His eyes were blue, and hers were red. They were both pretending to be things they weren't, and that would eventually be their downfall.
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This was a good start to the story. Try to expand your characters in future chapters. Really get into their heads. A little more description would make this better too. I really loved the song. I'm hoping for more! (Songs and chapters)
id love to see where this goes. I will give you one peice of advice I was given once. "The reader is smart, treat them like they are. Don't TELL them, SHOW them."
Actually, Vinyl's Scratch's eyes are just like Rainbow Dash's! It's a magenta-ish purple!
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looking forward to more. Also, did you write the last song? It's really good
Nice start!
would like more
came here because I saw Foo Fighters in the description, stayed for the story
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Thank you, The F8ful 1! Yes, I did write it, and it only took a few minutes.
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When I first wrote this story on FanFiction.com, it was before Vinyl's eyes were revealed. As most people know, everyone thought her eyes were red for some reason, and if embraced the new truth instead of the old onethen I would have to rename this story 'Eveque and Azure.'
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For if you show them, they will not be use their imagination, a wonderous machine everyone owns, capable of creating rightfully felled dragons, knights in aluminum siding, and muffins of massive size.
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Touche
638344 Hmmmm... okay!
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What do you mean, okay? That I should rename it?
638601 That you should just leave as is since you already made it on FanFiction.net
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'mkay.
I can dig it. Lookin' forward to more.
you based it off of Foo Fighters. and while i disagree with you on song choice, *cough*MonkeyWrench*cough*, i still love it. now, if only you had a proofreader. *wink wink nudge nudge*
Awesome song? Check.
Really good story? Check.
Read all in one day due to shortness? Check!
Twilight is happy, her list is complete.
lol
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Hey, Luna Eclipse? I meant to say for if you tell them instead. I was trying to agree with you, and looking over my comments I realize I said the wrong thing.
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Oh, haha. 'saite!
Okay, everyone, I'm actually back now! I'll try to work on my stories as much as I can.