Still a bit confused for the quarter final pair ups. So Rainbow Dash will go up against Fritter or Cloudchaser and Applejack is going up against Vinyl or Lyra?
I still wish their was a punishment for the loser. Nothing severe like "Now you are a sex slave. MUHUHAHAHA!" but at least something. Like the winner gets to come up with one herself that the judges approve or pick from a list like public spanking, forced to dress in humiliating outfits, etc. It would make the competition have more weight to it as opposed to just "aww I don't get the title"
Also why are they allowed to wear accessories to battle? You can't use toys but something that can be used as bondage equipment can be used? Seems a bit off.
I'm not sure how interesting the foalcon one would be if you exclude the CMC from it for being markless. They are the ones I specifically want to see, especially if they get paired with Diamond Tiara or Silver Spoon.
5875709 Yes, you are correct in your quarter final line-ups.
Also why are they allowed to wear accessories to battle? No toys but something that can be used as bondage equipment can?
You are thinking with the wrong body part.
But basically because it's a collab and the authors have mostly been working without having seen each other's chapters, the set-up and rules are intentionally rather vague and will probably be applied inconsistently. Blame any inconsistencies on Cadence being distracted by what Shining Armor is doing under her desk.
I'm not sure how interesting the foalcon one would be if you exclude the CMC from it for being markless. They are the ones I specifically want to see, especially if they get paired with Diamond Tiara or Silver Spoon.
Some readers and writers take a cutie mark as a sign of coming of age, and the difference between writing about a child and writing about an adolescent. So the out-of-universe explanation is that I thought it might increase volunteers to write the chapters. I do already have some volunteers, but not enough.
The other part of the explanation is that I think the CMC get quite a lot of attention on this site already, and there are some really cute background fillies that have hardly any stories written about them.
That said, because they're excluded from the competition, doesn't mean they're excluded from the stories. I'd be open to publishing bonus chapters along the way covering, say, how a pony decided to celebrate their victory, or how a loser was so upset that they went out, got drunk, and banged a load of stallions, or providing some back story on how a contestant trained for the contest, or even how two audience members got so turned on watching that they decided to run off and try out some of the things they saw for themselves.
If you have an idea and want to contribute, just PM me. This goes for either the adult or foal version.
*coughs* I *am* working on my chapter, honest. I've gotten up to the part where the actual contest starts, and trying to keep it a little different from other entries that have been read thus far.
Trying to decide if I should read. If I do, I will either hate it, or write for it, both of which will cause me problems. ARG! For now, on my read later.
Flitter lay supine on the bed, her wings outstretched beneath her.
Applejack's mouth moved on to the base of Flitter's wings, delivering kisses and licks to all the most sensitive parts of them.
When did Applejack turn into Blossomforth?
Anyways, so my thoughts. Well, first off, this sets up a world where this has been going on for fourteen years, so while I still HIGHLY disagree with Fluttershy doing something like this, I can see how it is plausible given the setting, which is astronomically better then what another story I've read that was this shameless of clop did. And that one had probably a collective follower count of over 5k, at least.
However, they had writing ability, and Ragabash doesn't, while Vital, you were decent. However, though Ragabash suffered from grammar and spelling, Vital, you suffered from focus. Splitting up the sex with the random chat between Rumble and AB throws the person out of what they're here for, which is the clop. My suggestion would have been to make their whole conversation at the end, so Rumble speaks to her while she is excited and therefore also distracted.
I do kind of like the premise, but I do think the writing is why it got so much negative response and therefore why it will unfortunately stay fairly anonymous for the moment. However, like I said, I did like it decently enough and am a sucker for collaberation. Expect my PM soon.
Also, if you get past the few awkward decisions and eh writing grammar wise, it is good. The clop is hot enough and able to be understood to a degree where you can enjoy the mindlessness of it without entirely shutting your brain off.
Anyways, so my thoughts. Well, first off, this sets up a world where this has been going on for fourteen years,
Twelve actually.
Splitting up the sex with the random chat between Rumble and AB throws the person out of what they're here for, which is the clop.
I absolutely agree. In earlier drafts it was worse, with the two narratives being even more mixed, but I now see I didn't do enough to improve it. I'll re-edit immediately!
Fun and action-y. I like the competitive vigor in the chapters so far, and this one has the bonus of some cute RumbleBloom flirting.
5849445 It seems I have a fetish for ponies pinning down ponies.
derpicdn.net/img/view/2012/7/26/57009__safe_twilight+sparkle_applejack_screencap_youtube+caption_the+return+of+harmony.jpg
It works best with an earth pony pinning down a pegasus though.
I'm considering a side story from their perspective.
Wow. Rodeos have always turned me on. This story is hot
5875585 Flitter's seeded 15th in the contest. Those are long odds you're betting on.
5875625 I could see Flitter being really kinky with that bow. I'm putting my money on her.
Still a bit confused for the quarter final pair ups. So Rainbow Dash will go up against Fritter or Cloudchaser and Applejack is going up against Vinyl or Lyra?
I still wish their was a punishment for the loser. Nothing severe like "Now you are a sex slave. MUHUHAHAHA!" but at least something. Like the winner gets to come up with one herself that the judges approve or pick from a list like public spanking, forced to dress in humiliating outfits, etc. It would make the competition have more weight to it as opposed to just "aww I don't get the title"
Also why are they allowed to wear accessories to battle? You can't use toys but something that can be used as bondage equipment can be used? Seems a bit off.
I'm not sure how interesting the foalcon one would be if you exclude the CMC from it for being markless. They are the ones I specifically want to see, especially if they get paired with Diamond Tiara or Silver Spoon.
5875709 Yes, you are correct in your quarter final line-ups.
You are thinking with the wrong body part.
But basically because it's a collab and the authors have mostly been working without having seen each other's chapters, the set-up and rules are intentionally rather vague and will probably be applied inconsistently. Blame any inconsistencies on Cadence being distracted by what Shining Armor is doing under her desk.
Some readers and writers take a cutie mark as a sign of coming of age, and the difference between writing about a child and writing about an adolescent. So the out-of-universe explanation is that I thought it might increase volunteers to write the chapters. I do already have some volunteers, but not enough.
The other part of the explanation is that I think the CMC get quite a lot of attention on this site already, and there are some really cute background fillies that have hardly any stories written about them.
That said, because they're excluded from the competition, doesn't mean they're excluded from the stories. I'd be open to publishing bonus chapters along the way covering, say, how a pony decided to celebrate their victory, or how a loser was so upset that they went out, got drunk, and banged a load of stallions, or providing some back story on how a contestant trained for the contest, or even how two audience members got so turned on watching that they decided to run off and try out some of the things they saw for themselves.
If you have an idea and want to contribute, just PM me. This goes for either the adult or foal version.
*coughs* I *am* working on my chapter, honest. I've gotten up to the part where the actual contest starts, and trying to keep it a little different from other entries that have been read thus far.
Trying to decide if I should read. If I do, I will either hate it, or write for it, both of which will cause me problems. ARG! For now, on my read later.
When did Applejack turn into Blossomforth?
Anyways, so my thoughts. Well, first off, this sets up a world where this has been going on for fourteen years, so while I still HIGHLY disagree with Fluttershy doing something like this, I can see how it is plausible given the setting, which is astronomically better then what another story I've read that was this shameless of clop did. And that one had probably a collective follower count of over 5k, at least.
However, they had writing ability, and Ragabash doesn't, while Vital, you were decent. However, though Ragabash suffered from grammar and spelling, Vital, you suffered from focus. Splitting up the sex with the random chat between Rumble and AB throws the person out of what they're here for, which is the clop. My suggestion would have been to make their whole conversation at the end, so Rumble speaks to her while she is excited and therefore also distracted.
I do kind of like the premise, but I do think the writing is why it got so much negative response and therefore why it will unfortunately stay fairly anonymous for the moment. However, like I said, I did like it decently enough and am a sucker for collaberation. Expect my PM soon.
Also, if you get past the few awkward decisions and eh writing grammar wise, it is good. The clop is hot enough and able to be understood to a degree where you can enjoy the mindlessness of it without entirely shutting your brain off.
5876715
Twelve actually.
I absolutely agree. In earlier drafts it was worse, with the two narratives being even more mixed, but I now see I didn't do enough to improve it. I'll re-edit immediately!