Jeff is any ordinary, 15 year old, happy to be, brony. Up until now, he has always been a normal person with normal dreams, other than his dreams with Friendship is Magic of course. In a normal dream he has been having for more than a year, he finds a portal to Equestria, but he always stirs awake before he is able to enter.
Until one day, that is.
The Cover Image is not ready yet, as I will be forcin- I mean, 'asking' AllPonyProductions to draw it for me. If not, I will make it on GIMP or something like that...
My first fan fiction ever written. Criticism and helpful advice is always welcome :)
Jeff is just a random name and person I thought about on the spot, and the story in question is just something that popped into my head one day :)
Chapters (13)
Interesting, continue please.
Also, Jeff is my middle name so I use that name often in stories I write.
Make moar please
Sincerely the Doctor
nice prologue, im looking forward for the next chapters
Ps. Dont let the thumb downs get to you, they are just grammar Nazi's
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Thanks to everyone :) and yeah, grammar is not really my strong suit. I didn't really look over this chapter as much as I will be in the next ones, and I actually have noticed some of the grammar and a continuation error (Which I've already fixed). I'll get to fixing all them up when I'm finished writing the next chapter :D
I know what you mean, Danish is my first language so if i didn't have prereaders i would be F'ed,
keep on writing ma man
YES this is amazing
Sincerely the Doctor
Nice I like it
Following.
Also, I don't clop but uh...
“Come,” she says to me, and turns around
Giggity.
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Judging by the guy in the picture, not sure if good thing, or bad thing
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NOSTALGIA CRITIC BRO.
It's a good thing.
creepy....u just discribed me...following
Wow... I honestly did not expect people to like this story so much. (Even if it's only 15-16 favorites, I expected only about 5) Thank you to everyone who is supporting me, and I have come up with two update days: Tuesdays, and Fridays are when I'll upload the new chapters from now one, so about 2 chapters a week. Thanks to everyone for supporting, and keep calm and brony on!
Not bad at all. I noticed alot of present tense stuff there, though. Wanna do anything with that?
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Yeah, I know. I was kind of expecting the first few chapters to pretty much be Jeff explaining how he got to Equestria, (Like Prologue til Chapter 2.). I guess I should've explained that a little further. Once I find time, I'll be sure to go back and fix just about everything in the story.
Good chapter!
Classic introduction to Ponyville, a party!
Is it me or does Pinkie seem like an extremely random, all-knowing, physics defying, super-pony? Well actually that's just the randomness that is Miss Pinkamena Dianne Pie. If I try to make sense of her like I do everything else I'll drive myself mad.
So in other words if you can't make sense of something just ignore it.
This pretty much makes my point.
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"...made me VERY.." VERY what?
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Aw shiz. A person named omgwtf also noticed that, and I came here to see if anyone else did.
It's supposed to say "...made me VERY paranoid..." Dunno what happened there...
...I dont know how to feel about you using James from What Separates in the story. It doesn't feel right just using a character like that.
Thanks for puttin in my OC bro!
not sure if i enjoyed that.... or I'm trippen on somant.... ether way good story so far.... i think
YES! I love crossover fics(I mean crossover with other fics), basically cuz I can read it in several points of view.
601476 he ending off where i will finish my soon to be trilogy so read those for.... A better point of view..... I guess
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Wha- What? I've never read What Seperates, and nobody in my story is named James, so....
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Yeah, this is a crossover of my friends (AllPonyProductions) Soon-To-Be story he's writing. It basically explains how Green Cloud got in Equestria (In a more in depth way), and more about White Rose, Blue Lightning, and the other things that he goes through.
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If it isn't from the story, it is an INCREDIBLE coincidence. I mean the teleporting tower, the name, etc. It all matches What Separates EXACTLY. If you haven't read it yet, you must!
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I just read Chapter 1 of What Seperates, and holy Hell are you right. Green Cloud's way of getting to Equestria is very similar to James', as are their names. I'm sorry if it seems like I copied off his story.
I like. You deserve more veiws, but sadly ponies these days seem to have something against human in equestria fics.
I could tell that this chapter was inspired by 3 basic thoughts or more,
great story!
My only reaction th04.deviantart.net/fs51/150/f/2009/315/e/a/unicorn_rape_by_queen_zombie.jpg UNICORN RAPE!
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Oh my god why the hell would you bring this up you are dumb i feel like slapping you now
First... White rosey?.... Does that really sound like something I would say?...really
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Uh eh err... Yes it does.
Also, it's just Rosey, not White Rosey
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ffffffuuuuuuccckkkk
Rosey?
,still can't blame Cloud, it's either that or whitey
635738 ok i dont uassly post comments on peoples account pictures but....... OMFG THAT PICTURE OF FLUTTERSHY JUST KILLED MY HEART WITH DAAAWWWWWWW
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I know, that's why I made it my profile pic; to kill everybody on this site with dangerous amounts of D'AWWWW.
635738 shut the f**k up
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Heeeey. That's not nice. Apologize!
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it took you time to reply,
I apologize if that was a 'special-pet-name-only-you-can-use' or something, I guess it was unfair of me to use the name you fancy and adore so much.
First...
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657204 I just noticed that in almost every post you made on this, you say some variation of swearing...
Stop swearing bro
I can see this turning 2 ways around
1st*spoiler*
2nd*spoiler*
am I right or am I right?
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Everyone dies in the next chapter.
No wait... That doesn't happen. Sorry, scratch that...
Buuutt... I think I'll have something bad happen to Green Cloud, just to piss off my friend
STORY IS FINALLY UPDATED! HOLY BUG IN A PIZZA BOX, THAT TOOK A LONG TIME!!!
Enjoy!
776879 liar everyone did die in that chapterr
First and about swearing in all of my comments
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now how did the doctor know the amount of power Celestia and Luna possess?
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You know, rumors say that bans are handed out for saying 'first'. Just thought you might wanna know. You're welcome.