One Handsome Stoned VISIONARY, add some mechanical extraction by one claptrap unit, two loaderbots and a escape during Tirak's antics in the capital as cover and you have one freed possibly near psychotic Displaced keeping it together barely by rage.
5503693 We ask thee to wait for more written later on, though we are happy to hear that thou considers our little human 'john' to be a 'badass', admittedly quite a few of this creations are too.
5503700 It may have been rushed from thy perspective, though consider how efficient these machines can be regardless of their comedy quirks. Also F.A.U.S.T.'s plans and simulations made the spectacle rather 'easy' since she caught them exhausted and their guard lowered.
So, is this the real handsome jack, or...eh, but I look forward to this! (Aaaand great, now I have the thought of ursala in kingdom hearts saying that...)
5503737 We may have to consider this, as this reality's language has been a 'adjustment' towards us. Not that we feel bothered by it, just simply stating how we ENJOY typing with our tentacles!
5504023 YEEEEESS....! We shall definitely include this, we thank thee. Though finding a DIAMOND crystal pony shall be a challenge, perhaps not, we did bring up a good point about them not having SEARCHED for possible living royal line. *places down a stereo and presses the play button with a thunderclap with manic laughing from Handsome Jack.*
Hmmmm, very interesting presence. You writing style could use some refining, do you have an editor? It's not that yours is bad, just feels like the flow from one perspective or scene to another is a bit stilted.
If you do have one, I'd recommend checking out other fics for a hints and ideas, such as the following.
It's not the best example, but a good one. Give it a look over, and let me know what you think. As is, loving the idea of a Displaced becoming Jack and trying to do good. Though you might want to clarify how Tia messed up, her thought process, and her own realizations and attempts to change/mitigate her mistakes from here on. Also, Subplot with legitimate heir to Crystal Throne is a brilliant idea, I highly recommend going with it.
5504253 First of all as we had stated before we have no mortal editor for our human(s) travels, secondly we shall read thy suggestion in hopes to improve ourselves. As for explaining why the demigoddess had assumed the worse she will explain it when the elements come, also her actions may have led to nightmare moon being born at the end when he was stoned.
As for the crystal empire we have felt irked that there wouldn't have been a direct bloodline hidden away in the city to save them from sombra's tyrannical ways, also our human being the one whom made the heart may have an easy way to find said pony, also the humorous antics to be had when they meet shall be glorious. a simple word will start off the 'odd' friendship, "Come Buttstallion I have come to take you out of this squallier and to your rightful throne!" a dumbfounded reaction by said mare and possible child. "I'm not this buttstallion but I'm a mare-" interruption by Handsome Jack "That's a small detail lets get you going onto the crystal throne, I've got my bots securing the insurgents for your judging!" As a possible to happen.
...Oooookkkkk, well, thanks for getting back to me so quick. If you'd like a...well, somewhat mortal hand, I'd be more than happy to help. Granted, my time these days is a bit erratic, but I figure I can go over some stuff if you'd like a second pair of eyes. That said I'm a HUGE Borderlands fan, so most if not all references, I'll get easily enough.
That said...ummm...hmmm...how do I put this? Buttstallion...ok, not gunna lie, every time I think of her, i think of Tiny Tina. And bare in mind, I know it's a stretch. But having Tina somehow get involved will likely cause any and all fans of the Pandoran persuasion to collectively squee and declare this fiction "The. Best. Possible. THING!!!" ...yeah, HOW that would work, I've got a vague idea that may resemble the start of a plan, but again, your call.
As an aside...well...I think we MIGHT need to contact someone for some fan art. A pony style Claptrap unit remains a bit beyond my meager imagination to picture...at least well. Beyond that, just let me know either via Pm or reply if you are interested. I know lots of other fictional universes, so anything else you want to throw into the mix, and at worst I'll just look it up and hopefully follow the train of thought.
PS. Replaying Borderlands 1, in Jacob's Cove...I LOVE Headshotting Zombies!
5504372 There will be a coming in depth conversation over possible some form of lunch thy beings would call it, or simply a very dark room with thou held in our tentacle grasp as we chat and plot many things.
We had made a few thoughts on one to be similar to Tiny Tina, one of which was being another like Claptrap since F.A.U.S.T. had PLENTY of time on her OS to produce wicked things, one of which quite possibly being the accidental creation of the 'elusive' (NOT) Skag which roams the badlands.
Wow. That was badass.
Feels a bit rushed, but loved nonetheless
5503693 We ask thee to wait for more written later on, though we are happy to hear that thou considers our little human 'john' to be a 'badass', admittedly quite a few of this creations are too.
5503700 It may have been rushed from thy perspective, though consider how efficient these machines can be regardless of their comedy quirks. Also F.A.U.S.T.'s plans and simulations made the spectacle rather 'easy' since she caught them exhausted and their guard lowered.
Not bad, though you really, REALLY need an editor.
So, is this the real handsome jack, or...eh, but I look forward to this! (Aaaand great, now I have the thought of ursala in kingdom hearts saying that...)
5503737 We may have to consider this, as this reality's language has been a 'adjustment' towards us. Not that we feel bothered by it, just simply stating how we ENJOY typing with our tentacles!
5503740 Let us say that he was a normal human dressed as him, by some human name of 'John' something.
5503753
ah, ok then, interesting.
5503756 *points a appendage towards the blog for some info too.*
BUTTSTALLION! AWAY!
5503797 So thou knows, we are tempted to influence our little human into possibly foalnapping a Crystal Pony.
5503921 We thank thee.
#beststory
5503953 We feel our ego will bloat to that of a extremely fat hobbit if thou praises us as one would the sun.
5503805 Make sure the Crystal Pony is a mare. For the irony.
5504023 YEEEEESS....! We shall definitely include this, we thank thee. Though finding a DIAMOND crystal pony shall be a challenge, perhaps not, we did bring up a good point about them not having SEARCHED for possible living royal line. *places down a stereo and presses the play button with a thunderclap with manic laughing from Handsome Jack.*
5504037 *Awkwardly joins in with the maniac laughter*
5504070 The feelings shall feed our inspiration!
5504105 I can see it now
HJ "ButtStallion here girl."
ButtStallion "I told you I am a mare. At least call me ButtMare."
Hmmmm, very interesting presence. You writing style could use some refining, do you have an editor? It's not that yours is bad, just feels like the flow from one perspective or scene to another is a bit stilted.
If you do have one, I'd recommend checking out other fics for a hints and ideas, such as the following.
One of Many Fics I read
It's not the best example, but a good one. Give it a look over, and let me know what you think. As is, loving the idea of a Displaced becoming Jack and trying to do good. Though you might want to clarify how Tia messed up, her thought process, and her own realizations and attempts to change/mitigate her mistakes from here on. Also, Subplot with legitimate heir to Crystal Throne is a brilliant idea, I highly recommend going with it.
Best of luck!
5504253 First of all as we had stated before we have no mortal editor for our human(s) travels, secondly we shall read thy suggestion in hopes to improve ourselves. As for explaining why the demigoddess had assumed the worse she will explain it when the elements come, also her actions may have led to nightmare moon being born at the end when he was stoned.
As for the crystal empire we have felt irked that there wouldn't have been a direct bloodline hidden away in the city to save them from sombra's tyrannical ways, also our human being the one whom made the heart may have an easy way to find said pony, also the humorous antics to be had when they meet shall be glorious. a simple word will start off the 'odd' friendship, "Come Buttstallion I have come to take you out of this squallier and to your rightful throne!" a dumbfounded reaction by said mare and possible child. "I'm not this buttstallion but I'm a mare-" interruption by Handsome Jack "That's a small detail lets get you going onto the crystal throne, I've got my bots securing the insurgents for your judging!" As a possible to happen.
5504293
...Oooookkkkk, well, thanks for getting back to me so quick. If you'd like a...well, somewhat mortal hand, I'd be more than happy to help. Granted, my time these days is a bit erratic, but I figure I can go over some stuff if you'd like a second pair of eyes. That said I'm a HUGE Borderlands fan, so most if not all references, I'll get easily enough.
That said...ummm...hmmm...how do I put this? Buttstallion...ok, not gunna lie, every time I think of her, i think of Tiny Tina. And bare in mind, I know it's a stretch. But having Tina somehow get involved will likely cause any and all fans of the Pandoran persuasion to collectively squee and declare this fiction "The. Best. Possible. THING!!!" ...yeah, HOW that would work, I've got a vague idea that may resemble the start of a plan, but again, your call.
As an aside...well...I think we MIGHT need to contact someone for some fan art. A pony style Claptrap unit remains a bit beyond my meager imagination to picture...at least well. Beyond that, just let me know either via Pm or reply if you are interested. I know lots of other fictional universes, so anything else you want to throw into the mix, and at worst I'll just look it up and hopefully follow the train of thought.
PS. Replaying Borderlands 1, in Jacob's Cove...I LOVE Headshotting Zombies!
5503978 #praisesoontobefathobbit
5504372 There will be a coming in depth conversation over possible some form of lunch thy beings would call it, or simply a very dark room with thou held in our tentacle grasp as we chat and plot many things.
We had made a few thoughts on one to be similar to Tiny Tina, one of which was being another like Claptrap since F.A.U.S.T. had PLENTY of time on her OS to produce wicked things, one of which quite possibly being the accidental creation of the 'elusive' (NOT) Skag which roams the badlands.
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^More or less my reaction to this...
Good to see a Displaced story that calls Celestia on her BS from the start and tells why it her fault everything going to hell
FINALLY!!!! Not many will come out and say what ti's instating Caddy and shiny really is
Meh, not able to get into my top ten of Displaced fics with all the bad grammar in this chapter. 5/10 for effort.