Travis Touchdown has quit the assassination business and is trying to get his life back to normal. This plan falls apart when he receives a phone call from someone who claims to be royalty from a country he never heard of. One built on friendship.
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This chapter was the most tragic one. I admit that a Peaches and a Cream were a badass duo, given that they technically defeated Spike and Travis. Hell, the fact that a Spike could keep up and incorporated his flames to his sword was amazing. Still, as a twin, I found it tragic that Travis actually managed to make Cream doubt her sister so much to perform a murder-suicided and Peaches' last words along with the girls traumatized reactions to the events was sad. On the other hand, I found it funny that Pinkie adopted Shinobu's look and started to flirt with Travis...her jealous reaction at the end made me laugh. Overall, this chapter was great.
5724263 Aw, dude. Sorry if I made you a bit sad, but this chapter did kind of come from the fact that I'm the black sheep out of my brothers. They both listen to folk music and indie rock, I listen to punk rock and heavy metal. They both enjoy playing sports, but I'm more of a low impact kind of guy. The differences between us go on, and frankly, it's kind of a downer when you know just how different you are from your own siblings, as is the case with Peaches and Cream. Glad you liked the chapter, though. Get ready for the next one.
this is going to be a really short story right? I thought this would be a bigger story, but till now it looks like
1. Chapter arrival
2. Assassin fight (with timeskip about any kind of training)
3. Assassin fight (probably the same) i still have to read it
4.Assassin fight
5.Assassin fight
6.Assasin fight
7.Assasin fight
8.Assasin fight
9.Maybe final fight or ending.
I can´t say if it is going to happen like that, but it looks like it right now, and i don´t like it that much.
I don´t hate your story, but i hate the idea that the story could be a nonstop fight till the end and then it´s over, i would miss a bit slice of life in those chapters
Maybe you answered already at my last comment, which was more or less about the same thing, but i didn´t got anything, so i thought i ask again, because i don´t really want to read it, if this is goint to be just fight and fight, and then the end.
5725147 Didn’t you read the Author's Notes? The next chapter is going to be Travis's daily life around Ponyville. I did read your previous comments, and I decided that you were right about slice-of-life chapters being important. And it's not going to just be one chapter, it's going to be about three or four. More if I think of something good.
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you mean this? I am not sure, probably not, but it could be that i just forget what you have written too, because i read really much at the moment, but sometimes i don´t look at the notes, because half of the time there isn´t always something important in other storys, or at least not everytime.
The third option is, i just didn´t noticed it, but because i don´t know it anymore i can´t tell you what it was.
Well i believe you, sorry if i jumped on conclusion to say so, to be honest it is going to be still a bit weird till i read the next chapter about his normal life, but i give it a fair chance.
ohh you meant this, sorry but i didn´t read this chapter till now, i wanted to write this comment because i noticed it was already the third fight.
It feels still a bit weird that Spike is more or less already able to do damage to those more than well trained killers, but then again Link could be 2 years old, he would only need a sword a shild, awesome clothes, and then hsi own Ganondorf that he could kill.
Funny ending, even if i wasn´t quite fond of the idea about another fight after the last one, i have to say this chapter had his moments.
I think you managed it to make me enjoy Pinkie X Travis. (Trakie? i am not convinced about this short name of the shipping, but i thought i could still mention it.)
I am still no fan of Rarity X Spike, because i like Rarity, but not everything about Spike, and because i think they don´t fit that good, but the main reason good be (for this story), that i am not that fond of super Spike and his muscle of steel. I think i am a bit to realistic in this story, but i think it is to odd that Spike is getting strong that easily, he should still loose against most of the assasins, and be only able to fight against lackeys. I guess after half of the assassin he could start to have someone that could be weak against his fighting style or something like that, but Travis should do the most.
I would like to see Rainbow Dash fighting again, i think that he would win is a bit more realistic, but maybe Pinkie could start to fight too, random Assassin Power activated or something like that, and suddenly she has learned Shinobus Sonic....slash?
Twilight.... That is the most wonderful thing I have ever heard.... I want one as well!!
Tuscaneigh? Gonna have to remember that one. So hard coming up with horse puns for location names sometimes.