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EbonyDanger


That one fan of MLP, who makes her plot way darker and complexer then intended. And the person, who roleplays more then she writes fanfiction. *ON A WRITING HIATUS FOR NOW*

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For years and centuries Luna has lived with the fact, that nopony has ever seen her night. Her subjects shun it away, despite for what she has done for them. Her own sister starts to foccus on her duties, overseeing the troubles of her younger sibling. Luna is filled with hate, anger, bitterness, sadness and jealousy. A dangerous mixture.
Her life changes, when she meets a dark, shadowy Alicorn during one faithful night. This mare shows sympathie and caring. She tries to help Luna the best she can. When Luna fails to ask Celestia for a very certain favour, the time of ignorance had reached its limits. Desperate, angry, sad and frustrated Luna agrees for a deal, that will change her entire life....

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This was really cool! :)

This is a great story, but I would definitely recommend getting an Editor. There are some very jarring errors in the story.

The East Tower was the complete opposite from the East Tower.

The huge windows usually were floated by the sun's light

Her voice sounded so thine.

The blue mare did not even cared to get up

6079846
Really stupid question, but what kind of mistake did I made in which line.

6080434

No problem.

All those lines had mistakes. The first one, you compare the EAST tower to the EAST tower. That should be west on one of them.
The second line should say flooded, not floated.
In the third one, the word thin shouldn`t have a E.
The forth one should say care instead of cared.

6080473
Okay, then I can change it. Sorry, I did not read the correction probably in this one.

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