Cutie Marks, The Elements of Harmony, the Crystal Heart, alicorns, the rise of Nightmare Moon, the fall of the Crystal Empire-
These are seemingly unrelated events are believed to act separately from one another... But they aren't. Starswirl, the greatest magic-user of all of equine history, was on the verge of something big. After his disappearance, Equestria bore wittness to Starswirl's Laws of Magic. They were never questioned, for they were proven true.
No one questioned why Luna was banished to the moon by the Elements of Harmony only to be released from her Nightmare by those same Elements. No one questioned why the Crystal Heart was fueled by the citizens of the Crystal Empire. No one questions how one alicorn can raise both the sun and the moon, but fall to the power of a changeling's magic. All believe these laws to be concrete despite all the inconsistencies.
But when a tyrant hints at knowing more about the laws and magical theory, will this blasphemy be added to his list crimes, or will they listen to his warning of the future?
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How the mighty have fallen.
There are a few spelling errors in both chapters, one misplaced capitalized letter in chapter 1, and the following sentence works better with part vice are:
One more misplaced capitalized letter at the end of chapter 2:
Also in the first chapter you missed using the word scroll, in the first paragraph, based off the description of what the guard is holding later in the same paragraph.
All in all I enjoyed reading what you have up so far and am quite interested in seeing what this prophecy is and what Starswirl's Laws of Magic are. Looking forward to the next chapter.
"would run as smoothly as possible"
you should look over this again. You keep leaving off the odd letter in words.
5368732 yeah... I usually write these things late at night... So... Sleep sepravity was the bigger issue...
Sorry...
5369689 why are you dead
Good