• Member Since 9th May, 2012
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DoctorSerious


I'm very Serious, do I have anything else to say?

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After a party Pinkie pie had given, Fluttershy has to walk home all alone, until she meets a mysterious stallion. Both seem to get along well and a new friendship is born between the two. But will others believe it's only a friendship? And will their feelings for one another get the better of them?

New story time. First try didn't work (got blocked for making writing it like a script), but changed it now. Hopefully for the better.

Please enjoy!

P.s. I do not own the picture.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 6 )

A like from me, but don't center every sentence and add more details to the story( what I meant is dialogue is fine, just add details about their surrounding). There is a few grammar errors made. It makes it hard for readers trying to read it and establish a setting or plot. Sorry for sounding rude.

Well I know who owns the picture (I used it in one of my stories): MetalPandora at Deviantart.

i love this it is my farortie yet:pinkiehappy::heart::twilightsmile::raritystarry::ajsmug::pinkiesmile::scootangel::moustache:

628441 No no no, I appreciate it. I will change it if you people prefer it that way. Thanks for telling me what I did wrong.

629815 Thank you! I'm glad you like it. :twilightsmile:

628689 Than 100% credit to the artist, picture is just plain awesome :pinkiehappy:

interesting,,. good grammar from what I see, from a poet's perpestive... nicly done... keep it up...

I give it a 4 Derpys out of 5 Derpys...

:derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2::derpytongue2:

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaand Duck Face :duck:

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