You get a follow just for the picture. And an upvote saying continue.

Hey man great story. can't wait for the next chapter

Interesting concept. Hope to see more.

I saw the rating, I saw the cover picture, I read the first chapter.

This results in her becoming 20% cooler than Rainbow Dash.

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MOAAAAR!!!! If that's alright with you that is.....

You say the theme song is "Sexy Bitch", but in my head I'm hearing "You're The One That I Want" from Grease.

MOAR!

Um...i-if that's okay with you...

I could make a joke that picture looks like Fluttershy has gone super sayian...

But nah, there's over nine-thousand of those anyway.

Seriously though, fun little concept and nice seeing Fluttershy catch a break for once. Hope this continues.

Though Fluttershy had never used this ability against her own animals, they knew better than to push her too far.

Think she used it on her chickens once while babysitting the crusaders

It seems Fluttershy is a master of Shin no Ippou

I was going to link to Seras Victoria's "Oh fuck the Hell Yes", but you cut my to the quick.

6052943 She also used it on Angel Bunny at the end of Putting Your Hoof Down to get him to eat the salad.

I feel as though the end of this chapter where she realizes what had happened should have been extended a bit. Just having her eye "actually sparkle" for a second seems kind of a cheep way to have her realize the change. I think you could do a lot better. Maybe you could do it with her noticing how she feels more confident as she looks at herself in the mirror and notices subtle changes such as her not feeling as nervous, changes to the way she moves and noticing her own good looks. For example when she dunks her head in the water, when she comes back up perhaps you could have her notice a few things. It could go something like this:
She notices that dunking her head in like water like that to wake herself up is not something she has done before as it would normally seem to quick and drastic for her, then she could notice that she looks really good with a wet mane, before checking herself out in the mirror which leads to her realizing what has happened.
You said you want to make Fluttershy Sexy? This is the good place to start.

Having a few things like this would have made the "OH HAY YES!" Line have a much better pay off as well.
As it is, it just seems to go too fast.
You don't really need to change or add anything but I think that if you just added a bit more It would make it a lot better then it already is.
Overall I'm enjoying it so far and hope to see more soon.

Cover: SuperSayain Fluttershy?

It took Fluttershy a second to remember that he'd been tapping on a carrot based salad that was far too complex for her to 1.)crate, with her 2.)meagre cooking skills.

1.) "Create".
2.) "Meager".

"1.)Angel. You know better than to throw things at ponies, especially hard things with corners that could poke somepony's eye 2.)out." she said with a slight frown on her face.

1.) Depending on how long of a pause you want here, you may want to change that period to a comma and lowercase the y in "you".
2.) However this period should be a comma.

There she was, plain od Fluttershy, with long flowing locks and big blue eyes.

Do you mean "odd' or "old"?

A Pony who wasn't scared of her own shadow

This does not need to be capitalized.

She stared at herself for a good long minute before realising that nothing had changed.

Are you sure you want to go with the British spelling?

She placed a face washer into the water and let it soak before removing it and wringing it out.

Hooves, how do they work?

This was interesting. I am curious to see where this goes. Therefore, I shall like and favorite. Also this:

~KBO.

YOU BETTER UPDATE SOON!
I wanna see new SEXY Fluttershy STRUT
With all the ponie's jaws dropping.

6053762 I was thinking the same thing! This is awesome!

6053835 Thanks. But with Meagre, I'm using the UK spelling.

Whats with the link? Is it just to be humorous or does Fluttershy actually sound like that now? Cuz that would be kind of boss and funny at the same time

6054642 No, it's just for humour.

6054654 Awww

I'm kidding, but it still would have been funny though...

Though now I am kind of curious, Does Fluttershy sound different now? Or does she still have the hushed voice?

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Now i wonder if Discord going to amused or freaked out.

I like the concept, I really do, but there isn't much else I can say about this story that's positive.

There are a lot of errors in everything from punctuation, capitalization, and spelling, to outright missing words and letters; most of the sentences are short, choppy, and come off feeling stilted and unnatural; and most of the narration is bland and uninteresting because you spend so much time telling us about things that happen instead of actually making them happen in the narrative. As it is, I can't upvote this story. I want to like it, but it needs a lot of editing before I can give it a thumbs up.

Can you give us the source of that picture?

This is not a docile request.

6054659 no, just louder. Lol

Hello! Just a couple [I swear] minor [no, really, they are] grammar fixes to your fic! [Please don't hurt me...]

"Angel, you know better than to throw things at ponies, especially hard things with corners that could poke somepony's eye out." she said with a slight frown on her face.

Fluttershy's sentence needs to terminate with a comma to link with the remainder of the narration.

Fluttershy looked down at the book. '101 Vegetarian and Vegan recipes'. A Birthday present from Rainbow Dash. A good friend, if a little cocky.

Your sentences here are fragmented, 'recipes' needs capitalized, the comma needs to go inside the punctuation, and "birthday" isn't capitalized.

It might look better rendered like this:

Fluttershy looked down at the book in her hooves: "101 Vegetarian and Vegan Recipes," a birthday present from Rainbow Dash. A good friend, if a little cocky; though, if Fluttershy were being honest, she would admit that she could do with a bit of cockiness herself.

Rainbow was quick to boast and act, which got her into more trouble that most ponies knew. And Rarity was somewhat vain and a little Obsessive Compulsive.

"That" should be swapped for "than," and "obsessive-compulsive" shouldn't be capitalized here.

She knew that even though she could win a staring contest with a cockatrise, it wouldnt stop her from being turned to stone by the creature's own stare, but that was the only limit she knew of.

"Cockatrice" is misspelled, and you're missing an apostrophe in "wouldn't." You might also consider switching the comma for a semicolon and reordering the sentence slightly:

"...by the creature's own stare; this, however, was the only limitation she was aware of."

Note: I don't mean any of this in a negative way; I'm a copyeditor by hobby, so I notice these things. I also notice that people generally tend to overlook them, which...in some senses I can understand, but in other senses I really can't. Deuces!

6056082 I'm a copy editor too. I'm gaining a reputation, actually.

it wouldnt stop her from being

Should be wouldn't.

Only one I caught.

You know what this really reminds me of? Molly Moon's Incredible Book of Hypnotism.
Not the whole book of course, just the beginning part when she's practicing on herself and whatnot.

6057749 Makes me think of Rurouni Kenshin. (Hope I spelled this right.) He fought another swordsman who could affect others with some form of hypnotism. He used it on himself to strengthen himself in the fight.

this will be fun.

Hmm, promising concept, but the chapter is too wordy, and there are a few paragraphs in there that seem to go on a tangent. I suggest finding ways to "trim the fat." Also, "face washer" sounds really weird; is that British English?

"Oh, hay yes!"

Dat reference.

Um.. So.. awesome carnage incoming?

Hmm... alright, reference on the end would be a lot better if you made it 'Oh buck the hay YES!' Kind of way, other than the hay/hell bit, not really similar here.

But other than that, I like the idea of hypnotized Fluttershy, lets do it!
No dream please.

"Enough's enough!" she declared, frowning at her reflection. She looked herself in the eyes and spoke aloud. "If there's a part of me that's brave, confident and bold. Wake up and join me. I want to be my ideal self. Not some scaredy pony who runs from her own shadow. I want to be brave like Rainbow Dash and feel beautiful like Rarity. I want to have fun like Pinkie Pie as well as a strong work Ethic like Applejack. I want to think things through like Twilight, but not as obsessively. But most of all, I want to remain who I am at heart. The Element of Kindness with an affinity for animals and a love of veterinary medicine." There was a moment when her eyes felt heavy, and she almost wanted to look away from herself, to back out at the last second, but she kept with it.

I'm a Mojo Shojo fan so I can say that this sounds more like this

so Doki