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Okay. This is where I have to stop reading this. Celestial would never be like this, EVER! Also, when does she ever sneer or use the Royal We? Seriously, I won't go as far as to say this is garbage but I will not continue to read this.
...WHAT THE ACTUAL HELL IS GOING ON! Seriously I feel like I'm reading about a play that was performed by the in patients of a mental hospital. Everything is all over the place.
Okay. Last chapter, Twilight was a little out of character, but given the circumstances, I let it slide. THIS! This, however, is going too far. Celestia does NOT talk like Luna. Celestia does NOT belittle somepony else's feelings. I was expecting Celestia to be possessed or something. I'm sorry, but I can not continue reading this.
while i find this story somewhat interesting i find it hard to keep reading celestia talking like luna and luna talking like celestia is just going to far out of teh realm of expectations
edit: i can ignore the serious breach of character because the story is interesting Also yay resoration of Lunas character
I wanted to like this. Twily/Celestia aren't my favorite pairing,, but Twilight is always cute to read about.
Unfortunately, this story is just not well done. It isn't so much the drastically out of character actions by multiple ponies, as I have liked stories in the past that changed key characters and facts when they have been internally consistent. This story is out of character in different ways in each scene I have reached so far, so the changes don't add up to any kind of sense.
Early on, Luna is being a random twat with no explanation. Twilight was her first friend after she came back, but now she thinks she's a glory hound wing ding? Then she's sick of twilight's complaining after a single question of why? Couple the repeated statements that Celestia "made" Twi into an alicorn (um, she completed that spell herself...) with Luna maybe being jealous of Celestia's attention and this could have been a setup for a return of Nightmare Moon, but then suddenly Twilight goes all rage-face on her friends instead of shy/embarrassed when they discover her crush and then Luna is the nice princess and Celestia is being a heartless hag when Twilight bared her feelings. I'm no sun worshipper (I'm still mad at Celestia for the end of My Little Dashie) but this was so counter to Princess Goodness and Light's usual attitude that I had to double take to make sure I didn't skim past a change to an Angry-Luna PoV.
If that sounds random and drawn out, that's because it was!
There is a story buried in here somewhere, but it needs some more digging and shoring up of passages before it will be safe to cart out the treasure.
AHHHHHHHHHHH WHAT THE ACTUAL HELL!!!!!????!??!?!?! Why is everyone so out of character, AAAAAGH!