This was a very good story, with a very good, albeit sad, ending.

Oh Celestia, that was both heartwarming and heartbreaking at the same time...if this doesn't get a feature, I'll be shocked. That was astounding, sir. You have earned my thumb and favorite.

Good God, man...

I seriously don't even know what to say here...

I'm glad I could provide a launch point, but I can't possibly try to take any credit for this.

This story is absolutely amazing and far beyond my own vision, in all the best ways.

Thank you so much for writing this beautiful piece!  

(I'm definitely linking here from my story!)

...damn. I don't really know what to say other than that. It's an amazing story and... Yeah, I dunno. I'm going to go read Tiny Wings now.

egoticical >>> egotistical

Read Tiny Wings first for some context. It was awesome to see Thunder Clap fleshed out (and Firefly!).

Then dat ending... what a way to go

If there was one thing I latched onto in this story, it was Firefly. Just her little hint at backstory was interesting enough for me to wonder about her story. Maybe your other works have spoiled me on the importance of supporting characters

That's really heartwarming. But sad. But really heartwarming. But also sad.

You have a talent for inspiring ambivalence.

>>553772553772

I'm sorry... I really am, but the mentor can not come with the hero on their journey. It's a theme from mythology. Hope that didn't wreck the story for you.

>>553840553840

Thanks! These things are bittersweet, just like life.

>>553917553917

I am very glad that I was able to make something that was so emotionally involved for you!

>>554120554120

It mean a lot to me that you enjoyed it. I look forward to watching you grow as an author!

>>554169554169

It means a lot to me that you liked it, Cy!

>>554287554287

Nice catch!

>>554665554665

I don't just drop characters into stories as decorations, and I'm glad that you noticed that here. Always good to hear from you!

>>554683554683

I'm glad that I was able to provide you with such a variety of emotions. The people who make us who we are can not stay in our lives forever. Grandparents die, teachers disappear into our past, mentors... fade away, and in the end we are the people they helped build. I hope I was able to show that...

>>555027555027

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Not sure I want to read this based on the description alone. Can someone tell me what this is actually about, dust jacket synopsis style, without spoiilers?

I'll have to read this later, it's four in the morning here and if I stay awake any longer I might start crying from exhaustion.

>>555245555245

Sent ya' a note...

>>556475556475

Whenever ya' get to it, you know I appreciate it!

Tiny Wings was so sad, but then ended so happy.

This was so happy, but then ended so sad.

Excellent work, sir. You really caught the feel of DeadParrot's story, while at the same time adding your own unique flavor to the narrative.

>>557604557604

I'm very glad that you felt that this fic paid homage to that one well!

There are some stories that are so amazing, you just don't want them to end.

Tiny Wings was one such story. And this tale helps keep it going.

When Rainbow Dash told her side of this story in Tiny Wings, it was executed flawlessly. It didn't go into a flashback or sub-story. We were meant to experience it as a moment shared by Rainbow and Scootaloo. For the purpose of Tiny Wings, Rainbow's narrative was enough.

Now, obviously this was a story that was begging to be told on its own terms. And telling it from the eyes of Thunder Clap was genius. It was a beautiful story and (coupled with Tiny Wings) shows just how far the effects of kindness can go.

The only thing I did not care for was the tragic twist at the end. It didn't seem necessary though I know what you were getting at regarding the mentor not following the student. Anyways, I'm holding onto this one. Good job.

>>558065558065

I'm very glad that you feel that it was worthwhile making this a first-person work. Sometimes there are emotions that can only be called upon by invoking the word "I".

The death of Thunder Clap is undoubtedly the most controversial part of the story. I stand by my decision though, and I'm glad that you found the story worth the read despite it.

Once again you hit it out of the park TD, what a great story!

>>564061564061

Thank so much, DJ!

I got here from Tiny Wings, which made me tear up in sympathy, though not on a personal level because I've never had a dream of mine torn to pieces like that.

This, though... this touched me right where it hurts the most. Because my life has been defined by fear. I know what it's like to be paralyzed - I know that feeling, that panic right before you leave the ground. I felt so close to Dash in this story that I had to turn away from the screen when Thunder Clap asked her if he could take her up. I was muttering "no no no" like a crazy person because I was just as scared as she was, and I'm not even half as strong... and of course, I don't have a Thunder Clap to save me from myself. I'm mourning because I've  never had a mentor or helper like that, but hopeful at the same time because I can be that to someone else, and maybe change a life forever.

Sorry for the rambles - it's late and I was already emotional. Tl;dr your story touched me really deeply, so thank you for that.

>>571806571806

I am very glad that the story touched you on an emotional level. It is very difficult to live in the shadow of fear, and I understand how you must have felt.

Having both had a strong mentor and having been a mentor myself I can only assure you that the benefits are amazing, and I encourage you to consider becoming one.

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment!

Great story. I also got here from Tiny Wings, and it really feels like it belongs with that story. This really brings the whole point home with a mentors job. I feel the ending, while sad, showed the true depth of the character you made, with how he was ok with saving Rainbow Dash. That part got me worked up. Keep on being awesome.

>>572320572320

I'm very glad that you felt it was a fitting companion to Tiny Wings! That it also struck such an emotional chord also is appreciated. I shall do my best to keep being awesome!

Came here immediately after reading "Tiny Wings" and I have to say, this is just as good! The ending is perfect, as is the length of the story. I fell like you portrayed the former captain perfectly! Nice touch with adding Firefly. Follow+Like+Favorite+ the Mane 6, beacuse they symbolise the emotions I got while reading this!

>>572564572564

I'm very glad that you enjoyed it. Tiny Wings hit just the right note with me, and I had to get the idea out of my head and onto paper (monitor?). Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

Dat ending.... wow really came out of left field. I mean why?

Anyways thank you for this story albeit not for the obvious reasons. A couple nights ago I had an experience similar to Dash's meetup with Thunderclap and whilst it was amazing, I feel like the effects of it all were a little one sided. However after reading this, I don't know perhaps I will be remembered by an icon of mine. So thank you for making my life that little bit happier.

>>572795572795

I'm glad that the story has some meaning for you on such a unique level!

The ending is, of course, the most controversial aspect. Our mentors can not come on our journey with us, but only their lessons. I hope that makes sense as to why I added it, and I'm glad it didn't turn you off to the story as a whole.

>>572807572807

Honestly I think the ending was a little lost on me was to busy reflecting on everything else. Im feeling way to giddy to let that bring me down just yet, besides as far as deaths go, that is going out in style. Its shocking, but not sad.

>>572854572854

Oh, good! I was worried about that.

Epic.

So I did the only reasonable thing...

haha that's like his catch phrase.

I read Tiny Wings right when it just came out, and it instantly touched me, the things Rainbow did to help Scootaloo. This did pretty much the same thing. I kind of hate how the ending was sad and all, personally I prefer light-hearted stories, not light-hearted stories that end in the main character becoming horribly mutilated/dying, but either way well written. I think the ending was there to make me cry, and hey it got close, just like Tiny Wings and My Little Dashie did.

Again I say what I told DeadParrot222, I have no doubt this will make its way onto EqD (unless it already has and I'm just being a numbskull), and please keep writing, you inspire me, hopefully I don't unintentionally plagiarize, just like Tiny Wings, I'm going to make my own original story, but by the looks of things it won't be touching at all.

Actually, just like after any good fic, I feel completely hopeless in writing my fic, because it seems no matter what I write it won't be as good as this, because this is just plain touching, my fic which I just called "totally original" is just pinkie goofing off, Lyra obsessing over humans, and Rainbow Dash dreaming about the Wonderbolts. Sorry if this is turning into a TL;DR but I kind of need to vent.

Anyway, without giving away my fic entirely, could you give any suggestions on writing? And don't just say "don't give up" or other BS, like actual advice, because my stories don't turn out too good with the readers. Is there particular elements I have to add? Should I make my fic sad on purpose because sad fics are usually the ones that get the best ratings? Should I get proofreaders? Wait *facepalm* let me rephrase that. Where can I find people willing to read my fics besides my "friends" on skype who just troll me?

Ok I'll stop annoying you now

oh, also just to not make this a complete waste of your time, I found a mistake

"A gave a long sigh and settled backwards onto the lounge chair."

I think that's supposed to be an "I"

>>574350574350

Thank you so much for the typo catch! I fixed that right away!

I am more than happy to give you some advice!

1.) Pre-Write:

All of my stories begin as ideas on notecards. I've got a stack of them. When one moves me I jump on it and write down all of the scenes and ideas on some scrap paper. Every scene that I can see playing out in my head goes on the paper. Your job as an author will be to play "connect the dots" with these scenes, making sure they fit your narrative.

2.) Plan:

Know everything about your story before you begin to write! Know what the story is about, where it is going, and what it is going to do when it gets there. If you can't explain the story to yourself from beginning to finish then you won't be able to define it when it comes time to write it. Meet the plot points you planned, revise as you go.

3.) Character and Content vs. Length and Intent:

Set out to tell a story, don't set out to write "so many chapters". Your first job is to be a storyteller.

4.) Revise as You Write: Re-Read constantly. Read a paragraph when you finish writing it. Be sure it makes sense grammatically. If it looks wrong, it usually is. Read it aloud to yourself. If it sounds wrong, it certainly is. Re-read each chapter aloud for word... your brain trains itself to believe that what it produces is correct, but it knows to listen for what is wrong.

5.) If there are more than two commas in a sentence, whittle it down. Make more than one sentence out of it.

6.) No contractions outside of dialog unless you're using first-person narration.

7.) Break it up into paragraphs, like DP or I did with these stories. No "Wall of Text".

8.) Note the things that your favorite authors do and adapt them to your own writing style. It's okay to do that. Mark Twain influenced Will Rogers. Will Rogers influenced Bob Hope. Bob Hope influenced Rodney Dangerfield. Rodney Dangerfield influenced John Stewart.

Personal Favor: Give your story a real title. "This is My Story", instead of "This is my story". If you don't respect your work, why should anyone else. Also, in the description, give a concise or witty depiction of your central narrative. Don't go on and on about "... and this is my first story and I'd like feedback and Rarity is best pony and..." Gah!

I hope that helps! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment!

>>574482574482 Yes it helps a lot, and wow I seem totally unprepared. Usually I write spontaneously, just because I like to write. It seems like there is such a huge system that goes into it, I'm not sure if I'll ever "create a stack of flashcards of scenes and arrange them until something seems good", like literally I just get an idea like "oh it would be cool if there was a big explosion and everypony had different theories as to what it was and they go on crazy adventures" and I go from there. But yes, I do meticulously re-read my stories, and I am a grammar nazi so I rarely make conventions errors like many other authors, but my stories just end up bland, because I have short, exciting scenes, but I transition them with bland blah. And literally when DeadParrot222 inspired me, I had this awesome idea to do, and now I'm 3 chapters in and I read your story, and it totally shoots me down because I remember my original goals and my story now just seems to suck, and all my inspiration faded away after the initial "this seems like a good idea" moment. To be honest, I am a fairly new author, so I have little experience when it comes to fics, so I think I should go ahead and keep writing, even if it's just for myself, and I will follow your advice religiously so I hope to get better. But yeah sorry for spamming up your comments again, maybe we should move this to private messages.

>>574580574580

Go ahead and shoot me a PM if you need anything!

It's a tragic story, but you did a wonderful job of pulling us in with a character like that. The ending puts you inches away from shedding manly tears, especially if you read the story that inspires it.

This was awesome.

>>574952574952

I'm very glad that it worked for you! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment!

That was amazing. Just amazing. There are no other words to describe it.

Amazing.

Its 2am so my feedback probably isnt up to par. This was... very well done. Thunderclap and Firefly are instantly original and believable, I lost myself in your prose and the momentum of the story dragged me right to the bittersweet end. This is going straight onto my recommend to friends list - and I have to cater for nonbronies.  What more could you ask for to instil in your audience than that? +like +fav +watch. Cant wait to dig into the rest of your stuff

>>580575580575

Thanks, I appreciate that! I'm glad you took the time to read and comment!

>>581189581189

I'm very glad that it was that powerful for you! I am glad that you feel it deserves such recommendation! Thanks for reading and taking the time to let me know what it did for you!

Grats on EQD

Damn. This, added with watching Man City win the Premier League title, just gives me so much to cry about

The only reason I didn't cry in the ending is because I've been crying since I saw the title.

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You are a champion, my friend.

That was excellent. Heartwarming and sad throughout.

So I did the only reasonable thing...

I cried

Well done, sir

After reading for just a couple of minutes, I already loved the character Thunderclap. Hell, I loved him after the first paragraph.

The premise is interesting, but it's really the writing that truly makes this story. In my opinion anyway. I love the story, I love the characters, I love the writing, and after seeing how you respond to the comments, I love you (in a healthy, non-sexual way).

As a writer and a person, you are everything I set out to be. You are basically the Thunderclap to my Rainbow Dash. You know... minus the tragedy.

You have most certainly earned a fan today, good sir. Well done and I will be following you :P

I am speechless...

Amazing story...

Congratulations on hitting EQD!

Be prepared for the reader flood!

Very nicely written. Sitting here, chillin and reading it, stuffs going awesome. Get to the ending and stop and be like "what? No!" Very good job.

That was briliant and wonderfull. Very well written, very well thought out.

It is also the only fic in a long while that made me genuinely sad and torn up, got me thinking about life, too. Thank you :)

Genuinely touching and very heartwarming. I can't really say anything about writing techniques as I know very little about them, but I did feel the repetition of certain phrases worked, somehow, and really did add something to the story. Every time I read about those "pinkish, reddish eyes" it just struck a chord for some reason. I don't know..

Thunder Clap was a great character. The almost fatherly love he develops for the struggling little filly throughout the fic is very touching. and so is his death; his final thoughts are a wonderful mix of heartwarming and sad, and he can indeed rest easy knowing he did a small filly a great service and returned something special to the world. I'm sure he'd be happy to know Rainbow remembered his lesson and used it to help another struggling child.

You almost succeeded in getting me teary eyed. Almost.

Beyond words

>>574482574482

That is so helpful actually. I wrote a story once Link:, All I did was sit down without any preparation and write a chapter. First draft got published, didn't end up going so well.

This helped me allot.

With all the joke fics and meta fics that abound, this was a breath of fresh air.

I miss reading something that really tells a story, something that tugs at your heartstrings, and makes you think, and feel, and live.

This was beautiful. Thank you.

Not to discount or discredit the very depressing ending, but I'm going to have to quote/paraphrase The Princess Bride, specifically Inigo Montoya. I don't really think Thunder Clap knows what reasonable means, because he says it all the time.

That. Was. FABULOUS.

And super b'awwww

Jesus Christ...I did not cry...I did not feel down, but you literally shone a light into my life with your word......#1, out of the long list of stories I have in the hall of fame, this beats out every one of them. Thank You

>>585942585942

Thank you!

>>585991585991

I know! Those two goals right at the end......

>>586000586000

I'm doing the best I can!

>>586127586127

Glad that I could give you a bit of emotion to ponder!

>>586151586151

Your comment means a lot to me. This story is based off of my own experience, both in being mentored and mentoring. Best of luck with your writing, and thanks for the feedback!

>>586154586154

Thank you so much!

>>586337586337

Heh, here's hoping!

>>586414586414

Thanks! I'm glad that it caught at you and garnered a reaction! Tanks for reading and commenting!

>>586477586477

I'm very glad that it moved you a little bit! Thanks for taking the time to read and let me know about how it worked for you!

>>586812586812

Your comment means a lot to me. The characterization was the crucial element here, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Only almost? I shall have to try harder next time!

>>587280587280

Thank you......

>>588367588367

I'm glad that I was able to provide you with some "heavier fare", as it were. Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!

>>588443588443

Perhaps not, but I only hope that made him more endearing!

>>588696588696

Thank you so much!

>>589417589417

Your comment means a lot to me. I'm very glad that it moved you! Thanks so much for the feedback!

>>589428589428

Oh yes, like a catchphrase of sorts! It made it rather amusing, reading "And so I did the reasonable thing..." and then him doing something that...wasn't quite reasonable. Added a little bit of flavor to him.

Ah, Celestia dammit Descendant...my eyes...

You got them on that perfect point between crying and not crying, AND IT BURNS SO GOOD.

This one really played with my emotions. Thunderclap is one of the better characters I've seen, and how he dies after helping Rainbow just...

     -Delta-

Can we get a round of applause for Thunder Clap?

WHAT A WAY TO GO but i liked thunder clap he was well realy bucking cool

well i don't like it as much es everyone else seems to, but still enjoyed to read it. nice work.

>>590056590056

I'm glad I was able to write something that really plated at your emotions. Thanks for reading!

>>590165590165

Indeed!

>>590932590932

I'm glad he worked for you as a character, that was really important to me!

>>590965590965

I'm glad that you enjoyed it on any level. Thanks for reading and commenting!

"Read Shine" they said!  "It's hilarious" they said!

Thank you for inspiring me with a wonderful work of art, a deep investigation of the past, the unknown, and the inspiration for the life of rainbow dash. You have graced my mind with a great beauty and have proven yourself a writer of the 10% of all fanfic that is worth reading. To you I give a trademark Thunder Clap smirk delivered by his best student, or maybe 10.

>>591454591454

any one that makes as many reasonable things as him is awsome

only think that found wirad when i thought back about it was him seeing Rainbow Dash

then it hit Correct me if im wroung but i think princess Celstia let him know before the end that becouse of him she would become something so much more then a great flyer.

So sad...

As good as its' inspiration. Beautiful work.

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I'm sorry I'm having fun with portals avatars.

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Deep, loving, and as real as a fictional story could be.  It touched upon what gives meaning to life itself.  Not simply for the rewards or punishments that might occur after, but the trails and successes you had during that preciously brief existence and the people you helped along the way.  Love and be loved.

btw, congrats on the perfect like/dislike streak.  I hope no one comes by and decides to down vote for no real reason (maybe jealousy).

currently at 178(like) to 0(dislike)!

This is a perfect example of good short fiction. The characters were instantly believable and familiar, almost like well established characters. Hard to do in so few words, but you pulled it off.

I really like that you didn't try and work in something about how RD felt about the death. Lot's of authors try to include fallout like that after their dramatic twist, and it rarely works. I also liked that we didn't see the actual letters being traded; even though this was first person, it still flowed like a reminicient narrative, which would have been hurt reading e actual words of the letters.

As for the ending, I think it could have worked with or without the death. The important part was the loss of contact between RD and TC. Maybe the actual descriptions of the impact could have been cut; I think this would have been better left as less-is-more. We'd all figure out what happened, no need to spell it out. This is just a minor quibble, though.

Overall, great story. I love that fan fiction can generate its own fan fiction; I love the motivations and muses behind good art as much as the art itself. Tiny Wings touched me more personally, as I do have a disability and have never had or been a mentor, but this was still special. Thank you for the wonderful read.

>>591458591458

"They" didn't do you any favors, huh? Hope you enjoyed it anyway... ...

>>592586592586

Thank you so much for the high praise! I'm really glad how you caught the smirk going on, that was important to me. Thanks for reading and for commenting!

>>593788593788

Maybe Celestia, maybe the Deep magic of Equestria, but whatever it was... he was cool with it... ...

>>593842593842

Yes. I hope you enjoyed it, though!

>>594294594294

Thank you so much for saying so! I'm especially glad that you feel it was worthy of Tiny Wings.

>>594433594433

Have fun with that!

>>594940594940

Thank you, thank you, thank you for picking up on that core idea. The way that we affect those around us has always been a core idea of my stories, like in Tangled Up in Blues, and A Cup of Joe! I'm glad it shone through here for you.

This is now my most "Liked" story! Hooray!

>>595161595161

Thank you so much for the tremendous feedback. I very much appreciate it.

I knew right away that I was going to center the story on Clap's narrative, so I dumped any idea of actually reading the letters right away.I also knew that  his physical death would end the story, and that I did that for exactly the reasons you mentioned.

The death itself may not have been necessary, but I felt that I needed a solid concluding point. I understand that it may seem like overkill, but I wanted the audience to know that the narrative was complete.

I'm very glad that Tiny Wings was important to you... thank you for following that work here!

Ow my heart

>>597735597735

Heh, walk it off!

Thanks for reading!

>>595923595923 Very enjoyable!  =D

I don't know what it is, but this story is so sad.  Every thing about it (except maybe the guy's jerky actions in the begining- that was pretty amusing.) was sad. This was wonderfully written, and I love it. Nice job.

I think you just murdered my soul with that ending. In a good way, of course. Well, I say good. Very sad but also very good way, if that makes sense. It was a simply amazing read, thank you for writing it, you wonderful person you.

Simply beautiful.

Guy has nice life, helps someone then dies doing what he loves.

Very heartwarming, I'll make sure to watch you from now on.

>>613703613703

I'm very glad that you did! Thanks for taking the time to read and comment!

>>616028616028

Me? Wonderful? Naw, I'm merely good!

I'm glad the story was emotional for you, I always do my best to make it so that the reader has an investment in the characters. I'm glad you feel it worked!

>>616407616407

I'm very glad you liked it! I really appreciate the Watch!

I have great expectations from everything you write, Descendant. I briefly considered favoriting and liking this before I even read. But then I read it. My own grasp of the English language and human psychology can hardly describe what I feel about yours.

As a final note, you are much too humble for your own good. It's unbecoming.

>>618200618200

I know at times it must seem like I'm being humble for humility's sake but I honestly at times still feel like I have no idea what I'm doing. I'm just very glad that people like yourself enjoy my works so much, and I'm very grateful that you choose to read these "fever-dreams" of mine and leave feedback. I honestly mean that, too!

I just finished leaving a huge comment on one of your other stories, so I'll keep this brief.

1. I like the way you think.

2.

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I read this story and thought it was amazing.

So I did the only reasonable thing...

You have earned yourself a watch/follow thingy

Oh yeah. 5/5 Staches for this story

I loved it, every bit of it...That ending was as unexpected as it was unbelievably, heart wrenchingly sad. So this, right here, is the definition of Bittersweet.  

He died, although untimely and horrifically, a happy stallion. One who had completed his life, and did everything that he had ever needed to.

As I sign off, I just want to say, Thank You, this was an amazing piece, and  even better since I have read Tiny Wings a while before this and its great to see it through Lightning's point of view.

Thank You.

>>618547618547

I like the way you comment. We work well together!

>>618970618970

Thank you so much! I'm very glad that you enjoyed the story, and I hope to keep earning your interest!

>>619114619114

I am very glad that you took the time to read both stories, as they simply fit together exactly as you stated. I'm very glad that his journey worked for you. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and to leave me a comment, it is very much appreciated!

This story was so amazing!

Yet sad at the same time.

This is a well deserved 5/5

>>629575629575

I'm very glad that you think so! Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment!

./me breaks into tears and commits seppuku.

>>634836634836

I can understand everything up until the ritual suicide... don't do that, I can't afford to lose readers!

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That ending... Fuck me sideways, it was so deep. I'm just speechless.

Dear sir (ma'am? you can never be too sure), consider yourself watched and this story faved.

And thank you for sharing this piece of art.

>>640513640513

Sir, most definitely sir......

I'm very glad that the story had meaning for you, and I am deeply thankful for the Fave and the Watch!

>>642267642267

You're most certainly welcome. Such piece of literature art deserves nothing less.

Really amazing story, it wasn't an ending that i would liked it, but it really was impressive. Good Work /)

>>657413657413

Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment!

No words. I don't have any words. Made me smile, laugh, cringe, and I damn near cried at the end. If making someone feel is one of the hallmarks of a good story (and it is, in my honest opinion), this story is so far beyond good you can't even see it anymore. Then again, maybe it's just on the other side of the thunderclouds, eh? Bravo, sir.

You know what makes this story echo so much? The recurring themes. "Don't cross the flight line." "I did the only reasonable thing..."

This was amazing. A spellbinding tale of a complete stranger rescuing a child he doesn't even know from her own fears. I can only assume that he died at the end.... but at least he died happy, knowing that he had truly accomplished something selfless in life. Good job, Thunder Clap.

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100/100

>>680174680174

Thank you so much! I'm very glad that it made you feel so many different emotions!

>>685212685212

I use recurring these a lot in my stories, especially Tangled Up in Blues. Even though Clap does die, I'm glad that you feel I captured how justified he felt with his act of lifting Dash out of her fears. Thanks for commenting!

Wow,This Story Got To Me.I Find Myself Wondering Why I Haven't Read This Sooner.

I Look Forward To Reading The Rest Of Your Stories. (^_^)/)(\(^_^)

I Need To Do Better With My Stories.

>>574482574482

Great Writing Advice.

>>700243700243

I look forward to hearing your thoughts on them! Thanks for reading and commenting!

I found this story in an odd sort of way. While going through people's profile pages and thanking them for favoriting my fanfic, over 50% of the time, I saw a comment by you (The Descendant) thanking that same person for adding this story to their favorites. Well if the people who liked my story liked yours as well, I figured it'd probably be worth my time to read this.

And damn, I am glad I did. This story was perfect. I can't think of a single flaw or thing I would change. It's also one of the few fanfics that ever made me cry, which is quite an accomplishment. Kudos to you, Descendant. You've written a wonderful little tale that will stick with me for the rest of my life.

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No matter how round about the manner, I'm very glad that you did find it. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment!