Gentle breeze was a young griffon just an hour hatched when her parents left her on a mountain side to fend for herself. Alone and forgotten how will our young heroine survive? Why a little help from the bearers of the Elements of course.
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Why does NO-ONE seem to spell PROLOGUE right around here? It's not that difficult... Just think... G before U....
I know people have been calling for 'Shy to be a bit more assertive... But I think you've overdone it a bit here.
Plus, isn't there a system set up to adopt babies that fall out of the sky in Equestria... You can't just say "Oh, I'm going to adopt it" the minute it drops onto your lap. Is Flutters going to use Twi's 'new alicorn' status at Canterlot to 'pull a few strings'?
Sneaky, very sneaky...
This is shaping up to be quite the story. I really feel for little Breeze not having her wings, hopefully something can be done to help her get her wings back. Don't let the bad comments bring you down. Some people just like to nitpick and criticize stories that don't fit into how THEY think it should go.
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Thanks, and honestly I han't thought about a way to give her wings back, it was kinda a hard ship I was going to put in there, since Rainbow Dash was going to be an adoptive mother. And I'm glad I could create a charector that you could feel for. Any tips, or ideas are opriciated, and if there's something that confuses you or you don't like let me know. If it's changeble I'll look into it if not then I'll let you know.
6351998 Regarding ideas for little Breeze to get her wings back, hmmmm....that is going to be difficult. It really depends, do you want her to gain them naturally, such as maybe have Zecora give her a tonic of some sort or do you want to have Twilight use her magic? Personally I think having Zecora mix a tonic would be really cool but it is your story.
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Okay I'll thank about that, and thanks. I'm always happy to get feed back, especially if it's from one of my favorite authors. I did tell you I love your story Twin desires right? Well if not I just did.
6352064 I don't know if you did or not but thanks! It really makes me feel good when someone tells me that I'm one of their favorite authors, I think you are only the second person to do that! But whatever direction you choose to go with your story, I know it will be good.
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Aw, thank you. And please enjoy, I'll be working on getting another chapter up shortly.
6352102 You're welcome and I have a couple ideas for stories that I am running through my mind right now. One involves Starlight, DT & SS and the CMC....another involves Minuette trying to get Moondancer to come out of her shell and one involves Twilight telling the tale of how West Equestria declines and eventually collapses (it will follow off from the end of Starlight's Story.)
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That sounds really cool.