4986601 Patience, grasshopper. It's in my plans. But all things must move as the plot dictates, and not before their turn. So the balance of life continues.
Clop here is good, but I think a flashback scene or some hint of what he was going through would have helped make the feels more effective. They are there, but we don't yet have a good connection to the character.
Seriously, though, it's just how the plot happened in my head. I dunno. Can't really explain it. Some of the best advice I've ever heard about writing was the advice to "take your characters and put them in the place they least want to be, and then get them out again." That was step one down the rabbit hole. Don't worry, it'll be more equal-opportunity overall.
For somepony who doesn't like m\m clop, you're pretty darn good at it. I would fave again for this chapter, if I could, but I can't - so let the wish be the deed. :D
(Humorously, the only clop story I've written so far is actually f\f and has to do with stuffing\gluttony - and I'm a colt cuddler and not really into those particular fetishes. So I get what you mean about sometimes wanting to try something that you aren't necessarily into personally)
I'm... actually growing to like this story, I think. The main reason for this, as far as I can explain, is that I am positivly impressed with how Dust feels after "working" his client (excellent smut is another part), and how he is conflicted between guilt and depression on one hand, and joy (and seemingly growing pleasure) on the other... wich isn't an usual theme in other fics involving prostitutes.
I like the characterization Good job!
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Sold. But you probably won't like it!
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But I do.
Still, this makes two chapters with awkward nervous customers and zero with confident, dominant stallions. Still waiting )
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Patience, grasshopper. It's in my plans. But all things must move as the plot dictates, and not before their turn. So the balance of life continues.
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My pet snake is ready, sifu, but if Harmony dictates, it shall wait.
Clop here is good, but I think a flashback scene or some hint of what he was going through would have helped make the feels more effective. They are there, but we don't yet have a good connection to the character.
This...I like this. Very well done, good sir or madam!
Why do I find this likable? I normally gag at m/m clop, yet your take and approach to this story has some how made this okay to me.....
My life has no meaning anymore....
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Honestly? It might be because I don't much like m/m clop, either. Go fig.
4987017 ........ Why did you write it, if you don't like it?
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Hey, someone's gotta do it right!
Seriously, though, it's just how the plot happened in my head. I dunno. Can't really explain it. Some of the best advice I've ever heard about writing was the advice to "take your characters and put them in the place they least want to be, and then get them out again." That was step one down the rabbit hole. Don't worry, it'll be more equal-opportunity overall.
4987084 My .EXE stopped working along time ago, but I understand where your going.
Your fiction is the First M/M clop that has my..... that has my... Favorite.
*Slumps over*
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Abort/Retry/Fail ?
4987110 Very funny, but my brain doesn't have those buttons.
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Nice work.
Oy, the name is Copper!
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Other than that, another fabulous chapter
The gif in the author's notes pretty well sums it up. Also, i'ma use now.
For somepony who doesn't like m\m clop, you're pretty darn good at it. I would fave again for this chapter, if I could, but I can't - so let the wish be the deed. :D
(Humorously, the only clop story I've written so far is actually f\f and has to do with stuffing\gluttony - and I'm a colt cuddler and not really into those particular fetishes. So I get what you mean about sometimes wanting to try something that you aren't necessarily into personally)
I'm... actually growing to like this story, I think.
The main reason for this, as far as I can explain, is that I am positivly impressed with how Dust feels after "working" his client (excellent smut is another part), and how he is conflicted between guilt and depression on one hand, and joy (and seemingly growing pleasure) on the other... wich isn't an usual theme in other fics involving prostitutes.
Excellent work so far.
Feelsbad man's in a terrible position