Caribou conquering Equestria. Horrible fate awaiting all females. But in their darkest hour, help arrives from beyond fabric of time and space. Marshal Jason Lisinski, supreme commander of UBA, arrives in Equestria. Will he be able to call for help a
Interesting story - just a tip this story should be in post fall of equestria not in in humans are superior, it's a good story though and and please keep it going , would like to follow .
4991118 Doesn't change the fact that it's shit and your still doing it. Your embarrassing our HAS group by adding it. It's like those shitty ship fics that are ruining romance for some.
You need an editor bad, there are numerous mispellings, grammatical errors and mechanical faults.
The idea of a bronies becoming a superpower is interesting though. I especially like how the simulations and war games even took a hostile Equestria into account.
I'm afraid you have committed a heinous crime, which will prevent you from ever reaching a like from me. If you're going to use a scientific theoretical term, use the commonly accepted term for it. I cannot describe my displeasure reading that horrible word... That word that made me look upon this very web page with disgust, the third word of your Fic...
Just, why? Why? WHY?
Never say multiuniverse, when you can say Multiverse. At least have a space in between 'multi' and 'universe' if you're going to use that term in that disgusting way.
And, yes, I've probably over-reacted. Yes, no one else probably cares. But, if you ever, EVER want to get a like from me on this Fic. Edit it this instant...
This comment displays 5 minutes of my time well-used...
4997490 Edit complete. Also I should apologize, English isn't my native, so sometimes I make a mistakes, or using words from my native, because they may sound familiar - especially when I am writing at 3 a.m . [ex. eng. Romance- pl. Romans].
I am automatically very sorry for that, and please if you ever saw some typos, tell me about them and I will correct them as soon as I can.
4997716 Lol, thanks for that. Sorry to break it to you, but most of that complaint was me just joking around in the comments. I apologise for making you act so seriously about it. I feel kind of bad now...
Anyway, I believe that in itself earns you a like.
4997798 Don't be sorry. I know when I made a mistake, I have to edit it, and I know that my English is not on highest standard, so I like very much when someone shows me typos or grammar errors so I can edit them.
I support you a 100%. Why, easy awnser, fuck Caribou! I hate them I hate the whole fall of Equestria shit and it's about damn time someone did something about it. If you need help with this such as ideas or what not, just email me. Seriously when I read the description of this story i jumped out of my chair praising any god I could think of while playing Hallelujah on full blast.
"I end his speech." should be "I end my speech." I see some mistakes here and there, but I like the concept of the story. I've only seen one Anti-Fall of Equestria fic and I love it! Though I'll throw in my two cents and say some of your concept is dumb, and plainly stupid. I'm not saying it's a bad story just that it has some grammar issues, moves to fast, some of the concept doesn't even work, and needs to be pace out more evenly. Also the UBA is dumb beyond anything, that would have been acceptable when MLP first came out, but now it's an old, outdated, and a stupid idea.
'Maybe if this was a comedy than that will be different, but it's not.'
Look what I'm saying here is that you need to rethink your idea into something more reasonable. This can be a great fic, it has the potential, but lack the strength it needs. Find an editor, rewrite your idea, get a more serious plot, and then you'll have a piece of gold. Though this is my opinion so you decide on how the fate of this story will turn out.
I wish you the best of luck if you do take my opinion or if you continue this path.
I'm gonna take a guess on english not being your first language if it is then I'm sorry you need to work on your grammar a bit mate, spelling too not trying to be an ass I hope you'll take this as a mini review.
Well, it's an admirable undertaking. No better way to deal with being bothered by a setting that's a terrible, unfun, gratuitous fetish fuel copout than to get an army and blow it to smithereens! But uh...
United Bronies Association, was a name of new organization. It was lead by United Bronies Council composed of six representatives, one for each continent. They were elected by full democratic elections host every two years. Firstly, United Bronies Army or UBA for short, had only two hundreds soldiers, mostly veterans from different countries, but with time we become strong enough to face most of nations in the world. Actually UBA has half million soldiers ready to battle and one hounded thousand in reserve. Most of equipment is storage in large privet islands in Pacific and Atlantic, all of them belong to United Bronies Association.
And like that my suspension of disbelief is gone. I haven't lost it that quickly since i saw The Last Jedi...
NONONONO. I'm telling Alexer to get rid of this fic from HAS immediately. Honestly, our group needs quality control.
Also, WTF? Do you have any taste to realize that this is shit and that Fall stories will get you hated?
Fantastic! love this story! you sir deserve a moustache
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i think i just had an aneurysm from sheer stupidity [link]
Interesting story - just a tip this story should be in post fall of equestria not in in humans are superior, it's a good story though and and please keep it going , would like to follow .
4991090 Technicaly it can go there as long as humans win and its placed in the correct folder.
The title of this story speaks for it's quality. Those typos are eye-stinging.
4990996 Can you read, I hate this kind of stories too. That is why I write it. This is anty-FOE. That mean, they will be stopped. Good guys win etc.
No, just no.
Your title alone has typos in it.
I don't even need to read this story to know it's shit.
Fix your title and descriptions to remove the typos, get an editor.
Also, anti-, not anty-.
4991118
Doesn't change the fact that it's shit and your still doing it. Your embarrassing our HAS group by adding it. It's like those shitty ship fics that are ruining romance for some.
You need an editor bad, there are numerous mispellings, grammatical errors and mechanical faults.
The idea of a bronies becoming a superpower is interesting though. I especially like how the simulations and war games even took a hostile Equestria into account.
you didnt happen to read something by dropbear did you?
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4991437 Not really. If your logic was correct, we wouldn't have The Fall of the Caribou, which is a very good story.
Except it's well-written, of course.
*Splutter* Wh-what? Are you that stupid?
4991352 Exactly what I was thinking the moment I read, UBA and it was an anti- FoE Fic...
Sounds familiar.
4991118
I'm afraid you have committed a heinous crime, which will prevent you from ever reaching a like from me. If you're going to use a scientific theoretical term, use the commonly accepted term for it. I cannot describe my displeasure reading that horrible word... That word that made me look upon this very web page with disgust, the third word of your Fic...
Just, why? Why? WHY?
Never say multiuniverse, when you can say Multiverse. At least have a space in between 'multi' and 'universe' if you're going to use that term in that disgusting way.
And, yes, I've probably over-reacted. Yes, no one else probably cares. But, if you ever, EVER want to get a like from me on this Fic. Edit it this instant...
This comment displays 5 minutes of my time well-used...
4997490 Edit complete.
Also I should apologize, English isn't my native, so sometimes I make a mistakes, or using words from my native, because they may sound familiar - especially when I am writing at 3 a.m .
[ex. eng. Romance- pl. Romans].
I am automatically very sorry for that, and please if you ever saw some typos, tell me about them and I will correct them as soon as I can.
4991352 No I never read his stories.
4997716 Lol, thanks for that. Sorry to break it to you, but most of that complaint was me just joking around in the comments. I apologise for making you act so seriously about it. I feel kind of bad now...
Anyway, I believe that in itself earns you a like.
4997798 Don't be sorry. I know when I made a mistake, I have to edit it, and I know that my English is not on highest standard, so I like very much when someone shows me typos or grammar errors so I can edit them.
I support you a 100%. Why, easy awnser, fuck Caribou! I hate them I hate the whole fall of Equestria shit and it's about damn time someone did something about it. If you need help with this such as ideas or what not, just email me. Seriously when I read the description of this story i jumped out of my chair praising any god I could think of while playing Hallelujah on full blast.
"I end his speech." should be "I end my speech." I see some mistakes here and there, but I like the concept of the story. I've only seen one Anti-Fall of Equestria fic and I love it! Though I'll throw in my two cents and say some of your concept is dumb, and plainly stupid. I'm not saying it's a bad story just that it has some grammar issues, moves to fast, some of the concept doesn't even work, and needs to be pace out more evenly. Also the UBA is dumb beyond anything, that would have been acceptable when MLP first came out, but now it's an old, outdated, and a stupid idea.
'Maybe if this was a comedy than that will be different, but it's not.'
Look what I'm saying here is that you need to rethink your idea into something more reasonable. This can be a great fic, it has the potential, but lack the strength it needs. Find an editor, rewrite your idea, get a more serious plot, and then you'll have a piece of gold. Though this is my opinion so you decide on how the fate of this story will turn out.
I wish you the best of luck if you do take my opinion or if you continue this path.
I'm gonna take a guess on english not being your first language if it is then I'm sorry you need to work on your grammar a bit mate, spelling too not trying to be an ass I hope you'll take this as a mini review.
Well, it's an admirable undertaking. No better way to deal with being bothered by a setting that's a terrible, unfun, gratuitous fetish fuel copout than to get an army and blow it to smithereens! But uh...
Please try harder.
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broinies as a nation with armed forces you good sir /miss get a fav just for that
And like that my suspension of disbelief is gone. I haven't lost it that quickly since i saw The Last Jedi...
Please for god’s sake fix the typos! This can be a quiet good story if there weren’t so many TYPOS.