Stormy, an Equestrian filly, goes out to play one day and vanishes without a trace. She awakens to find herself in a strange place, encountering races of beings that are unfamiliar even in Equestria. Driven by her scruples to change the world for the better, Stormy finds herself taking on one adventure after another, striving to put right wrongs and hoping that each new day will pave the way for her to make the final journey home.
Epic thanks to Balthasar999 for the Cover Art.
Merlosthemad and The Madverse Executive Writing Group for edits and proofreading. <3
Chapters (12)
You're certainly not wasting anyone's time Stormy. Good luck!
The story begins!
MOAR!
Also:
'The sparks suddenly doubled, then tripled in number, and a pulling sensation yank at her wings and back and cut her off.'
What does it mean by they cut her off?
Love it.
Woot long chapter, very good descriptions and the fact that our Pegasus is enslaved only makes us want to read more.
Your story is off to an excellent start with these first three chapters. Honestly this is the best 'first story' I've seen posted on FiMFiction in ages; if I was to judge it by the opening chapters here.
Nice.
Good luck NoisyPegasus on this piece. I am looking forward to where this tale goes.
Woohoobles!
Good times! 
I have one question: Who is Merlos?
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He's the silly dress and hat wearing human with a mane on his face in the pic. He's a wizard.
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Thank you. :">
The Merlos is an elusive wizardy creature... He also has skype
A good start to something that looks to be really promising... Now I really want to see all them wizards marvel at the violin using diminutive flying horse.
Look interesting, I will read and comment on it after I finish reading. Although I admit, I was lured here by the cover art (Really nice), which kinda goes against my belief of don't judge a book by its cover (Literal version, not metaphorically).
*Sighs dramatically* You realize I'm now going to have to favorite this? You're not giving me a choice, here. And I already have so many stories that I'm following.
Also, nice work on these three chapters
I have a feeling I know what made Stormy scream, there.
Time you enjoy wasting isn't wasted time! :D
I will be reading more of this.
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That was the glorious awesome of Balthasar999!
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You're free to speculate if you want, *Squeezyhugs*
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Thank you.
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Oh, I'll speculate away, but I'm not actually going to say what I think it is. That way, whatever it turns out to be, I can post "Called it!" right away on the next chapter.
True genius. Yup.
5070290 I think it means stopped/interrupted her, like when a friend cuts you off mid-sentence.
Nice job Stormy. Glad the constant tweeting of my skype actually serves some purpose
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Si! :D
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Thank you. ^^
Interesting beginning (a bit slow for my taste). I am most certainly looking forward to more chapters. Chapter 0 seems kinda bland, although I can see the necessity of introducing the main character. Most writer tend to have the first chapter being more intense, like a trailer for a movie, hopping to grab the reader's attention, than introduce the characters' background though flash back and conversation. (Not that I'm telling you to change your story, it's quite good as it is)
“WADSWORTH!” He shouted, shaking balled fists at the sky as it dawned on him why that little sniveling sneak had been smiling all along. He had known.
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Gotta be a bear skin rug or something she screamed at.
This story have my attention...very little stories that have nothing to do with mane 6 for a long long while or none at all caught my interest....
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Its going to run a bit slow up until Stormy starts adventuring. Mostly I'm using these early chapters to answer a lot of questions and set the tone of the story. :)
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Merlos does a lot of Professor Farnsworth references in this tale, doesn't he?
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Merlos may exercise his right to bear rugs.
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I've got a few in my favs list area. A goodie to check out that isn't related to the mane 6 are Stories of a Warden and All Paths Lead to Home If you want something to read while I try to come up with a worthwhile chapter for you guys to read. :)
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You earned yourself a night in hell for that one. : P
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*Breaks into song about it being "Christmas time in hell."
Really? Lot 666 was a chandelier in pieces? Is there going to be organ playing music and mysterious white masked men pining over a woman?
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Heh, I get it.
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You'll notice I've peppered pop culture and random obscure references all over this story. :D I was tempted to make a where's waldo like checklist when the story is over for people to find things. :D
Clear. Fly. Fall. Complete.
Welp, if any reference is going to get somepony catapulted into an AU, it would be that one.
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Cause everyone secretly loves Rainbow Factory.
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The statements hereto made do not represent us.
Looks promising.
*finally gets around to posting a comment.*
*sees Stormeh doin' good.*
*Bubble blowing intensifies.*
*uses siphon-powered waterjet propulsion to rocket out of his tank and land on Stormy's head. Octohugs commence.*
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Flails around.
"It's in my maaaaaaaaaaane! It's in my maaaaaaaaaaaane!"
<3 Thanks for the checkup OVS. <3
this is good
this is really good
like: done
favorite: done
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Thank you. You make me blush. <3
I just want you to know I love the story so far! You write lengthy but fun chapters and the attention to detail you give is astounding. You have my full support.
omg you posted a story
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Heheeee
Woohoo, updates! *huggles a noisy pegasus until she squeaks*
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Thank you, I wanted to lay down the ground a bit and pick up the pace in later chapters so things wont get too repetitive or boring. <3
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OMG I diiiiiiiid! *pulls into a cuddlepile*
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*gigglesnorts
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[Cute horse noises intensify]
What does PC mean in that context?
Stormy, how you be so cute.
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Politically Correct.
5190139 i had no idea either. Perhaps consider lengthening it to the real deal?
Fantastic story by the way. You definitely write well, but may have overdone it just a smidge on stormy's dismissal of the tour. (But that's not really something that took away from the story.) Liked and faved. Looking forward to more.
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Hear that, author? Stormy is too much of a ditz!
5190630 I'm guessing this was an unheard plea while editing? (Or is it just a jestly jab?) Oh, and thanks for the blog post linking to this story. Truely worth it.
P.s: I just learned somthing. Jestly is apparently a word.
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Just a jab.