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Well, he just got up after being held captive at least two days. After only eating once, and getting magic pumped into his body to take the place of muscle mass temporarily. That's all the excuse you need to explain away why he almost got his ass kicked by a griffin. It is also valid and enough to defend the fight on those grounds. Also, the vindictive twist of breaking one of her wings is a nice touch, and appropriately evil in that it gives her a twisted and broken hope to be able to fly straight ever again, even if her wing heals right. Plus, it will leave a lasting emotional scar of sheer terror every time she sees a weird biped. Like a one horned Minotaur, or a sickly one until she sees its horns, thus permanently torturing her and forcing her almost completely away from two nations, and leaving her in a country who a third of which flies straight and true and another third of which can actually push around her dead weight and the last third possesses mastery in varied and many more valuable skills than her. So he killed her indirectly with one crippling blow.
6105240 This! So much this! You have no idea how happy I am to see that someone understands one of the reasons why he decided to do such a thing!
6105357 Trust me, while that was indeed a major factor he most certainly didn't cripple her specifically to be cruel. Don't let his quaint speech fool you, he can be quite ruthless in both tact and revenge. This time, however, he got to be tactful and vindictive in a single action, so it was a win-win for him.
EDIT: Also, you can't discount the "heads or tails" scene where she chose to stay his enemy instead of "rolling forward" and keeping her options open. Recall how he tried to tell her that she wasn't predetermined to live in a certain way, but she shrugged it off at the mention of money. He did do his best to help her despite her wrongdoings against him; it was her, however, who chose to live as his enemy.
Nice is all I have to say
6105774 I try my best!
I still think he should have taken her with him, just to take no chances
6107532 You guys have no idea how happy it makes me to see people comment about my story, particularly about the occurrences within it. It makes me feel like what I'm writing is interesting!
On to this statement, though, I have a question to ask you: Would you bring someone with you who could actively ruin your chance to escape from the clutches of some seedy group that wants to make you their property? I certainly wouldn't.
You say he shouldn't have taken chances, and that's what he did when he knocked Hawkeye unconscious. To keep her awake and bring her with him would have brought unnecessary risk that would have possibly compromised his plan.
Well, that has suddenly turned entertaining in the most vicious way, hasn't it just? You don't get many protagonists here who are unabashedly sadist and admit it to themselves. I think this story will be dark alright, but not for the reason I thought it would when this section started.
6107802 As I've said before, I aim to please. I enjoy writing this story. Very much so as a matter of fact. What I wanted in a protagonist is one who doesn't always make the right decisions, one who is doubtlessly flawed, one who is grasping at everything he can to remain sane in a world vastly different from his own.
From the beginning of his journey, he's been through hell, at least mentally. He is always suffering, and what better way for him to take his mind off of his own misfortune than to bring harm unto those who deserve it?
6107625 No, Martian you have misunderstood me, I meant to knock her out dislocate not break the wing ( doing so would make him just as bad as Hawkeye was to him) and Bring her with him so Hostage, and chance of redemption
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"Deserves" is a very relative term. I think I'll enjoy this as a character study, but do be careful not to bring too much of yourself into it. That never ends well. If you know who RealityCheck is, you'll know what I'm talking about.
6107846 His actions will forever be questionable, and you have no idea how happy I am that someone cares enough to propose alternatives to how he could have handled the situation.
What you believe is that he should have given the hapless griffiness a second chance, when he already did. In the "heads or tails" situation, he tells her that she shouldn't limit her choices and get stuck living an unfulfilling life as a bandit. He wanted her to "keep rolling", and his point was further emphasized when the coin landed upright instead of showing heads or tails. She brushed his suggestion off, however, not once, but twice, when money was mentioned. He told her not to make an enemy of him, saying there'd be no hard feelings if she were to release him, but she chose to ignore his plea.
I, however, believe he is completely justified in his actions. He doesn't seem interested in redemption or morality when his life is on the line, and cares not for the well-being of others when his own is in jeopardy. All he cared about was the fact that hurting Hawkeye made him feel ecstatic and the fact that he had already given her a chance to redeem herself before the fight.
6107851 The only part of myself I'm putting into Ladarion is the speech patterns. Everything else is being shaped by the world around him. I just think about his appropriate responses to situations based off his established character and the latent influences of his "deal" with the spirit. I don't delight in the pain of others. As a matter of fact, I was very surprised when I imagined him breaking Hawkeye's wing despite her pleas.
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Just remember that part. Just because you think of it (and possibly think it's justified) doesn't necessarily mean that it is or that anyone else would agree with you - and if you get too morally superior, people will give you a backlash over it. If that's what you want, then alright, but in my experience, putting your personal character under the magnifying glass like that makes everyone involved look bad at the end.
6107861 well then, it seems like we will forever disagree, however, I will thank YOU not only for writing this, but for replying to comments like this one, to generate discussion, so thank you my friend, we'll see each other on the next chapter.
6107880 That is true, and I'll do my best to avoid that in the future. Just thought I'd ascertain that I wasn't actually making the character a self-insert or anything.
Also:
Would you mind telling me how you thought this situation would originally play out?
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From the context (and how this kind of thing usually tends to go down) I was expecting something of a more drawn-out section featuring Laddy getting physically and emotionally abused, possibly even sold off and ending up as a slave for a while. The opening sections of Your Human And You specifically came to mind for me. One of the reasons I don't really like that story.
Also, you're still misusing "ascertain."
6107885 Comments like yours keep this story interesting and alive! I'd be a fool not to respond to the opinions of my readers. I really am glad that you find this story entertaining, so it is with that in mind that I hope to keep you invested by the next installment!
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I'm only human, bro. I'm prone to make errors when writing and I appreciate it when others point them out, even if it embarrasses me.
*Tears out a single tooth for making such an idiotic mistake*
On to your comment about the actual story, though, I was originally planning on having him tortured, but decided that'd be too edgy and boring overall. I wouldn't have enjoyed writing something like that, so I decided not to.
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And I am certainly glad for that decision. It nearly never adds anything meaningful to a story, unless the story is specifically about the protagonist dealing with the psychological and emotional fallout of going through an experience like that. I've seen too much of that kind of thing myself to actually enjoy reading about it, though, even if the story is good in the abstract.
Oh, I'll be more than glad to do both.
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And it was on this day, June 18th of 2015, that MartianMan signed his own death warrant with a stupid, naive smile on his face.
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Don't feel bad, you're hardly the first poor sap here to make that mistake.
They all regretted it oh-so-mightily.
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6108005 You've got me shivering in my boots.