Twilight makes a deal with Molestia: Allow Molly to experience life though proxy in exchange for all the goddess' knowledge and power. What happens next is entirely expected.
I'm a little confused by the specifics of Molly's creation. Celestia did it so that she would stop having sexual urges yet she's still having sexual fantasies and can't wait to have fun with Twilight? And the part about her giving up her dominant side completely to Molly seems awfully counter productive to the goal of ruling a country.
i really wanna see something involving someone in the story getting bound to the ground, not necessarily full on bondage needed for the scene, but basically, all four legs bound to the ground in some manner, be it some type of adhesive or perhaps locked in steel boots bolted to the floor. or even magical sealing, giving them some space to move but try to move past that space and BAM, reeled back in and held fast for a bit.
6144023 not so much BDSM as it is Stuck Fetish. Think less 'excited about using the latex suit' and more 'excited it has a closed lock on it' it more focuses on the trapped in X portion. Like 'trapped in these runic locked hoofshoes' or 'trapped in this puddle of changeling goo' or 'trapped in these chains suspended from the ceiling'
Personally I prefer them trapped just by their hooves than full body.
I dunno, this one seemed a bit more…uncaring than the last chapter on Twilight’s part.
With her and Rainbow alone, she gave Dash as much as she got, and came off as a mistress that would take care of her friends despite the power her position gave.
This time, towards the end anyway, Twilight starts sliding just a little bit into the bitch dominant territory that ends with Twilight raping all the girls and stealing away their free will completely before ordering them into sexual acts rather than guiding them.
6144330 Go ahead and send those to me. I'm the one that largely handles the spelling and grammar. Gotta apologize for this chapter, I ended up breezing through this one in a rush.
"Removing your adorkableness from the world should be considered a crime."
I kinda think Molly's forgotten she said this, before.
Also I wonder, Celestia effectively being goddess of the sun, and the sun controlling estrus cycles in mares, if she created Molly in order to stop being constantly in heat.
6364690 That's the plan. I just moved into college so my schedule has been shaken up as late. But I am going to continue this once I get my head on straight enough to actually start writing again.
One bit of editing advise: when you have multiple noun and want to show possession, i.e. lovers, you make the noun plural, then add the apostrophe at the end, i.e. lovers'. It's just something small, but a little jarring when I read this chapter VERY slowly. Great chapter by the way. Can't wait to read the rest of the mane six falling into their proper place.
6430846 If you check my blogs i keep people up to date on my progress. But essentially, I just moved into college so writing has been slow as of late. But I am working on it
love the title...
wonder how people are going to like the end part of this chapter, worked extra hard to make it so
In 45 min, reached Feature List!
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I'm a little confused by the specifics of Molly's creation. Celestia did it so that she would stop having sexual urges yet she's still having sexual fantasies and can't wait to have fun with Twilight? And the part about her giving up her dominant side completely to Molly seems awfully counter productive to the goal of ruling a country.
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I was sold as soon as I seen the guitar playing booty.
i wonder first rainbow now pinkie who next applejack, rarity or (pray she doesn't do any trauma to her) fluttershy
I am enjoying this, rarity should prove a lovely exercise in making a bimbo~
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No bimboification in this fic, sorry
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That's actually the order in which this story is going to go
i really wanna see something involving someone in the story getting bound to the ground, not necessarily full on bondage needed for the scene, but basically, all four legs bound to the ground in some manner, be it some type of adhesive or perhaps locked in steel boots bolted to the floor. or even magical sealing, giving them some space to move but try to move past that space and BAM, reeled back in and held fast for a bit.
6143954 so more or less BDSM, control, movement restriction...
6143896 really wow didnt expect that guess i did there gave up a hint of be next in order
6144023 not so much BDSM as it is Stuck Fetish. Think less 'excited about using the latex suit' and more 'excited it has a closed lock on it' it more focuses on the trapped in X portion. Like 'trapped in these runic locked hoofshoes' or 'trapped in this puddle of changeling goo' or 'trapped in these chains suspended from the ceiling'
Personally I prefer them trapped just by their hooves than full body.
6143236 I think it was more to get rid of the overwhelming urges. Can't have people calling her Princess Molestia, can we?
Is it okay if I send you some corrections for this chapter over PM? I don't want to offend you by just suddenly sending them without any explanation.
That awkward moment when you realize you had it down voted somehow, when you realy like the story...its awkward.
"There was a reason why Pinkie always seemed to carry the smell of freshly baked cakes and diabetes-inducing sweats"
I'm pretty sure this is supposed to be 'sweets', otherwise it's a bit disgusting.
BAH-HAHAHAHAHA!
I dunno, this one seemed a bit more…uncaring than the last chapter on Twilight’s part.
With her and Rainbow alone, she gave Dash as much as she got, and came off as a mistress that would take care of her friends despite the power her position gave.
This time, towards the end anyway, Twilight starts sliding just a little bit into the bitch dominant territory that ends with Twilight raping all the girls and stealing away their free will completely before ordering them into sexual acts rather than guiding them.
I think that supposed to be sweets
Still, a good chapter though.
6144330 Go ahead and send those to me. I'm the one that largely handles the spelling and grammar. Gotta apologize for this chapter, I ended up breezing through this one in a rush.
6143236 I don't think that creating Molly was suppose to end her sexual desires, just make them manageable.
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I kinda think Molly's forgotten she said this, before.
Also I wonder, Celestia effectively being goddess of the sun, and the sun controlling estrus cycles in mares, if she created Molly in order to stop being constantly in heat.
just saw this sentence and decided to post it. alot easier to see mistakes when they're alone
Are you going to continue this story?
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Of course, I'm going to try to get started on he next chapter tomorrow. Be sure to check my blogs as I give updates on my writing there.
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Alright
can you make more?
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That's the plan. I just moved into college so my schedule has been shaken up as late. But I am going to continue this once I get my head on straight enough to actually start writing again.
6366617 I'm sure you will.
One bit of editing advise: when you have multiple noun and want to show possession, i.e. lovers, you make the noun plural, then add the apostrophe at the end, i.e. lovers'. It's just something small, but a little jarring when I read this chapter VERY slowly. Great chapter by the way. Can't wait to read the rest of the mane six falling into their proper place.
Well ok, this got kinky quickly. I shall so enjoy seeing Twilight become a better dominate, that said, can't wait till she dominates Celestia.
But... Author, when do we get an update?
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If you check my blogs i keep people up to date on my progress. But essentially, I just moved into college so writing has been slow as of late. But I am working on it
6431061 Oh, yay! Soon soon soon!
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I love that pic! XD
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My new fav image for the next 5 minutes
Another beyond awesome chapter.
Pinkie and Dash work really well together.
I wonder was Pinkie as attracted to Dash as Dash was to her or was this all of this only brought on due to Twilight?