Still stuck in his agreement to aid twilight with her changeling research, Max stops by the library for his weekly interrogation. Unfortunately, Twilights not the only one asking the questions today.
First time posting something that rides the line, so rated T for now. If it bothers people, I'll bump it up, though I don't think I'll need to. I'd say take the story with a grain of salt, but I don't condone underage intoxication.
So I'm still keeping super powers a one-shot. However, I want to write this out now, possibly to be added to "the one who fell through the world" or as a compilation of side-stories at a later time. However, it's my story and I want to write it NOW! Seriously, it's sitting right next to me, on my notebook. I need to move it.
A bit odd, convoluted and incoherent, but strangely fun.
I'm imagining the fact that the protagonist is both a changeling and former human is confusing, you need to spell out when you're referring to Max's differences as a changeling or as a dimension-shifted human.
Also, title capitalization. Capitalize the first and last word, and capitalize every word that is significant (so any word that isn't the, is, and, etc.)
Some people might be skipping your story because it isn't properly capitalized.
The story was pretty good, but you could use an editor. There are a couple spacing and tense issues and points were the pacing kinda jolts when the readers could have used an extra paragraph to smooth the story telling out a bit.
Either Max is a lightweight, or that was a tonne of lust he got hit with.
Sequel oh and pony shotgun wedding would a buckun ( buck-un ) wedding.
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5539500 I'll check back and make the changes. This is actually the longest one I've written so far, and it's looking like writing it up at work isn't as clean as I'd hoped it would be. Maybe it's the breaks between thoughts? My first few stories I wrote all at once, so I think they flowed pretty well. There's also the fact that this is the first time I've tried transitions between different events. It's actually a bit more difficult than I thought it would be.
As for the differences, I thought it would be kind of obvious that he was referring to the changeling part, seeing as he was kind of revealed there. The only one's who know he's human are those he would have specifically mentioned this to. Heck, all Twilight knows is he was "something else".
I'll re-edit the story when I get back from work.
Edit: i'll hit it tomorrow, I'm feeling tired, and I'll do terribad job of editing if I do it in this condition.
Hmm, yup, gonna follow yah. Just fer yer changelin' one-shots, yah dig?
Is this part of a continuum? I'd dig it.
5540132 from the story description:
also there:
is not? 's not? i dunno but it feels wrong.
now for the actual story:
Oh gods, I need more of Max, he's hilarious!!
Hah, that was cool.
Is there a story behind Max?
Nearly three years later, and I'm still trying to figure out the name reference. I can only assume it's the name of the town or the two ponies Max encounters, or possibly a combination of both. Or there's just something I'm completely missing through lack of context.
A pre-firearm name for shotgun weddings was knobstick weddings, although the name is a little unfortunate today. Possibly something like "spearpoint weddings"? Seems a little violent for ponies, though... maybe something more like "the family insisted".
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Bushels? Yea, a play on the city of Brussels