Travis Touchdown has quit the assassination business and is trying to get his life back to normal. This plan falls apart when he receives a phone call from someone who claims to be royalty from a country he never heard of. One built on friendship.
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>Travis trains Spike and Rainbow Dash
inb4 Shinobu comes to town to deal with competition
I really hoped he would not go directly towards another fight, and that we would see a bit normal stuff too, but well...
Somehow it seems that i hate Spike with any kind of power, well he is not my favourite character, but it could be worse. I try to never judge a story because of this.
Sorry, it is not only because of Spike, but i don´t like this chapter very much.
I don´t know what you have planned for the story, but i would say you should make a view normall chapters too, i mean not just timeskip and a serious battle afterwards. If the story should be like a battle every chapter, and a sudden ending, then i think i can´t really get a good connection to the story and a romance would not feel right probably.
To be honest, i hate timeskips because some things don´t work if they are suddenly there, and even if i don´t like Spike, i don´t believe that he would be able to fight against anything strong that early in the story, with only one or two weeks of training and no real experience.
I can say that i like the new assasing at least. For me it would be important to have at least a few chapters for his first days in Equestria, i think it was to soon for a timeskip.
Awesome fight. It was funny watching Spike learning Lucha liber and getting Twilight get pissed at Travis for letting him fight a hydra. I also found PP's slight crush in Travis, particularly the way she protected the cupcakes, to be hilarious. It was a nice chapter.
They took the hard route taking down that butterfly. Whole thing could've been over if they just had a big ole' boot. Or a flyswatter.