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Sound like someone don't wan't to get out the house.
The i should be capitalized.
I read this chapter once and found that one spelling mistake. I read it again and found these.
You accidentally put two spaces between these words.
Heavy should be heavily. You forgot the comma after vigor.
Dirk needn't be capitalized in this case.
This mistake will leave you seeing double.
Theatre needn't be capitalized.
The a is unneeded.
This spelling mistake is really bugging me.
It doesn't need that s there, but the s could just be trying get with the in crowd.
EDIT:
And I accidentally clicked post... Here are the last of the spelling mistakes.
Kinds should be kinda. Walked should be walk.
Eye should be eyes.
I wasn't should be I'm not.
You accidentally put a space between rant and the comma.
This sentence was done damn near perfectly. The damn didn't need capitalized.
Needs a comma after the true.
You need to put a before before the he.
Was Should be were. You need an an s on the end of call.
This sentence could be improved if you make help make that make go away.
You need an of between father and two.
Technicolor needn't be capitalized.
You need an it between if and is, or you could change is to it's.
You're needs capitalized.
The thought are car names capitalized ran through my head so I looked it up. Mustang needs capitalized since you're talking about the car and not the animal.
I should be I've.
I should be I've. This second one may or may not be a mistake. If you've had every girlfriend last at least a month that's a good thing and probably doesn't belong in the list of shortcomings in your character's life. However, If you've never had a girlfriend last more than a month that would belong on the list of shortcomings and make that a spelling mistake.
You need a was between I and driving.
You need a comma after but.
This is your last chance. After this there is no turning back. You take the blue pill and get rid of on one side and your story ends. You wake up in your bed and believe whatever you want. You take the red pill and get rid of in front of and stay in wonderland and I show you how deep the rabbit hole goes. Remember All I'm offering is the truth nothing more.
TLDR; Long drawn out matrix reference. Choose to get rid of on one side or in front of to fix the mistake.
The space is on the wrong side of the parenthesis.
This is is unnecessary.
Dragon needn't be capitalized. Taking should be talking.
Well this story is pretty good if you can ignore the spelling mistakes. Proofread your chapters, or get someone to do it for you, and you will have a far smoother and easier to read story.
EDIT 2: I just realized I spent two hours and twenty minutes (roughly) correcting spelling mistakes in one chapter of your story and it is now three in the morning. That's a lot of spelling mistakes.
5328143 yea, my kindle is very fickle when it comes to shit like that. I tried setting it so that it does not capitalize dragon, but it still does. I have to manually switch it. At times, it would delete words that I'm typing, too.
As for a proofreader, I tried to get them to do it, but they turned out to be a troll and deleted my entire chapter. I managed to retype everything, but I didn't like it.
Thx for pointing all that stuff out though. I will fix it right away.
Loved the reference by the way
I love the beginning. My English class has to make a Macbeth Trailer during break, their outta be a couple of hilarious ones when their all up on Youtube since, as long as it follows the Macbeth play, you can make it however you want (One year a group made it a type of Gangster Macbeth)
As a black person I found this funny.
This happened to me today in reverse actually. I'm on the train going to school sitting with some freshman friends (as a senior) and the new kid to the group (an Asian kid) is asking questions and he asks me "WHY I AM BLACK?"... I honestly didn't think people were that dumb. All the conversations end (* que record scratch*) and I turn to look at and tell him that is the dumbest thing I have heard in a while, and I know some idiots. My follow ups as follows
"hrm I don't know l, my mother is black and my father is black... I'm not sure."
"I could check with my family tree and see all the black people there and wonder."
Last one was "Why are you Asian? Did you decide to be? Or were you born that way?"
Ram that scaley motherfucker!!!!