Whatever his intentions were in sending Canvas to that airship, that was a jerk move not telling Canvas about the raiders. I do not remember if those spritebots had some sort of hacking time limit on them, yet he seriously could have just mentioned that one detail.
Toward the chapter proper, I enjoyed the change in pace that followed Canvas's escape from his captor. It felt as it should have: slow and refreshing as Canvas would have liked it. The change is a welcome demonstration of his newfound freedom.
Kernel Shell makes for an intriguing character as well, embodying the bright spirit sorely lacking from the entirety of the previous chapters. She has a genuinely interesting philosophy and a fun personality that bounces off of Canvas's. She provides for the breather he needed and the sense of comfort and optimism right before the heavy hitter at the end.
Overall, this chapter was a well-executed transition in story arcs that only suffered somewhat from Watcher's behavior and an overabundance of "Acks!" and BANGS! These are starting to get noticeable this far into the story.
By the way, that fear of magic was a good idea to implement. Until the next one!
Whatever his intentions were in sending Canvas to that airship, that was a jerk move not telling Canvas about the raiders.
I dunno, he said "expect a fight." Was it really a jerk move, or was it just... not as helpful as it could have been? If someone in the Wasteland tells you to expect a fight, what's the first thing you think of? Raiders have to be in the top five, and raiders are kinda easy to spot at a distance, because of the whole exterior decorating thing, and they're loud, and I think that draws out an important difference compared to, say, some other faction that tends to be quiet and hard to spot.
It might be comparable to saying, "Drive carefully," when you know the roads are slick with ice, but not specifically mentioning the ice. You're sort of assuming that the recipient of the warning is competent enough to realize what they're up against as soon as they see it; the warning is just to keep them alert. (Maybe not a good example, because you can more easily figure out exactly what to be careful of in the ice example. You know it snowed; you don't see fog; next logical conclusion is ice.)
Even though this is kind of a silly, minor thing, I'm curious as to your reasoning because I didn't see it that way at all.
This is a really good story, man. Although, I would like to see Temper in later chapters, I just thought that she was a good character, the chemistry between them was very well done. Anyway, great chapter, even greater story. I hope to see much more of this in the future. P.S: that cliffhanger though... I can sense a teary emotional fight ensuing.
I just went to remove the Aprils Fools chapter, and unless they're just not showing on my end, that seems to have removed all the comments that were posted on that chapter as well.
Whatever his intentions were in sending Canvas to that airship, that was a jerk move not telling Canvas about the raiders. I do not remember if those spritebots had some sort of hacking time limit on them, yet he seriously could have just mentioned that one detail.
Toward the chapter proper, I enjoyed the change in pace that followed Canvas's escape from his captor. It felt as it should have: slow and refreshing as Canvas would have liked it. The change is a welcome demonstration of his newfound freedom.
Kernel Shell makes for an intriguing character as well, embodying the bright spirit sorely lacking from the entirety of the previous chapters. She has a genuinely interesting philosophy and a fun personality that bounces off of Canvas's. She provides for the breather he needed and the sense of comfort and optimism right before the heavy hitter at the end.
Overall, this chapter was a well-executed transition in story arcs that only suffered somewhat from Watcher's behavior and an overabundance of "Acks!" and BANGS! These are starting to get noticeable this far into the story.
By the way, that fear of magic was a good idea to implement. Until the next one!
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I dunno, he said "expect a fight." Was it really a jerk move, or was it just... not as helpful as it could have been? If someone in the Wasteland tells you to expect a fight, what's the first thing you think of? Raiders have to be in the top five, and raiders are kinda easy to spot at a distance, because of the whole exterior decorating thing, and they're loud, and I think that draws out an important difference compared to, say, some other faction that tends to be quiet and hard to spot.
It might be comparable to saying, "Drive carefully," when you know the roads are slick with ice, but not specifically mentioning the ice. You're sort of assuming that the recipient of the warning is competent enough to realize what they're up against as soon as they see it; the warning is just to keep them alert. (Maybe not a good example, because you can more easily figure out exactly what to be careful of in the ice example. You know it snowed; you don't see fog; next logical conclusion is ice.)
Even though this is kind of a silly, minor thing, I'm curious as to your reasoning because I didn't see it that way at all.
This is a really good story, man. Although, I would like to see Temper in later chapters, I just thought that she was a good character, the chemistry between them was very well done.
Anyway, great chapter, even greater story. I hope to see much more of this in the future.
P.S: that cliffhanger though... I can sense a teary emotional fight ensuing.
Yay an update!!
Oh. Well, uh, this is awkward.
I just went to remove the Aprils Fools chapter, and unless they're just not showing on my end, that seems to have removed all the comments that were posted on that chapter as well.
I didn't mean for that to happen.
...sorry about that. :/