Eternal Chaos Comes With Chocolate Rain

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Eternal chaos comes with chocolate rain. It sounded good at the time. But that time was ages ago.

If only she knew what eternal chaos really entailed. If only she knew what would happen when it took over her life. If only she knew of the things that came with it that were unavoidable.

(Set in an AU where Discord has taken over and become king.)

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Mr Marshmallow

Mr Marshmallow #1 · Sep 25th, 2014 · 2 · ·

Beautifully dark

TGM

TGM #2 · Sep 25th, 2014 · 2 · ·

Probably needs a dark tag.

But that was really good.

aleja08

aleja08 #3 · Sep 25th, 2014 · 2 · ·

"You see, Pinkie, eternal chaos comes with sadness, insanity, hysteria, no rules, no friends, roads of soap, floating houses, irregular weather patterns, and the most important thing of all..."
He looked straight into her eyes, a sinister grin on his face, before pulling her into a cruel embrace and holding his glass to the sky.
"...Eternal chaos comes with chocolate rain."

Bravo

Unimpressive Chaos Lord

Unimpressive Chaos Lord #4 · Sep 26th, 2014 · · ·

Not bad, no bad at all! They way you narrate how the voices of her head taunt her was excellent, and I say it from a descriptive perspective. I mean, that is the style you have to use in this kind of monologue, as long as you are writing in third person. But what I liked the most was the ambiguity of the scene. I don´t know you it was premeditated, but if it wasn´t, oh boy, what a lucky mistake! The fact that we don´t know if those voices are the product of Discord´s world, Discord´s individual hand or the fact that she has gone completely insane is perfect. Oh, by the way, what an magnificent way to finish! I love ironic quotes