There was silence in the air as the question lingered. The two pegasi were having breakfast in Rainbow Dash's kitchen. Fluttershy tried not to wander her eyes as she pondered the question Rainbow had asked. "...Try, what...?" she asked.
"You know, the hoof feeding." Rainbow Dash responded.
"B-but, didn't we just do that?"
"But this time, you." Rainbow Dash sat back down at her chair and said no more after that. Thinking for a moment, Fluttershy caught on to what she meant.
"A-are you sure?" Fluttershy asked, but Rainbow Dash didn't respond. In fact, she seemed to be frowning a bit, looking away with a blush while her ears were down.
Swallowing her own noises, Fluttershy decided to pick herself off the seat to move to Rainbow Dash. Just that action seemed to lift Rainbow's mood as her ears perked up.
Fluttershy looked at Rainbow Dash's plate, noticing that only the hay bacon was left. Not having other options, she hesitantly brought her hoof closer to it, looking at Rainbow Dash for assurance. With her nod of approval, Fluttershy took the bacon in her right forehoof.
Fluttershy slowly brought the hay bacon towards Rainbow's mouth as she was opening it. She could feel the warmth in Rainbow's breath trickle along her hoof as she got close. A violent tingle started attacking her hoof while a relaxing shiver ran across her features. Nervous jitters escaped her due to both the fearful and relaxing feelings.
Getting close enough, Rainbow Dash took the first bite of the hay bacon, letting her drool run through as she savored the taste. Fluttershy tried her best to keep her hoof steady as that saliva went into contact with her hoof.
Then Rainbow Dash wrapped one of her hooves around Fluttershy’s and started pressing her mouth further into the bacon. Rainbow’s wings flared as she released noises of delight from the taste of the hay bacon. Fluttershy was releasing moans of pleasure at the time. Those teeth scraped along her hoof, cutting the bacon up into parts, using her hoof like a plate.
Grease spilled from the bacon as it pressed on her hoof. The inner walls of Rainbow’s mouth stuck to them, dragging and sliding them off while her tongue lathered up the crumbs and drops. Her tongue was like a small mop, wiping saliva all along the dirty stains that dampened or decorated the yellow. Of course, the only dirt that it was wiping away was the hay bacon and its grease.
Fluttershy’s moan grew louder as her shivers became more violent to the point she could no longer keep her wings to her sides. Her eyes were squeezed shut and her teeth were clenched tightly. She had to use her left forehoof to grip against the table to hold herself steady. If that cyan hoof wasn’t wrapped around her yellow limb, it probably wouldn’t have been able to stay in place, especially for this long.
It was then that the inner walls of Rainbow’s mouth started pressing against the bacon crumbs and her hoof even harder, squeezing out more greasy contents and spreading them further. Trickles of Rainbow’s saliva started appearing out of her mouth as it slid down her yellow fetlock.
Rainbow Dash wrapped her mouth wider, sucking in all of the saliva, only to push more out onto the soles of her hoof. The teeth scraped while Rainbow's tongue lathered, leaving a mess of slobber that only an animal could leave behind when eating. The crumbs pinched into her soles while the tongue lapped them up, continuing to make them smaller and smaller.
Fluttershy squeaked and thrusted her body when something else started pinching her. Instead of scraping, Rainbow’s teeth started nibbling along the soft portions of her yellow soles. Parts of her sole were getting squeezed in between those teeth, cleaning out the crumbs, but leaving the saliva.
Rainbow’s mouth started sliding upwards along the yellow limb, leaving saliva to trail it while the grease and crumbs were cleaned up. She left a few popping noises with her sucking before her mouth had been released from the hoof. More saliva splattered along the hoof as a result.
The smooching pop made Fluttershy squeak one more time before she was able to breathe steadily again and calm down. While panting, her right forehoof was released from Rainbow’s grip, allowing its freedom, but Fluttershy kept it up. Being able to open her eyes again, she inspected it while her left forehoof kept her balanced on the table.
“Ahh… that’s some good eating,” Rainbow Dash said, wiping her mouth of any stray saliva that spread on her lips.
Fluttershy twisted and turned her hoof around, looking and feeling the saliva that coated it. The moist made the air around her hoof feel a lot cooler. The parts of the saliva that still slid around tickled a little, but it just felt relaxing to her. The tingling had calmed down again.
Fluttershy’s lips couldn’t help but curl to a smile. And then her smile turned into a light giggle. That was when Rainbow Dash reached her hoof towards Fluttershy’s foreleg, wrapping it around to bring it back to her.
Fluttershy brought her gaze back up to Rainbow Dash, releasing a silent gasp at the motion. Rainbow brought her right forehoof up to her face and released a good spit on it, saliva splatting on her hoof. She then moved that hoof towards Fluttershy’s, making the dripping saliva visible.
“You know, this isn’t normally how it goes, but it’ll do,” Rainbow said with a smile. A shudder went along Fluttershy’s frame as her hoof was moved forwards. Her let forehoof connected with Rainbow Dash’s right, mixing the two coated saliva forms together. The saliva merged as one.
Fluttershy’s face started flushing red again. This new feeling was just going too fast for her. Now she was just feeling comfort from not only Rainbow’s hoof connecting with her own, but also the saliva that covered it as well. Maybe that feeling wasn’t as bad as she thought. How could anything that felt this good be bad at all?
But still, Fluttershy wished that the feeling would at least slow down.
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4961842 -dislikes received.
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Ignore 'em. People will slay you for having a fetish they don't like, or for writing about a certain pairing, or just to troll. Focus on the written feedback.
4963390 Which there are none of since the last update, or the last week.
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Well, I'm here ...
4963619 I would still love to know the things that I'm doing wrong though, if there are any. Without any sort of feed back, all I can assume is that people like it and believe there isn't anything wrong. But according to the first set of comments I received, there's bound to be problems somewhere in there.
But right now, when I compare the attention that I had on the first chapter with the second, so far the second seemed to kill people's interest.
Not to mention I've never received any answers back for any of the questions I've had in the author's notes for any of my stories. Only questions I've asked through comments have been received.
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It happens on a lot of stories; once people've commented/favourited/liked the first chapter, they don't always comment on the second chapter (you can't like something twice, after all, so barring a sudden change from a like to a dislike, you can assume that people who enjoyed the first chapter also enjoyed the second). I get that it can be a little frustrating, especially when you get dislikes and you don't know why, but there's sadly not a whole lot that can be done about it. People will either comment or they won't, and as schools are starting again, quite a large proportion of this site's user-base simply don't have the time.
Not everyone reads them.
I think you did a good job.
I don't share this particular kink, but it was interesting to see RD explaining it, and helping FS explore it.
A little feedback:
I have trouble believing RD would talk like that, especially when she's incredibly worked up. (so worked up, that she even yells at FS to shutup.)
Compassion, I think?
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Well, according to Testing 1, 2, 3, along with a few other moments in the show, it looks like a cloud's behavior is influenced by a pegasus's emotions, so this was Rainbow Dash overreacting because of how shot her nerves suddenly were. I explore that cloud use in more detail in another story though.
I had this mistake for that long? Wow...
Fixed.
Thanks for the feedback!
5015943
Ah, sorry, that is not what I meant.
In fact, I really like the scenes where you show bits of RD's affinity for clouds.
The problem is not WHAT she says, but HOW she says it.
Just to illustrate what I mean:
"I need to calm my emotions before I cause this cloud to explode!”
"I gotta chill before this cloud explodes!"
Do you see what I'm trying to say?
Darned homophones are tricky to catch.
Your welcome.
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Thank you! I don't see this getting explored very often at all. So I really want to get in as much detail of this as I can in my story. We've seen quite a few small scenes in the show for what Rainbow Dash can do with them after all.
Ah, I see now. Unfortunately, that's most likely gonna be a problem with a lot of my stories because I can't identify that way of talking very well. (Using words in ways no one would use them.)
But even so, the example you provided just sounds so awkward to me. It could be just me though. But thanks anyway for telling me about this.
Wow, I think I may have overreacted before. Suddenly this fanfic is getting so many views and likes...
What an adorable story of Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash!
Good job!