Quick little thing. Just to give the story a weensy bit more flow:

Pinkie Ooo’d and looked right at her as Dash grinned. Fluttershy blushed and hid her face.
Should be
Pinkie Ooo’d and looked right at her as Dash grinned while Fluttershy blushed and hid her face.

I really am enjoying this so far. You give the characters substance and weight, not just the mindless sex most other cloppers write.

Yay, knew chapter!
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5896942 Thanks for the comment! I might edit that when I get the chance! Also, yeah, I'm trying to give this a bit of story ^w^ Clop without a plot has its moments, but so does clop with a good story~

5897022 xD Iron Man faps to ponies

5897165 Welcome for the edit!

Also, I can't wait to see where you take this!

*Add to bookshelf, sadly puts tissues away...*

5897230 Don't worry. ;) Next chapter has plenty of fun for those tissues.

5897677 And yet, I'm kept waiting...JK. I know how tough writing can be.

5900394 xD Thanks for your understanding~

5911562 xD You were concerned about that? Nah, Soarin x RD is cute in small doses, but Soarin x Thunderlane is so HOT AND Cute. Although, I could see Thunder sharing him with RD every so often. And, happy to make you laugh!