When an magical anomaly cause dimensional rifts to appear across the human world and pony world slowly merging them together. Will two separate worlds merge seamlessly or destroy each other in the merging. How will the societies change with the introduction of Equestrian magic and Human Technology? Will both parties be able to adapt to each others societal standards? (Crossover in the sense that i will bump up human technology using tech from Command and Conquer 3, and Votoms. I will also some characters from the respective series.)
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Interesting story.
Awesome! Please keep it coming! I want action and epic parts on this one!
Well this turned out to be an interesting start. I was already surprised that there was a Super Robot Wars fanfic on the site (which I help with pre-reading), but one with a heavy VOTOMS influence is definitely unexpected. I definitely look forward to see how this turns out. Also, I really like Sunsets family situation. I've never seen this version before.
Definitely hope Chirico appears or at least has a cameo. He's definitely turned into one of my favorite anime characters:
I can help with proofreading and grammar, if you are interested. Also, your second link in the fic itself is broken.
5808234 Thanks for the compliment. About Sunsets Family: I wanted to try something a little different cause it is always Sunset kill human Sunset, Sunset lives by herself, Human Sunset runs away and never returns, or she isn't mention at all. So I figure why not have them live together as twins you know falsify a few documents, bribe a few doctors who were their for the human Sunset's birth, etc. which I believe more fanfics with Sunset should do just to make things interesting.
Don't worry Chirico;s coming and armed with his pistol that can destroy ships. I will also add other groups like the Black Lightnings from Alone again, and the EX-10 from the original votoms.
Also Sure I will take you up on your offer for proofreading and grammar. I will also need help with some help with scale. Like how tall is the are the buildings in Ponyville including the friendship castle compared tp the average sized (18 meters) mobile suit.
Also since a fellow mecha fan read my fic I will gladly announce two more fics in the works. One with gundam, and the other with T.C.B and Patlabor. Gundam one is coming soon. TCB/Patlabor still in the planning stages.
5809598 Ok, I can try to help with scaling, when the time comes. Thankfully, A.T.'s usually have a consistent height (~4 meters) and most mobile suits (~16-18 meters depending on the series). I've never seen/watched/played Command and Conquer 3, so I probably won't be much help there.
Anyway, will you send me the next chapter and I'll proofread before you post, or do you want to do it some other way? Honestly, no mistakes jumped out at me last night, but a second reader is always helpful I suppose.
I'm glad Chirico and his god-killing pistol will be here.
Hmmmmm..... You caught my interest. Do continue, my good sir.
5835122 I was wondering what caught your interest with my story? I am just looking for some opinions and input.
5835626 Well seeing that the EQG (your story's human world) is very advanced and may have similar culture (at least in the city locale) with Equestria. Also liked to see how this world collision would unfold especially when the prisoners of Tartarus are unleashed.
You can PM me regarding what input you wish to have. I'll provide what I can.
Summary corrections!
Ew.
Rewritten example:
When a magical anomaly causes dimensional rifts to appear across both Equus and Earth, they begin to slowly merge.
Rewritten example:
Will two separate worlds combine seamlessly, or destroy each other in the process?
Don't forget question marks for, you know, questions.
Small edit, pretty much solid there. Change "the societies" to "their societies."
Nitpicking, really, but incorrect all the same. Put an apostrophe at the end of "others."
Good luck!
Update this please?^_^
Sorry for doing this but I want to promote my story. If you find this annoying, just skip down and read my actual comment. If you are a Gundam fan, read my story, Gundam UC0079. It is based on the original Gundam.
I hope if you do check it out, plz comment.
It's very interesting indeed
I love Votoms and always ways will
I have seen all the episodes of the original series and all the OVAs
I really like Last Red Shoulder and Roots of Ambition
Spoilers if you haven't seen OVAs Shining Heresy or Alone Again
My least favorite is Alone Again or the one where Titania from Shining Heresy dies. I'm pretty sure they just used it for that. Well any way this story is good and I look forward to you updating this story
Is it dead
This is looking interesting, can't wait to see how this goes!
Is someone gonna adopt this story?