Rainbolt and Surprise have been friends for the longest time possible. A drunken mistake, however, will lead the two into a night neither will forget in their lifetimes.
Nice chapter, but there one or two things you may want to edit.
"You wanna get to the really good stuff?" ha asked, forcing a seductive tone that would only work on a mare.
Also, there's a part where you wrote "whole" when I think you meant "hole", though I could be wrong here. But you definitely wrote "soul" instead of "sole".
Below that was larger whole meant for the soul purpose of reproduction.
Rainbolt begged beneath his breath, secretly hoping he didn't seem like a jerk for letting his horny side take over.
Oh no, his sexual side he has no shared with anyone in ten, eleven years, wants something specific from her. What a terrible person...
"Your cum tastes like my momma's french fries..."
Okay! That's it for me! I'm done!
"How's it taste?" she asked playfully. "I-I donnu..." Rainbolt pressed his tongue to the top of his mouth and swallowed the sticky substance. "Weird."
Surprise, oh you!
The inside was damp and dark like a cave,
Da na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na, Batman!(I'm sorry! I really am!)
Her cute, drenched g-spot was throbbing in pleasure.
How would he know? It's inside. On the front wall, right above(or below) the skeins gland(that's pretty good too).Don't ask!
"H-how close are you?" Surprise asked. "I-I don't know..." The stallion bit his lower lip as a hot surge of pleasure ran through his veins. He then opened his mouth and let out a steamy breath. "Soon..." "Good."
Oh, that's great. You getting bored already Surprise? I see how it is.
If she'd been on the pill, there was no doubt in his mind he would have filled her precious pussy to the brim with cum.
Responsibility's a bitch like that. He could have gotten lucky and missed, but we all know his(and brothers) fertility track record.
"I don't know. I forgot to go to work." It was then, the stallion giggled at the thought. "I don't even like work."
Eh, buck it.
"I love you, too, Surprise..."
Do it, do it, do it, do it! This was good. The foreplay was more clopworthy than the main event, but that's not a bad thing. Also, I felt the dialogue afterwards was much more natural and relaxed than most clop pillow talk. Now for the epilogue, please put them together, even if it's slow to grow... 4994709 I'm pretty sure he's twenty-nine.
If THIS was canon, Surprise would be RD's stepmom. Speaking of which, how old is Rainbolt, anyway!?
Nice chapter, but there one or two things you may want to edit.
Also, there's a part where you wrote "whole" when I think you meant "hole", though I could be wrong here. But you definitely wrote "soul" instead of "sole".
I just found another thing in this chapter that you may want to edit.
It's about to get a lot better.
<heavy breathing>
Girls don't want to hear that, but this is a case where it's okay. Edit: Okay, that's exactly what she wanted.
That's either very good, or very bad bad Surprise, make sure he knows the context.
Yes, having a penis means you are going to rape her.
>rape
Kinda defeats the purpose of rape Surprise.
Aww, that's so sweet! That answers my question. Now hammer him like a nail.
Wait, he's doing this to teach her? But, she wants it so he can return her feelings...That's sad...
Don't really know why I expected these two banging to know what they were doing.
Wow. It sounds classy, but clearly it's not.
Oh no, his sexual side he has no shared with anyone in ten, eleven years, wants something specific from her. What a terrible person...
Okay! That's it for me! I'm done!
Surprise, oh you!
Da na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na na, Batman!(I'm sorry! I really am!)
How would he know? It's inside. On the front wall, right above(or below) the skeins gland(that's pretty good too).Don't ask!
Oh, that's great. You getting bored already Surprise? I see how it is.
Responsibility's a bitch like that. He could have gotten lucky and missed, but we all know his(and brothers) fertility track record.
Eh, buck it.
Do it, do it, do it, do it!
This was good. The foreplay was more clopworthy than the main event, but that's not a bad thing. Also, I felt the dialogue afterwards was much more natural and relaxed than most clop pillow talk. Now for the epilogue, please put them together, even if it's slow to grow...
4994709 I'm pretty sure he's twenty-nine.