Follow our deadly protagonist Sinso Yadarashi as he journeys to the magical land of Equestria and has to survive in a home that isn't his. How will he proceed? Well, lets find out shall we?
As a warning, I just wanted to tell everyone that this is my first story. So the quality may not be the same as some other stories that you may have read. Constructive criticism is more than welcome.
P.S. There is a chance that i might add the romance tag eventually.
P.P.S. If you fav the story, could you please like it as well?
I'm gonna try to rewrite this and see how i do.
Chapters (1)
It's alright I guess.
its good
itscool
I see some mistakes that I make, but not that many. I like that there is now a future assassin's creed for once! I think this is the only one of it's kind. This is the first future tech assassin's creed story I've seen on FIMFiction. Anyway, nice story you got going so far. I'll keep in touch with this one.
Do your anthros have tails? And you have my interest, fave
6720019 Yes they do.
It's a good story for now. I should know, I've read a lot of them. Basically I'll just have to wait and see how the next few chapters go before I can tell you if you're doing good or bad. Just a tip though. As this is an Asassins Creed fic, I suggest you change the rating to M. Since I assume he will be killing much to the displeasure of the peace loving ponies. Also an M rating will give you a little more leeway in writing the romance should you put it in there. You probably will put romance in there eventually. Stories without it are either dark fics or very short stories. When I say short stories I mean other than one shots which are short single chapter stories that include romance in most cases.
Pretty good so far, the whole future assasin is a good idea.
So no pony muzzles/faces?
6744900 I am sorry if you wanted them to but no they dont.
6747697
Okay. But why nit. You do already basically have everything else, so why keep it where they are some weird human thing like a dranai?
6747710 two things.
1. Because thats just how I always pictured them to look.
2. Do you mean the draenei?
6747710 ya know what. the whole muzzle thing actually sounds better now that I think about it.
6747724
Ah. Okay then. Thank you for answering my question, and I am sorry if I came off like an a-hole about it.
Yeah. That. Sorry, forgot how it was spelled.
6747725
Please, only do such if that is what you really want to do.
6747779 you didnt come off as an a-hole so dont worry.
When is the next chapter coming out?
6799777 dude i have like six half baked ideas that i am trying to turn into stories and if you add that with the lack of spare time then the whole process moves pretty slow. so in short, its gonna be awhile
6801722 ok just wanted to know.
Dude ive been waititng for a really long time now when is the next chapter coming out?
6857335 I am really sorry about the delay i wont waste your time with excuses so i'll just cut to the chase its still gonna be a little while but i'm making progress.
6861956 Ok i know im rushing you but hurry up
6861956
I take it the rewrite isn’t coming… I’d have loved to see where you took this but oh well.