A storm that cannot be cleared looms over Equestria. Twilight, Spike, Fluttershy, Rarity, Applejack, Pinkie Pie, and Rainbow Dash are set into motion to figure out why. But as the friends search for answers, a mysterious fog overcomes four of them. The nature of Twilight, Fluttershy, and Spike's search changes from one of curiosity and prevention to one of salvation and intervention. The outcome of their search for answers could result in the end of not only their friendships, but of Equestria itself.
Chapters (2)
What's In You - Black Label Society
467963 Good song.
471066 good story sorry it took me so long to read as it took me but i was busy reading other stuff and doing other stuff
589332 That's alright.
It may be postponed for a little while. I decided to do a lot of editing on the first chapter as well, so chapter two will come when it comes. 
Editing on chapter 1 done!
For now at least.
Chapter 2 coming soon.
If I may post a preview of my favorite sentence in the story so far. It doesn't spoil anything. “G-g-g-g-guys? There’s a c-c-c-cloud coming at us. On its own. And it’s on f-f-f-i-i-ire! We need to r-r-r-r-RUN!” Fluttershy said, frightened.
that was kinda hard to follow i think i counted it switching between three different times instead of past and present and its OK I JUST COULDN'T FOLLOW IT STOP JUDGING ME
637450 That's okay. I'm not judging you. I was wondering if I should try to figure out some better way to denote between the two, and I guess I do.
Thank you for mentioning it!
I'm kind of weird. That construction is my preferred way of telling/reading a story. Makes me have to think
. But I will try to get it to the point where it can be more easily interpreted. Probably just a different symbol between past and present and each character.
I edited the way that the past is set up in the story. I put it in italics and added how may days ago it was when the event took place, unless all of the events in the chapter take place in the same time in the past. Then I will only put what day it was once. If this is tacky, let me know.