Similarities with their first encounter resonated through the circumstances. Trixie once again shoved Twilight into the spotlight in front of ponies anxiously waiting for any kind of reaction. She struggled to peer through Trixie’s showmanship at her ulterior motives. Last time, Trixie’s challenge served only to bolster her performance for her audience. She was the kind of pony who wouldn’t face off if she had to, and was more than willing to bluff her way out of a tough crowd. But as Twilight watched Trixie pace around her, never breaking eye contact, the way she so carefully placed the rose in her mane with her magic, Twilight realized Trixie wasn’t trying to impress the audience. She suppressed a shudder.
“Look before you, faithful witnesses of Trixie! It would seem her lucky new assistant is speechless at Trixie’s great and powerful proposition! I assure all of you that she is the only unicorn in all of Ponyville who can aid me in creating the most powerful illusions in all of Equestria!” The showmare set a rising mist around them and changing the colors of the stage lights do a deep blue. Standing on her hind legs with hooves in the air, she used her horn once more to turn off all but the one spotlight on Twilight. All of her energy she seemed to pour into this one moment, and she showed no signs of slowing down.
Twilight, who cringed at the thought of being the object of her captor’s obsessions, watched Trixie set to work. Why was the crowd ecstatic? Twilight couldn’t believe they were eating this up, especially after what happened last time. She felt their fanfare and Trixie’s attention lock her in place. Would Trixie just teleport her back onto the stage again if she tried to escape? It was just as difficult to dismiss how her discomfort seemed to fascinate the ponies watching her. She couldn’t help but wonder where this newfound confidence came from and why Trixie insisted on sharing her personal space on stage.
Right now Twilight just wanted to go home and get ready for her big day. If she could just hop off that platform and trot to her house down the street, she’d be one step closer to Rainbow Dash. All she needed to was to draw Trixie’s attention away from herself. The audience’s hoof-stomping and callouts gave her time to think of an escape plan. As soon as the applause died down, she cleared her throat and turned to the audience. “If you don’t mind, I’d like to have a chat with our most esteemed magician.”
Trixie took a step back. “By all means, share with all of us what you feel the Great and Powerful Trixie should hear. I’m sure you don’t mind talking to Trixie with a few bystanders around?” The magician gave her eyes to Twilight and her smile to the audience. “Trixie’s offer is quite tempting, isn’t it?”
“I don’t see what’s so tempting.” Twilight casually trotted up and down the front of the stage as she spoke. The audience was so quiet she could hear her own hoofsteps. This is a good thing, she thought to herself. A silent audience was as good as no audience. Her plan would work as long as she didn’t crack under the pressure. “What do you need me for, anyway? You’re great. You’re powerful. I see you’ve even learned a new trick or two.”
“Only after being moved by our last magical encounter, my dear.” Trixie flipped her cape around for dramatic effect and used a trick to envelop the stage in darkness. A single light emanated from her horn, putting her at the center of the drama once again. “After that regretful misunderstanding with the Ursa Minor incident, Trixie could think of nothing but running. Outmatched, out-hooved, and alone! Trixie lost faith in her talents -- her destiny.”
“Your destiny?” Twilight egged her on. “I’m not sure you’ve told anypony about that.” It was working better than she hoped. She slipped through the darkness towards the side of the stage while Trixie dramatized her story for the audience with showy gestures.
“Why, all of us have a destiny, Twilight Sparkle.” Trixie whirled her cape and turned her back to the audience. She disappeared in a cloud of blue smoke, only to reemerge at the center of the stage to the shocked but enthralled gasps of the audience. “But once in a lifetime somepony great and powerful rises from the smoke to manifest a future far more spectacular than the fate of a simple pony!” The crowd rewarded her with another round of applause.
Twilight stood a jump’s distance from the curtain. She kept her eye on Trixie, who continued to captivate the audience with her tale. She took a quick look around to make sure the no other pony was paying attention to her as well. When looked again, Trixie was gone. Blue smoke crept up from under Twilight’s hooves, followed by the appearance self-absorbed performer in front of her.
“What would hold Trixie back from the glory awaiting her down the path of magic mastery? The Great and Powerful Trixie knew only after facing a true monster that there was more to magic than the flare and beauty that came so easily to me...” Trixie was on the corner of the stage with her back to Twilight, reaching out with both hooves to the rest of the ponies.
Twilight sighed in relief. Trixie didn’t even notice her loud yelp at the sudden teleportation. Though the magician still stood in her way, she found another chance in the back of the stage. The crowd grew loud enough for her to dart to the center curtains and jump through. The caress of the curtains against her coat made her long for the comfort of her bed. Twilight smiled victoriously. She escaped Trixie’s entanglement; she’d be safe in her home and get some much-need rest for the big day ahead of her. She waited a few seconds to see if anypony saw her disappear. When she heard Trixie’s muffled voice go on uninterrupted, she rushed forward. Straight into a Pony.
“Eh, excuse me.” Twilight regained her footing. The pony she ran into was a white unicorn colt with a black mane whom she didn’t recognize. She shifted to the side, but the pony moved with her, blocking her way.
“I was told to stay back and watch out for any lavender unicorns trying to sneak out. Sorry miss, Trixie’s orders.” His speech was polite, but he lowered his head and his horn glowed in preparation for a spell.
“What does she want with me? Just let me go home already!” Twilight winced as a bright flash enveloped her once again, forcing her back into Trixie’s trap. The showmare stopped mid-sentence, cut on the lights with a spell and trotted towards her. Twilight backed away until her back hoof missed the ledge, only to be caught and pushed back up by a handful of onlookers. She thought of teleporting, but managing a spell under the stress was hard, especially around two other unicorns pouring their efforts into keeping her in place.
She could no longer hear herself think. She saw Trixie point to her and shout something, but her heartbeat drowned out everything. Overcome by the pressure, Twilight’s mind went completely blank. With her head cocked back towards the sky, she screamed one name. She had no idea where the pegasus was or what she was doing; she could’ve been racing around Cloudsdale for all she knew. But deep down, she knew Rainbow Dash was the only pony who could free her.
"RAINBOW!!!!! Get me the BUCK away from this simpleton!"
Somewhere else: "What was that?" "My Twilight senses are going off! Time to save a pony!"
Random land...
This fan fiction is probably the most sophisticated and well-written fan fiction i have ever read. Notice, i have only one forum post which is this one. This is also the first fan fiction i have ever read. However, isnt this all about having fun rather than criticizing others' work? Can't we all just get along? In the words of Martin Luther King Jr.; I am in need of toiletpaper. Im sure he said that at least once, anyways. However, yes, to borrow a phrase from John Hancock; "the sophistication of this story has bewildered the fact of knowing the ethnicity of all-knowning filanthropoligists, but i digress. Also, donuts are tasty." These are the words of a man with a signature. Who are we to judge and criticize?
Which brings us to star trek, and the wrath of kahn. Is NO ONE ESLE creeped out about those weird worm things crawling into other peoples ears? I mean, find a different way to hypnotize people, and get a haircut. That way, you may look a bit appealing. To borrow a phrase from Matt Damon: "I bought a zoo."
While we are on the subject of zoos, chimpanzees are almost humans, correct? So why do we put them in cages. I mean, they could probably eat a doughnut themselves, right? I mean, thats all that make us humans. Who are we to hid e them away in cages? To borrow a phrase from kermit the frog: "Hi!" but i digress.
On the subject of "Hi" I was once senteced to court for being so. Shortly before court, i took quite the dumparoonie. It took 2 and a half Toilet paper rolls to cleanse my Feces-Ridden arse from highly fragrant fecal matter, and i was in there for easily 6 hours. After i excited, i had to hurry b ecause i was 5 hours 53 minutes late, and thought i could still make it if i ran. I entered the courtoom while a puppet was on trial for a sexual offense to a quite large amount of Scottish Terriers, and when i got there, everyone burst into laughter upon seeing i was wearing No clothes at all but my shoelaces as a tie, and had 3 feet of toilet paper on my foot. Granted, i should not have been high on the date i was being sentenced for being so, but i hadnt had anything to eat, was bored and had just recently clipped my toenails.
Which brings us to Steve Carell, otherwise known as Michael Scott, and the famous "That's What She Said" Joke. This joke never gets old, and is always gut-wrenchingly knee-slappingly hysterical.
Examples of this joke are:
Someone is drinking from a straw. You: "Thats what she said."
Someone says "This wood tastes great." You: "Thats what she said."
Someone laughs at these jokes and says, "Again, again!" You reply, "Thats what she said."
Therefore, it is predicamental that you reply witht he utmost honesty and sophistication in the light of this story, and i hope you will all meet a friendly Triceratops one day. I bid thee good night.
-RainbowdashEpicness (Don't Worry everything made sense)
Bravo! The suspense just killed me, but my ghost will stand by for the next chapter!
Urge to drop-kick Trixie over the horizon rising...
I'm betting Rainbow pulls a spiderman when she saves Twilight.
Dis gon be good.
I'll be honest with you. I'm faving this right now just because I ran out of new chapters to read, and this is taunting me. I used to have a good two-three hundred unread chapters, but I either read them, or decided that I didn't care for the story. So... I shall read this, just not right now. With nothing better to do, I am watching FMA.
Lesbian love story rated for everyone? I think thats an appropriate rating. If only america rated like that.
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When it comes to pony, the rating is not based on gender roles or other similar things, but instead are based on what the story actually contains. I'm sure you can find more everyone-rated lespony stories here.
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Yeah, that's really not unusual in the slightest around these parts. It's actually the norm. Stories get teen if it's dark or kinda disturbing in parts, or if there's a lot of heavy implications and mature humor. Mature only if explicit sex scenes or excessive gore. At least that's how I understand the system.
Silly me! When I transferred the words over, I forgot to add the necessary italics to chapter 4! Made the corrections.
My fic was in the feature box again! Albeit briefly... that's alright though.
834035 Not gonna lie - I didn't spend nearly as much time on chapter two as I should have, and I'm glad you noticed the setups! The next chapter will be a good opportunity to flesh out some things. Good thing I am learning these things as I go along! Also, that one line you brought up in Chapter 2 WAS meant to be italicized, but I must have missed it when transferring words over. Fixed!
833959 They prob. mean only content, as for concept, yeah not everypony. However, I strongly doubt the age groups who haven't learned about that will be on this site...
The Great and Powerful Trixie does not like the turn of events occurring on Trixie's stage.
Ok, since no one has really pointed this out, and I really like the character, I'm going to point out the white colt working for Trixie. Now, you know I'm biased, but I really like what you came up with for him, so, READERS: TRIXIE'S WHITE STALLION ... XD Ohhh poor pony.
If anyone else caught this, I fixed the "phantom sentence" in one of the later paragraphs, right before Twilight tries to slip out. This was my fault for pre-reading my own chapter after my sister made her edits.
(I will be updating the cover page summary of the story soon, which will include the very-important update of my sister being my editor now.)
841855 Thanks, but I'm happy with my sister being my editor. I've divulged to her what will happen in the story long before she stepped in to help so she has the long term in mind when going through quality assurance. (I once again apologize to everyone for my revisions rush job on Chapter 4!) Also, I can literally call her *almost* whenever I want to talk about things.
Just curious and based on your first comment, can I assume your response to what I've written so far is (as internet lingo goes) "meh?" Don't worry if you don't like it - if you do reply to this, nothing you say will hurt my feelings more than how I've already been lovingly torn apart by my sister's criticisms
842186 I... am intrigued. Funny. It usually takes more slapstick or clop to get me this interested.
I'm kidding, but still. I cannot wait to see where this goes!
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Aw, I love my brother. I think your readers will attest that what hasn't killed you so far makes you a better writer
I think I see where this is going, maybe. Are we really so sure this is a Twilight/Rainbow story?
856551 As the author, I can reassure you this is Twidash. (I'm always curious as to what people are speculating though!)
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Aw. I was thinking maybe the memory Twilight was worrying about was of her and Trixie, with a wing spell involved somewhere.
857091 Nah. The reveal will be coming up soon though, and I'm almost certain it will be met with mixed reactions!
WHEN NEXT CHAPTER?!?!?!?!?!?!?
928482 I'm going to revise the rough draft this week!
928650 YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
958371 This is no ordinary TwiDash!
...I think
ehhhhhya.... I call bullshit...
Twilight could take on more than a dozen of unicorns at the same time without breaking a sweat, so this just.... meh....