Pokemon... and ponies? MY LIFE JUST GOT BETTER! now to dig out my old pokemon games and name all of them after MLP characters.

First.

favorite pokemon: lucario

favorite mlp character: luna

instant fav for the win!

>>500364500364 favorite pokemon: magikarp.

Well, so far I'm liking what I see. Can't wait to see how this story pans out.

>>500376500376 oh yea well...

Image: http://fc01.deviantart.net/fs16/f/2007/177/6/b/MAGIKARP_USE_A_SPLASH_ATTACK_by_link740.png

epic

i am tracking this

>>500376500376 Does Magikarp have an awesome nickname? Like Grave?

Decently written? Luna? LUCARIO? I need to read more of this.

Pokemon!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

YAY!!

keep up the good work

Ponies? Epic.

Pokemon? Epic

Ponies AND Pokemon at one time? Nerd-gasm.

I wouldn't mind proofreading for you, and I very much like the story concept you have going here. Lucario is now best pony. Wait, what?

Hmm, a Pokemon Pony Crossfic that does not make me cringe while reading? I will have to follow this

>>500376500376

Magikarps can jump over mountains, MOTHER FUDGING MOUNTAINS.

Ho lee schitt. ME GUSTA. A lot.

Pikachu and Twilight approve this story!

It's got some decent writing, and it opens up the story very well.  Plus, getting the wolves to back off with just one word?  BAD@$$!

Tracking

even though i don't like pokemon this fic is awsome! tracking.

iv been waiting for this fic (like this one)

i will read and savoir everytime youll update (translation: traking and liking)

sweet lucario is here bitches

*scrolling up and down aimlessly*

WAIT WAS THAT LUCARIO??!

Us amateurs gotta stick together, and this fic is just great

You earned yourself another reader

Que epic fic!

a LunaxLucario shipfic?

Now THIS I gotta see!

OH SHIT SON, YOU MAKE ME PROUD!

>>500457500457 I just might take you up on that offer. Misspellings or wrong choice of words can ruin an entire story in my opinion so I would be very grateful for the help...um, that is if you aren't busy or anything...wouldn't want to be a burden

>>500643500643 Thank you for putting up with my writing. Hopefully I'll improve down the line

>>501193501193 Thank you for your support, brotha

moar soon please!

>>503801503801 Just posted chapter 2. Happy read- Oh wait, you MEAN the second chapter, I get it

I NEED MOAR!!1!!1

oh and good job, im love n it!

Excellent characterization concerning the CMC and Applejack. The only negative points are some run-on sentences which disrupt what would otherwise be a well-flowing story.I would also try being a little less wordy, but don't let that make you think I'm not enjoying the story! Nice concept, and you're executing it well!

>>503874503874 Oh Blue Wolf, you scary schizophrenic you

A DSDJSG NEED MOASFR MOASFR MOASFR!

>>503878503878 I will admit that one of my weaknesses in writing is just what you mentioned. Some sentences goes on for WAY too long and I'm constantly confused over just how much I need to describe a situation or a character's thoughts. Hopefully I'll get the hang of it as the story goes on. Thank you for your opinion!

>>503898503898 Whoawhoawhoa, dude, take a deep breath...grab a Klondike Bar...and relax. There's more to come, I assure you

Wording mistake:

“I…I have to confess that I haven’t paid any intention to the clock tonight.” Luna admitted with a light blush.

It should be attention.

BTW great story so far!

>>504009504009 Oh horseapples, how could I have missed that?! Edited and fixed. Thank you for telling me

I just have one question: Is this the same Lucario that met Ash?

Nice chapter as always. Keep it up

comeon......aura spirit bomb......

>>503927503927 ok calm...calm mmmmgfmhsdfh sdzwEVSSVZSDBS S GSRS

I like how Celestia leaned on the fourth wall for a bit.

update woo hoo

I wanna be, the very best... DANANA

like no one ever was... DA NA NANA

to catch them is my real test, to train them is my cause... DANANA

SING ALONG EVERYPONY

This is interesting, i think ya got something there lad, i'll be tracking this to see what will come of it, who knows you might have a future follower if ya keep up the good work.

Looks like SOMEone used a full restore...

I swear to God, for every chapter of this I'm gonna post another pokemon reference.

I now require DashxGardevior and my life will be complete.

>>504766504766

(skipping this part)

these Pokemon, they understand,

the power thats insi-i-i-i-i-e-e-e-e-e-e-PIKACHUUUU!!!

WUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUBWUB...

great job with the story, I'm looking forward to seeing more Lucario badass-ness. Keep goin and stay golden^^

>>504130504130 Yes...and no. It is the same Lucario from the "Lucario and the Mystery of Mew" movie. However I have heavily rewritten his backstory so that he never met Ash at all, thus the "Alternate Universe" tag. His past is going to play an important part later on, but for now I'll keep it a secret. I'll throw in a few subtle hints in the next chapter.

>>504818504818 I'll do my best not to let you down, good sir

>>504905504905 I'm going to reveal why he healed so fast in the next chapter. SPOILERS: It's not a full restore

>>504372504372 [...she hadn’t actually met the primary character of this little story personally...] Hahaha! I have to admit, I didn't realize that fourth wall joke until you told me. Oh man, I better be careful not to turn Celestia into another Pinkie Pie

So...

Lucario knows Recover?

Chapter 3 is written and under proofreading. It'll soon be up, dear readers

Pokemon and My little pony?

And that's what happens to pokemon when you release them, kids.

You mentioned that the chapter has not be reviewed by a proof-reader. The only thing I would suggest that needs immediate fixing would be Lucario's line, "You ever heard of it." It sounds like something Rainbow Dash would say, rather than the genteel and formal diction your Lucario seems to use. Other than that, good job! I'm looking forward to reading more.

....... Did you just bring logic to pokemon? I mean a thin layer of metal.... i never even thought of that!

When I saw the To be continued... I was disappointed, hoping that it be longer.

Nice filler chapter, and please try to write longer chapters!

MrDenim

Good, Good, this is Excellent, keep it up.

wow im studing of mice of men now. POOR LENNIE! de wabbits

But, it's a pokemon.  In a land of magic.  There IS no logic great chapter.  It still seems very good despite not being proofread.

Wow...logic, never thought I'd see that in a Pony/Pokemon story. Too bad a traits of logic will vanish the moment a certin pony appears.

Stil, for a filler chapter this was nice, I can't wait for Lucario to meet the other residents...of the hilarity that will happen.

>>514004514004

same here month ago, it was good but sad.........

We require more updates.

>>514155514155 Yea man lennie didn't deserve it.

And now we come to the exposition portion of our program.

You shouldn't have to explain why Lucario was called Riolu. If people don't know that Riolu is the pre-evolved form of Lucario, then they shouldn't read this story.

Dude. Get it proofed before posting and no offense but the writing is really bad in this one. It doesn't flow well, and you get into a trap with going striht into describing things into too much detail for no reason. Then everything starts to become nothing but run on sentences.

Pokemon can learn a buttload of moves in the anime anyway (since it's not restricted by the limits of a GameBoy processor), so there's no need to explain.

>>513877513877 Changed it. Thanks for your input!

>>513947513947 Yeah, they are a bit short, aren't they? The good things about writing shorter chapters however is that: 1) I can upload chapters more frequently as I don't have to spend several more days writing just one. 2) I'm currently studying in high school so my schedule is a bit tight. If I were to write longer chapters there would probably be a large gap between uploads.

Like I mentioned in the Author's notes I do realize that some chapters can become rather uneventful and boring as an result. If you guys want me to increase the length of every chapter I'll try my best to do so.

Thank you for your opinion, MrDenim. I need criticisms to think about in order to improve my writing after all

>>515683515683 I'll admit that this is probably my least favorite chapter so far in terms of writing. I'll try to stop myself from writing these "run-on sentences".

I also knew that it was sort of an gamble to upload the chapter before it was proof-read. I apologize if that annoyed some people. For the moment I'm relying on only one proofreader, so I would like to ask: Is there anyone or anywhere I could turn to for more proofreading help?

Again, I apologize for all the inconvenience. I mentioned in chapter 1 that this could possibly be a bumpy ride, and it seems like I was right.

i expect LunaxLucario since they are both on the cover art.

I REGRET NOTHING!

>>517129517129 Muhahaha! You've fallen into my trap, foolish MicroUltraMad! The cover art features Luna just too draw you in and make you read about LucarioxMadame LeFlour! MUHAHAHAHAHA!!!

......no, actually I plan for Luna to appear again in chapter 4.

For LunaxLucario, i shall give you...

Image: http://cdn.hotstockmarket.com/e/e3/e34ce3a6_DrEvil.jpeg

SPOILER: the giant is arceus. Use a goddamn Master Ball.

F****** MAGNETS! HOW DO THEY WORK?!

FUCKING BINARY!!!

Nice update. Too bad I'm in the process of learning binary right now! Muahaha!

EDIT: Probably should have looked at the title first before translating it. It's way to obvious.

this is boss!! keep it up

Heh, Oh Pinkie. You are very lucky you got the cannon thing right. I don;t know if Lucario would have reacted if he got a cake to the face.

Whatever that thing is...I don't think he'll like this 'newcomer' that much if he gets a aura blast to his face...

It's a reference to the Pokemon slogan "Gotta catch 'em all!"

Gotta love binary translators.

Was Magnet Rise really necessary?  Lucario is pretty fast on his own, and add Extremespeed to the mix, and he would have cleared the forest in little time.

Regardless, this is starting to get good.  Is Luna...NAH!  That'd be silly.  OR WOULD IT?!

>>520397520397 what does the message say???

pinkie welcomes lucario like a boss

>>521051521051 Well, in the games ExtremeSpeed only has 5 PP. I imagine that using it quickly tires Lucario out, so it's not suited for long-distance travel. Thanks for enjoying my story!

>>521058521058 Oh for the Love of, i put it into a Translator and it said, "It's a reference to the Pokemon slogan "Gotta catch 'em all!" that's the Accrual Message.

I'm such a cheater when it comes to binary

Hate to say it, but the writing is getting worse.

>>527651527651 In what way? I appreciate criticism but I need to know WHAT needs improvement before I can improve it. If it still is the run-on sentences I think I need to slap myself

Twilight: So how do you learn all these incredible powers?

Lucario:  We Pokemon become stronger through intense training and experience.

Twilight: Well that kinda makes sense-

Lucario: -And candy.

Twilight:

>>528971528971 Haha, why do you think he was eating so much of Pinkie's snacks? He went up like 10 levels from all that

Very interesting. I look forward to reading more of this.

Whoa. Hold on. Wait a minute.  Not meant to return? But isn't he needed to help Ash out with the Tree of Life?

Now this is awesome! Best (and only) Pokemon in Equestria story I ever read!

>>532902532902 I put the "Alternate Universe" in there for a reason. I've done several changes to Lucario's backstory. Although I'm not sure the tag counts when it is the crossover universe that is changed.

>>533128533128

Ok. Sorry about that.