her flank, she's actually meditating on the terrible power granted by the Still Way!
pony martial arts styles huh.... surprised "fallen caesar style" didn't make the cut
642650TACTICTAL LYTA INBOUND RUN!!!!!!!!
777526 they have the strenght and speed of lolz not even mr wesker(mr whiskers) would dare fight them but they would be destroyed if they had to fight Libert Prime
As an Mixed Martial Artist who has studied martial arts for over 10 years, your inclusion of Martial Arts in this story has just made me love you even more. This is so AWESOME!
Lyra can kick butt?
Now that's something I wanna see!
Mr.Handy
How may I serve you, master?
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...not that I really want to...
777526 Obviously god-level.
When they started talking about pony martial arts. I thought it was kinda silly, but then the names of the styles, and the way Rainbow talked about them made them seem like any other cultures martial art.
One thing I didn't like about the chapter was very small. It was when Rainbow mentioned that Lyra could kill. I know this is a mature fic, and I know it is even a clopfic, but saying "kill" in the MLP context just seems, off.
1551219
You're fine with Equestria having martial arts, but you think that saying that Lyra could kill if she wanted to is off? Think about what martial arts are. Think about how they develop. While they're probably mostly used for sparring in modern Equestria, that's not how they started.
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Oh. Oh God. I lost it. Everywhere.
I think I cracked a rib laughing.
642650 forget rifles, I think multiple Tsar Bomba strikes would hardly but a dent in her.
DANGIT!
I NEED SLEEEEEEP!!
The way the Still Way is described reminds me of the Bene Gesserit of Dune and their Weirding Way.
Lyra is grandmaster of martial arts and is an unrivaled killing machine.....Headcanon ascended. Absolutely brilliant.
Did anyone else think of Avatar (the cartoon) while reading about the fighting styles?
I'd like to see Lyra destroy something, like a large boulder, of perhaps a low-level mountain. Whatever, it's still my new un-canon realism. LYRA HEARTSTRINGS, GRAND MASTER OF THE STILL WAY. Sounds fucking incredible.
Twilight was grinning widely, clopping her forehooves together in glee. “Oh, I’m so happy for both of you! I just knew the two of you would be happy together!”
love Twilight right there. Haha
Applejack shook her head. “I never even heard of a pegasus strong enough to learn earth pony martial arts before I met Rainbow.” She glared at the grinning pegasus. “You’re just unnatural, girl.”
COUGH ROIDRAGE/SNOWFLAKE COUGH xD
Lyra Heartstrings - warrior poet? On Earth, there have been poets who were also formidable duellists, Lord Byron comes to mind. There is something about the artistic mindset and the way of the warrior that occasionally meshes. An interesting different way of looking at Lyra. I suppose, given that any unicorn martial art would naturally include magical telekinesis and other magical effects, I suppose she's almost a Jedi in a way.
1853469 Cyrano De Bergerac. Beat a dude to a pulp in a sword fight while he free styled a boss mode poem (Do forgive the rather crude explanation. I seem to have forgotten the proper terms)
Dunno who wrote this (being submitted anon through someone, unless I read the summary wrong), but I'd like to say I'm enjoying the story so far. The idea of pony martial arts and then having Rainbow Dash and even Lyra having had learned them is quite amusing.