My name is Arkandy Visovic. I served in the Army once before I lost my legs. I was on the verge of suicide before I heard of Vogon Biotech. That was a year and a half ago… Now I'm happily married to Fluttershy and I'm going to be a f
Ok dude there are to many grammatical errors to count in there. Ex. (""You are too are so cute together!" PFC Madison Wombley squeals.")()You two are*). I like it though.
5094877 Yeah, that's why the title has the INCOMPLETE in it. I still need to add to the chapter and edit it. I published it with errata to make deadline...
5096009 1.) Corrected. 2.) Corrected 3.) The I has been capitalized, but the dash stays. Tolstoy likes to use pauses when he speaks. He's pretentious that way.
5107875 Thanks! I had planned on Zecora actually speaking at the end there, to pad the chapter, but I couldn't think of how to make a decent rhyme for her.
I understand that feeling all too well. I felt the same when we finished the wedding chapter. And the Diamond Tiara chapter I just did... That one actually kind of rough to write in some places. Which I believe she's the first pony so far to be shot at in the Vogonverse. Not exactly something to be pleased about, but hey, there's got to be a first for everything right?
No problem. That said... I'm considering something that might end up being all kinds of awesome, but I'm not sure yet. Just know that it contains Derpy, Dinky, a dying mother, and a child she wants cared for.
5119494 Not necessarily. Ark watched "Loveless" which is shounen-ai. Boys kissing boys is marked as homosexual in statistical analysis used by many ratings enterprises
5122873 I'm sure we all do...we need to have a random sitcom moment where ark is looking for a job and suddenly gets thousands of emails saying DONT WORK FOR APERTURE LABORATORIES!!!!!!!!!!!!
They're so sweet together! An android soldier named Donut with a feminine personality? Where'd you find that art?
5093802 Art? If Katy McAvoy is anything, he's cyberpunk version of Pvt. Donut from Red Vs. Blue.
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I meant the Fluttershy at the bottom.
Love the chapter.
5093926 Oh. I found that on Facebook. There might be a copy of it on bronybooru, but I'm not sure.
5094117 And I'm not even done with it yet.
Ok dude there are to many grammatical errors to count in there. Ex. (""You are too are so cute together!" PFC Madison Wombley squeals.")()You two are*). I like it though.
5094877 Yeah, that's why the title has the INCOMPLETE in it. I still need to add to the chapter and edit it. I published it with errata to make deadline...
Unnecessary capital.
Unnecessary capital.
Should be three periods instead of a dash
Capital necessary.
5096009 1.) Corrected. 2.) Corrected 3.) The I has been capitalized, but the dash stays. Tolstoy likes to use pauses when he speaks. He's pretentious that way.
Wow... I loved the chapter, and it was amazing. Nice job of introducing Zecora
5107875 Thanks! I had planned on Zecora actually speaking at the end there, to pad the chapter, but I couldn't think of how to make a decent rhyme for her.
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That's cool, if you get to needing some help with her rhyming, I'll be glad to offer what meager help I can.
LF
5111237 Well, maybe next time. Stick a fork in this chapter, it's done.
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I understand that feeling all too well. I felt the same when we finished the wedding chapter. And the Diamond Tiara chapter I just did... That one actually kind of rough to write in some places. Which I believe she's the first pony so far to be shot at in the Vogonverse. Not exactly something to be pleased about, but hey, there's got to be a first for everything right?
5111265 DUDE! Add a spoiler tag next time!!
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Sorry, sorry... Although the chapter's out there... Waiting... But yeah I really should add one next time for anypony who hasn't read it yet.
5111279 Yes, please!
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No problem. That said... I'm considering something that might end up being all kinds of awesome, but I'm not sure yet. Just know that it contains Derpy, Dinky, a dying mother, and a child she wants cared for.
5111316 OhmygawdPWNIES!
5119494 Not necessarily. Ark watched "Loveless" which is shounen-ai. Boys kissing boys is marked as homosexual in statistical analysis used by many ratings enterprises
Oooooh, Aperture science! This is going to be one hell of a universe later on!
5121492 You have no idea!
5122873 I'm sure we all do...we need to have a random sitcom moment where ark is looking for a job and suddenly gets thousands of emails saying DONT WORK FOR APERTURE LABORATORIES!!!!!!!!!!!!
5343929 Or Freddy Fazbear's Pizza Palace. Both of 'em will end up being bad for your health…