128 minutes, 54 seconds
128 minutes, 54 seconds
The sun was now at a reasonable height in the sky and it had risen just as much as the audience’s numbers had dwindled. Only the sternest and most invested ponies dared to stay in the remote silence of the hall.
Luna, as always, was bobbing her head and listening to music. She, nor her sister, had said a word.
Celestia’s eyes had fully reddened. She took comfort in the fact that her sister was suffering the same fate. A rim of water was forming under each eye. She desperately wanted to blink it out, it was bothering her to no end, but this had become more than just a silly contest. It was for will power… who would survive the longest? Was it the sun, the object that glowed passionately all days of the week only to set over an imaginary line called the horizon?
Or, was it the moon? Even though it produced no light of its own, it could reflect all light and give its own luminescent glow. It did not run on fuel, it was willing to shine as long as the sun was. Truly, the match was even.
She thought of speaking… but moving her mouth might cause an involuntary twitch. Celestia waited…
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620079 TOO INTERESTING
YOU WIN dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Luna_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/lolface_Celestia.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Sweetie_Belle_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Spike_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Pinkie_Pie_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Rarity_lolface.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applejack_lolface.png
620104
Woo hoo!
Go Luna!
I just hope luna doesn't do anything rash...
inb4 they break out toothpicks to prop eyelids up...
Man this is intense.
You know, it's pretty hard to make a feature-worthy story out of a two hour staring contest. But you managed it.
Luna will win. Obviously.
This amuses me.
My money is on Derpy breaking in and stealing the muffin whilst they're still staring at each other.
620649
Do you not notice the "incomplete" tag?
THERE IS STILL MORE TO COME!
620968
What's with everyone being hell-bent on Derpy? There's no derpy tag!
621260:
Well thats why it would be a complete suprise on her appearing and taking the muffin!
Oh and congradulations on making the Featured Bar.
Dat picture. Not sure if gusta.
Yeah, my bet's also on somepony going and eating the muffin, oblivious to the plight of the staring contest.
And then, suffering the wrath of the goddesses.
THIS FIC IS TOTAL SHIT.
There's no freaking reason behind this and the entire concept has less substance than a Molecule of Dark Matter.
Kindly stop posting this, for it is full of shit.
Not to mention your absolutely atrocious grammar.
"Celestia promptly greeted her solar counterpart" - I think you mean "lunar"
"Celestia was apparently bemused at the prospect" - "bemused" means "confused" or "puzzled"; you probably want a different word.
621704
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When did I make the featured bar
621810
I figured that I'd get a post like this and regardless if it's sarcasm or not I feel as if I should adress it.
First of all, if you don't like it or the subject matter, why would you even read it? I'm assuming you're a brony because you -are- on a fanfiction website dedicated to writing, so where is your love and tolerance that many of you seem to hypocritically shout? I find it complete and utter crap when people post comments like this that have nothing constructive to offer. Do I expect to get praise from everyone? No, that's stupid, but the least you could do is offer constructive criticism on how I could improve. I mean, obviously if it's shit, you know how to make it better.
Yes, I should have had my editor run through this because I know my grammar is far from flawless. This was written on a whim and it's a mystery to me as to how it became rather popular. I will ask him to run through this when it's done. Hell, even this comment didn't go through spellcheck. If I mess something up, point it out. I'll fix it.
So, the next time you feel like telling people that their work is shit, remember what community you're a part of. I'll do my part and tolerate your angry post, now it's up to you to be the better person.
621931
Yeah, that's what happens when you write this late at night. I'll fix those now, thank you very much!
I need to read this. Now. Godspeed and goodluck.
622646
... Love and Tolerance? Seriously? That died a long time ago, you will never catch me preaching Blind Loving and Tolerance. However your point remains valid, so in this post I shall explain exactly why your fic is shit.
In chapter one you start using old words such as "Thee" yet you spell it each time as "The." Though obviously hast not studied thy language properly.
Also, I cannot begin to fathom how after being back for so long, this is the first time Luna tastes one of these Muffins. Nor can I understand as to how a staring contest will solve anything.
But the worst part is that I haven't seen your chapters really say anything other than a gradual reddening of their eyes. No proper plot development is happening. I guess there is plot development, but the plot that is developing has more holes than Swiss cheese that went through a hole puncher.
622817
Reviewing your points made:
Again, written on a whim so I wasn't looking at many of the smaller details. Continuancy errors were bound to happen. Need I say it again that I have no idea why this is popular?
I can fathom how she never tasted a muffin like this. It could have been a recent creation. A lot can happen in a thousand years. Think about the evolution of the cellphone. How long has that been around and how much has that improved?
Edit: clarifying recent, as in was introduced maybe a day ot two ago. The point is that she never had one, she loved it, and now they're fighting over the last one.
What, plot development? It's a staring contest! But you forget to take into account this a "Random" tagged fanfiction.
Also, there is the Nightmare moon tag still left... room for more errors? Eeyup!
622646:
Well when I posted the comment it showed this story there.
This makes my eyes water from watching it, I have to rub my eyes
Just imagining those eyes gets me every time, owccchhhh 
This made my eyes water...
Im blinking the whole time... GO LUNAAA!
I need some snacks... I am getting hungry...
The pointless argument between that Fuliam guy and the author is more intense than the story.
(By teh way, Fuliam is taking this story waaay to seriously.)
Onwards to next chapter!
621810
Psst...
This might be out of date, but Dark Matter doesn't come in molecules, only in particles, and it actually is theorized to have much more mass than a similarly-sized molecule... I think you meant Anti-Matter... They have negative mass...
622817
Also, still out of date commenting on a comment, but it's 'Thou' not 'Though...'
I love being a smartass!
622817
Obviously, neither hast THOU.
Well, on the positive side, we know that the Princesses would never be caught by Weeping Angels!
2438016 No they don't. Each antimatter particle has exactly the same properties as its matter counterpart, except that charge is reversed.
622817 You clearly haven't studied your Old English properly either.
622869 I believe it would be continuity, not continuancy.
2457555 HELLO STONEHENGE!
:) That's why the Doctor is vacationing in Ponyville.
The staring... it will last forever! ... Drat there really needs to be a Nightmare Moon icon.