In the world of Equerstria, mares are no nothing to males. In this dark world, no mare has a hope of freedom... until one mare comes, from another world, to end the madness
Please note that I do not enjoy writing this Fic. I take no joy at all. I write this only to save a friend from his own inner torment at how this series of fics affected him.
This makes it sound like you're reciting beat poetry about tortured feelings or something in a dingy club with an "EVERYONE SMOKES" policy instead of writing a story about cute magical horses. Why would you write a story you hate?
As much your original intent was noble, the overall execution and plot development was not thought all too well. The idea of turnign your female OC into the daughter of Twilight and the direct offspring of Chysalis was not very smart either.
There were so many possibilities, os many ways to turn this into the Zoroastrian version of the original Fall of Equestria, so many ways to portray the possibilties of how such a scenario coudl backfire for the bad guys, so many ways to make all of this better... and yet you chose the quick, but worst, way to do it.
5017352 if he's going to kill himself (whether it's because of a fictional, fan-made universe based on a cartoon or not is irrelevant) you should help your friend find proper, professional assistance. Like a shrink or one of those suicide hotlines.
5017377 my friend is an avid fan of mlp and never read anything darkfic about them until this series of fics, it wasn't his best choice but it happened and he's a wreck because of it.
I do this not for anything but to break him out by showing him a Fic of Hearst series where things will not be left horrible!
5017470 Please say that you're baiting us. There is just no way in the universe, that your friend is having suicide thoughts, just because he read some darkfics. If that's really the case, you should search for a professional and not help him by writing a fic.
It seems like a good story and has good purpose but I cant pull myself to read a fic this muture but you get the like... heres some sad flutershy tears for the purpose of the story I am only 13 and this story is to muture for me sorry
This is turning into a great story Autumn don't cancel it and delete it I REALLY want to see where this story will go please keep it available for reading
So I just read the first chapter and I have to say I like it so far ,never been much for these types of fics but its well written and nicely paced cant really see what all the complaints were about cept for a few missing "e"s in your "helds " early on but otherwise I likes it so keep it up and ignore the haters !
Sorry it took me so long to read I've only read chapter 1 so far. It is will written and you add a good amount of exposition for those of us that don't know the series, A,K,A Me. I will read the rest when I can.
5017495 I believe it I had a friend in collage that a complete brake down when Wolf wood form Trigun died. It took a long time to help her and me finding the Trigun manga to help her.
This looks interesting; Imma Try Out The Applause here:
Just reading the description, you spelled 'Autumn' wrong. Isn't there spellcheck on fimfic?
Also misspelled "Equestria" in the summary. Might want to get that fixed.
Rule of good main character OCs: Don't make them related to the canon characters..
![:ajsleepy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsleepy.png)
Do not make child of canon characters save the world.
This makes it sound like you're reciting beat poetry about tortured feelings or something in a dingy club with an "EVERYONE SMOKES" policy instead of writing a story about cute magical horses. Why would you write a story you hate?
5017248 to keep my friend from committing suicide. You got a problem with me trying to save a life?
5016139 no. I meant to spell it that way. It's my oc and that's how the name is meant to be written
Dear friend Autmn Breeze.
As much your original intent was noble, the overall execution and plot development was not thought all too well. The idea of turnign your female OC into the daughter of Twilight and the direct offspring of Chysalis was not very smart either.
There were so many possibilities, os many ways to turn this into the Zoroastrian version of the original Fall of Equestria, so many ways to portray the possibilties of how such a scenario coudl backfire for the bad guys, so many ways to make all of this better... and yet you chose the quick, but worst, way to do it.
5017352 if he's going to kill himself (whether it's because of a fictional, fan-made universe based on a cartoon or not is irrelevant) you should help your friend find proper, professional assistance. Like a shrink or one of those suicide hotlines.
5017377 my friend is an avid fan of mlp and never read anything darkfic about them until this series of fics, it wasn't his best choice but it happened and he's a wreck because of it.
I do this not for anything but to break him out by showing him a Fic of Hearst series where things will not be left horrible!
5017384 yeah, that's because I don't want to write this, but have to in order f my friend to get better.
5017470
Please say that you're baiting us.
There is just no way in the universe, that your friend is having suicide thoughts, just because he read some darkfics. If that's really the case, you should search for a professional and not help him by writing a fic.
It seems like a good story and has good purpose but I cant pull myself to read a fic this muture but you get the like... heres some sad flutershy tears for the purpose of the story
I am only 13 and this story is to muture for me sorry
This is turning into a great story Autumn don't cancel it and delete it I REALLY want to see where this story will go please keep it available for reading![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
....a fan fic...'affected' someone?....
5017495 he has a disability, a brain injury, so he thinks differently than most.
So I just read the first chapter and I have to say I like it so far ,never been much for these types of fics but its well written and nicely paced cant really see what all the complaints were about cept for a few missing "e"s in your "helds " early on but otherwise I likes it so keep it up and ignore the haters !![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
Sorry it took me so long to read I've only read chapter 1 so far.
It is will written and you add a good amount of exposition for those of us that don't know the series, A,K,A Me.
I will read the rest when I can.
5017495 I believe it I had a friend in collage that a complete brake down when Wolf wood form Trigun died. It took a long time to help her and me finding the Trigun manga to help her.