Set in the Gentlemanverse and inspired by Aetherpony's "Wild Rose." Richard, a Gentleman for hire, is called upon to tend to the needs of Ponyville's resident rose vendor.
I have two comments: given your Cloudkicker draws heavily off of the Winningverse, I find it particularly amusing that you have her engaged in mid-air sex, even by proxy.
My second comment is that I really have no idea how the action is supposed to be working in that scene.
yeah vibration alert is not much fun, landing with wingboners even less !
Would you say that Richard is "Still in the Air?..."
(10 seconds name that quote go!)
Hooah, Blossomforth!
Whoo-hoo! First official military personel as a lead in the GFM universe!
Adrenaline junkie.
I can see a story in that.
"What do we have here?"
"Well... a human."
"Huh. Don't see many of them dead in a city."
"Wearing some type of hunting clothes."
Pause.
"Okay, there's got to be a story there."
Humans, infecting ponies with their brash lingos. What is wrong with decent words like rutting, or tucking in? XD
See what I mean? Disgusting humans and their corrupting ways!
"Farewell screaming Bronson Pinchot shirt, you died for a worthy cause"! LOL! Best Line ever!
I have two comments: given your Cloudkicker draws heavily off of the Winningverse, I find it particularly amusing that you have her engaged in mid-air sex, even by proxy.
My second comment is that I really have no idea how the action is supposed to be working in that scene.
Well that was...interesting. A little weird, but interesting.
6630205 The first sex scene I ever wrote; it was bound to be weird and kinda hard to read.
Thanks for the favorite. I hope you stick around for the sequel as it's far, far better written and is not completely terrible.