An Emerl displace fic. Basically it's a guy cosplay as emerl gets teleported to Equestia except the the tree of Harmony intercept his landing. Now he has serve as a vessel for the tree of Harmony in his head while protecting his new home and charge.
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So a couple of things that need fixing. Will look at the rest later as i have real life stuff to be doing.
Fluttershy - Fluttershy Names should always be capitalised
pinkie pie - Pinkie Pie
more nature - natuaral
an unease feeling - uneasy
I curse under my breath that some jerks must have glued my helmet I wished that whoever done this I that person gets turn into a nice tasty treat made by the living carcass as I deal with this crazy psycho. - Very long sentense, try saying that out loud with out taking a breath. I suggest adding in either a commor or fullstop after helmet
instead of a confuse situation where - confusing
blasting him to a ticket to hell - May just want to put it as "blasting him to hell"
I am confuse if either she experience displace before or that she read my mind without permission -I am just going to redo this as it is a pain. I am unsure if she has either experienced displaced before or is she has read my mind without permission.
mysteriously transport to - and was mysteriously transported to
there involve the - involves
being displace, what - displaced
complicated I have seen way - complicated and I have seen way
I will like to - I would like to
before I can continue - before i continue
the marriage besides - the marriage and besides
she rise up - she rose up
if you want accept - if you would accept
accept a offer - accept an offer
does this entitled to me - entitle
It peak my interest to gaining something out of this humiliation. - It peaks my interest to be gaining something out of this humiliation.
that I sync your - synced
be damage or destroy if it - be damaged or destroyed if it
be erase from - be erased from
be replace with - replaced
was tackle down - tackled
revive you ass. - your
a displace involves - displaced
become prepare against - prepared
a displace will - displaced Just use ctrl F and find all these and fix them as im not going to list them from here onwards only at the start of a chapter if i find it, but i will leave a not to ctrl F for them
not help to cry - not help but to cry
be cherish just - cherished
individually, mix, and - mixed
flaw to overzealous on - flaw to be overzealous on
I only stare that mountain shrank in amount of seconds, - I only stare as the mountain shrank in a matter of seconds,
she stop about - stopped
I just saw a mare slobbered down a large amount of food - I would say that slobbered is wrong as it doesn't really do it justice, something like "I just saw a mare devour a large amount of food"
several setting about - settings
and enhance base what I ate. - Not sure what you mean with this and it doesn't really make and sense so i cannot make and suggestions orther than maybe removing it.
steak through my - steak into my
juicy, tasteful meat - juicy, tasty meat
have miss for- have missed for
making these meats before - making this meat before
have bond well - bonded
to you body - to your body
was force to - forced
but warn her - warned
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