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Here. Have my thumb. I'd give you both of them, but I need at least one to punch the space bar when typing. And I don't think Fimfiction lets me donate more than one. Pity...
Keep up the good work! :D
Sparkle family incest...
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Not really my usual cup of tea, but I'm pretty open-minded. Keep writing and see where it goes.
P.S. You may want to work on how you write out unwanted plot elements. The Queen Chrysalis bit wasn't at all believable. Then again, maybe it's just me...
The idea... was begging to be written. This execution? Technically sound, but lacking fluidity and frought with OOC dialogue (even accounting for the non-canon incest).
I'm sorry that I gotta do this, but I have to put my reaction into this:
WHYYYYY? 
THERE IS A BIG AGE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THEM! 
They're sibling's for the Spaghetti Monster's sake, WHHYYYY? 
WHHHHYYYY?
Okay, I'm done now.
(rip weldbrony death by lol.)
ALL MY YES!!!
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>THERE IS A BIG AGE DIFFERENCE BETWEEN THEM!
Can't be all that big a difference. I doubt their age difference is more than 5 years at most.
>They're sibling's for the Spaghetti Monster's sake, WHHYYYY?
>They're sibling's.
XD WINCEST!
I love it dude, tracking I do hope you can continue this, WINCEST FTW.
So... when is the next part coming out?
Shining you epicly failed there you should have just waited
I like that your taking the tasteful humor road.
It makes the story a much more enjoyable read.
DAT APPLEJACK
I love the humor in this keep it up
Moar!
Why all these downvotes? This story is great!
Much, much improved on the second chapter. I have a feeling most of the downvotes are coming from people who read the first one, which is, honestly, kinda bad. It moves too fast, the Chrysalis bit is funny, but a bit forced, and the dialogue is stilted and out-of-character. This second chapter is much better paced, the dialogue is natural yet witty and the characters are themselves. I hope this story continues.
Somehow, I don't think you are.