I think the story itself is good so far, but the writing could use some editing. (I'm offering, if you want.)

Most common problem I spotted: When a quote would end with a period and be followed by 'he said' (or similar,) the period becomes a comma and the 'he said' after doesn't get capitalized.

Wrong: "Words." He said.
Right: "Words," he said.

Glorious.
You have Deadpool down pat.

5265048 m2pt5, thank you! I'll go through and fix that. I don't have an editor/beta reader, so sorry for the mistakes. I'll PM you about editing so we don't take up space in the comments section.

5266125 Flutters Is Shy, thank you! I was worried about it, because I'm not writing his text box's dialogue out. I have some notions about those little voices/boxes though.

This is glorious! Deadpool at his finest, even though I miss his yellow boxes.^^

Equestria just can be glad he did not transform into a Unicorn. Imagine it. Deadpool with magic!

5266961 the insanity whild be limitless.
The insanity. So dark. So beutyful.

I clicked on it because of Deadpool. I'm going to favorite it because of Deadpool. I am a fan of Deadpool and this site needs more stories with Deadpool. Deadpool is awesome. The story is good, as well.

Are we going to have to deal with the subject of the "K" word, out of curiosity?

5268988 deadpool, deadpool, deadpool, deadpool, deadpool, deadpool
ERROR you have over used the word "deadpool" please use another word

5266961 Don't worry, I have plans for his boxes.

5269934
Freude!

5268988 Thank you! I don't know what happened, Deadpool just grabbed my brain and wouldn't let go until I started this story.

5269358 I haven't completely decided if this is Ultimate Deadpool or not. I have seen the Ultimate Deapool episode of Ultimate Spiderman, but we just started DVRing that so I'm not sure if I've missed any of his appearances or not. I'm not sure if Ultimate DP is different enough that I'd be writing him OOC or something. Though I did make a meta joke about Ultimate Deapool's voice actor in the first paragraph. (It is totally my headcannon that Ultimate Deadpool is Ron Stoppable. )

5269945
Oh my gosh! That would be so awesome of that were true!
Stoppable's my boy!

Yah, it needs a quick polish. Noted some instances of odd sentence structure and the occasional errant phrase. Alas, I suck most heartily as an editor so I cannot assist. However ...

I like what you have so far. Alot of fic writers try to make Deadpool way too zany and random and it just comes off as annoying. I think you've got a good handle on Deadpool, he's still the crazy merc with the mouth, but you are able to keep things in check so he's entertaining rather than obnoxious.

5270334 I found an editor, thank you! I hope chapter one is a bit better now, after editing.

Writing for Zecora was really difficult I tried not to force the rhymes too awkwardly but, I dunno. And if anyone else was wondering, she IS rhyming, I'm just using more than the AABB, and ABAB, rhyming schemes.

5270778 Thank you! I'm not sure if I should be concerned for myself that I understand DP so well though.

no need more chapters i hate cliff hangers

5283970 My goal is to get the next chapter out before American Thanksgiving. I just hope I can do it in time.

i can since there is a lot

of fan mad stories i'll probably die before i finish them all

im just going to post stupid videos of random stuff i found in youtube

my fav anti-villin/hero. Can't wait for him to run into the Mane Six and what each of their reactions will be.

Well... this is going to be interesting

deadpool+ pinkie= THIS IS MADNES!!!!!

5266825 I need some normal spray, this is gonna make me get even more cuckoo in the head -_-.

Also, Rhyming is hard!

#Deadpony FTW

What's wrong with becoming a god out of greed?