Peter was hired to do one thing, work on a rock farm. But when he starts to develop a relationship with the owner's daughters, he is forced to balance his work, his relationship, and his well being, all while all while dealing with a zebra curse
You are Anon, and you live alone. You are planning on relaxing by yourself tonight, but when a tear-stained Pinkie winds up at your door, who are you to turn her away?
Waking up in ponyland was weird but it's something i can deal with. Waking up as a main character of a cartoon show? That can be easily dodged. Suddenly have a screen that keeps on forcing me to be said main character? Hell nah!
I don't mean to be rude, but you are to wild in your writing. You need to work hard on pacing, not having so many unnecessary distractions (AJ and Twilight), and focus on what you said the story was about.
5148955 So is Pinkie an anthro or is she a 'feral' pony? Because in one paragraph it talks about her wearing a bra, and in another, it talks about her hooves digging into his back. So yeah, like I said, confusing.
was decent, maybe some more detail, also forgot to add human and anthro tags
So..... Is this anthro? Human? Either way its missing a tag, last time i cheakrd ponys dont have hooves or eat meat.
4993086 i just commented on that and somehow diddint see you there. Oh well, the more "pls add tags" comments the better.
Oh, and add human and anthro tags by the way.
Oh, and the cover arts missleading.
to short, or rather it seems rushed
50% bishop approved
stay classy
I don't mean to be rude, but you are to wild in your writing. You need to work hard on pacing, not having so many unnecessary distractions (AJ and Twilight), and focus on what you said the story was about.
Not bad....but it could be better. Still, not bad.
4996270 i think it was great no problems
4995154 Everyone thought the last story was too rushed, so that's kinda why I made it a bit longer til the actual clop.
oh, I can't wait for tonight
5024885 Haha
Man, dis is hot.
You need to put the anthro and human tag in there, for ponies don't have hands
Okay! Just to put some things straight, I added the human tag, so please no more comments about that! :D
what just happen? why he suddenly need to go his place?
5138276 Can you repeat that?
5148955 why he need to go back to his home?
Applejack broke her leg time to call farmer brown.
5148955 So is Pinkie an anthro or is she a 'feral' pony? Because in one paragraph it talks about her wearing a bra, and in another, it talks about her hooves digging into his back. So yeah, like I said, confusing.