Princess Celestia young and foolish had commited a grave error. Long ago to create her empire she tried to eliminate any threat and gain any power she could to protect her kingdom. In one such gambit she tried to recruit the King of Storms. An alicorn with full control over the weather when he fought back she ended him with the elements of harmony. In doing so she lost the power setting it free as a ghost that none should summon the storm. The king however put a spell on his power making it seek a new host with one condition, the host could not be equine.
Chapters (7)
Wow out less then a day and already doing better then my other story. Hey feel free to leave a comment it can be what ever and of you like something in particular in this story or feel that I did something wrong let me know. I'll see what I can do
A few spelling errors, but overall alright.
good start
lets see where this goes
Alright chapter two hope you guys like it.
Can you do something to separate the perspectives so we the readers don't have to spend half a paragraph figuring who's perspective we are in?
I'll try something for the next chapter and see if you guys like it. Just know I'm doing it on my phone also if you guys like the changes I'll have my guy with a computer put it in the previous chapters when he corrects them.
Nope.
Lol I'm either doing something right or something wrong but
Yep
This is a good story so far, and I can't wait to read more of it.
New chapter and as promised changed up the style a little so tell me what you think.
It's a good chapter but, that doesn't change the fact that you need an editor. But it is easier to read than last chapter. Nonetheless I love he concept. But there is no excuse for Celestia to be a complete and total idiot. Even if his sister wants Tempest's memories removed still isn't acceptable.
Yeah my editor is being lax he was supposed to get the corrections done sunday but didn't so until further notice I'm still going to release "as is" so that I don't end up releasing like twenty all at once every two months or so. Once I have some actual internet it should improve quality by a little as well. Also Google is horrid as far as vocabulary and spell checking. Over half the big words I use I have to type by hand based on how well I remember to spell them. Sometimes I even have to correct spelling cause its double tapping my keys
Ps: I'm also thinking of Dash being his love interest but I would gladly go for a fan favorite instead just let me know who you want to see or if you want a OC created by me
6098893 I was hoping for a Luna love interest. I know this would be kinda weird since he has her uncle's memories but maybe when he has it figured out and his mind is not shredding itself?
Ok 1 fer Luna like I said mostly popular demand as far as side parts of the story
I'll give it about a week then anounce what's most popular. Oh but I will throw this out ther Luna is my favorite pony followed by Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy. Then of Coarse there's my OC Sonica Rain from my story Knight of Bone.
Vinyl Scratch as his love interest!
luna
Hey guys sorry its taking so long to write the next chapter just gonna be a busy couple of weeks got a job interview and my dad is visiting from vegas so might be a bit before I can write any thing.
Ok guys well out of those of you that voted we got more Lunas than anyone so luna will be the love interest.
more please.
6881910 oh I am planning on continuing the story I've just been feeling really drained since I've been unemployed however now that I have a job I should be back in the groove soon. Also I've been working on a reimagining of the show so look forward to the first chapter of that one soon.
6905045 Ok.
Woot finally finished the new chapter again I hope you all enjoy it. Also as always feel free to leave a comment.
so is this story coming back from the dead? i hope so cuz it looks really good just from the description.
okay... the sudden character shifts are making this story almost unreadable, that's what the divider function is for, use it to switch character perspectives.
7063545 yes story is back from the dead and honestly o didn't know about the divider function I'll look for it a I right the next chapter. It will appear next time if I can use it, I'm still using mobile so I may not have access to it sry.
So far so good I like this story and watching Celestia squirm from her mistakes. I just hope you don't make her suffer too much but she does deserve some
7065256 truth be told is it fun but now on to the enjoyment of starting the love arc.
Not that I'm complaining, but why did you make this story anthro?
7198962 cause when his powers manifest its going to be as a spectral stormcloud alicorn that covers his body
7199130 that sounds really cool.
7285477 Right I thought so too
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This story dead?
[Insert Obvious Storm King Joke Here]
well i don't know if your still writing this story or not but if you are i hope for more soon
Where's the anthro exactly?
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