As Celestia's Barrier advanced across Canada, one last train managed to flee Halifax. Forced off the main lines into the wild, the people and ponies onboard find themselves fighting for their lives, and souls...
Unable to carry on intruding onto the pathetic little scene she began to hunt across the various ships, trying to find something to buoy her spirit. She saw some more of the creatures clustered in morbid silence around the guttering light of a tiny paraffin lamp, canvas shelters billowing around them in the storm. Some distance away two larger ones, stallions perhaps, were fighting one another for what looked like a chunk of bread. And at the stern of one ship several more were disposing of the dead overboard, but not before carefully stripping them of their clothes and possessions. Then, with a sad, painful finality, the naked corpses were consigned to the deep.
You forgot to add "saw" there and there's another mistake where you misspelled "she" in Lightning Dust's part of the story as well.
Speaking of her, I figured she would be taken to Equestria, but not the one she came from, though I do hope she ends up in a stronghold in Earth rather than back to the TCB Equestria. Once again there's hope for the newfoals if there's an almost normal girl still there, and she was ponified during the war. Though I feel a bit sad that she may have managed to keep her personality because they were "experimenting" at the moment.
4875916 Actually I got that wrong, it's "her" that is misspelled and its in between these lines (of which one I will show you in the quotes as before)
Dust, being Dust, didn’t see that, or notice the sinister purpose with which the fliers were descending towards the ships, or the panic their appearance caused on deck.
All she saw were ponies, and to her, that was all that mattered.
“Yes!” she whooped, bounding up to perch on the lip of the rail, all four hooves bunched together and muscles coiling. She felt the wind on her face and gauged its flow over her damaged wings. Yeah, a good kick-off might just give her the lift she needed to reach those guys...
So much for my Hope Spot, you cut that down to 50% now and I'm already coming up with theories to this, two of which being that she has a split personality now or has a newfoal in her brain.
The first chapter was something that was out of place in the Spectrum 'verse. It showed a peaceful and calm setting...and then, it shocks you with the booby trapped statue and those spy pillars and Celestia's pronouncement.
I just noticed that the whole scene with Kith and Kin Crowing Harmony is symbolic of the whole 'verse. The statue shows the ideal of all species in Equestria in harmony; its explosion symbolizes the death of said harmony and how it will drench Equestria in blood.
Minor gripe: you did not italicize the ship names.
And that new potion...ugh. The Royal Guards are as immoral as they come.
The rest of the cab reflected that parity of maintenance: normally locomotives had their road-number painted somewhere distinct on one of the desktops or bulkheads, but this beast had so many parts cannibalised from her classmates fitted to keep her rolling that it seemed everywhere you looked there was a different set of digits marked, stamped or scrawled. About the only new addition was a gun-rack that some entrepreneur had mounted above the windscreen; it was currently being used to hold a bundled-up sleeping bag by its strap.
well, they have A LOT of Parts to keep 9782 going, seeing as she has 437 Sisters in the CP Rail System, as well as any spare parts CP Rail may have Stockpiled from GE.
Looks like you broke the story's wordcount when you tripled it: the new chapter's wordcount hasn't been added to the total.
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I noticed that at first too. It seems to have resolved itself now.
Just gonna have to chalk it up to a Derp.
That moment when you check your email and there's a new chapter...
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No words. Only awe.
Train 9872.
Last train out of Pony Hell.
Godspeed.
. . .
Poor Lightning Dust...
Mistake in this paragraph:
You forgot to add "saw" there and there's another mistake where you misspelled "she" in Lightning Dust's part of the story as well.
Speaking of her, I figured she would be taken to Equestria, but not the one she came from, though I do hope she ends up in a stronghold in Earth rather than back to the TCB Equestria.
Once again there's hope for the newfoals if there's an almost normal girl still there, and she was ponified during the war. Though I feel a bit sad that she may have managed to keep her personality because they were "experimenting" at the moment.
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I'm glad to oblige - hopefully you'll be feeling the same way again soon!
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Thankyou kindly! Though I am geuinely surprised at the depth of your response.
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Thanks for locating those errors - I'll amend them immediately (where was the mis-spelling of 'she'?)
As for Verity...let's just say not everything is as it seems...
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Not quite the last...not yet...(evil chuckle that descends into inane laughter).
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To everyone who has viewed, voted (up and down), or favourited, all I can say is thankyou!
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Actually I got that wrong, it's "her" that is misspelled and its in between these lines (of which one I will show you in the quotes as before)
So much for my Hope Spot, you cut that down to 50% now and I'm already coming up with theories to this, two of which being that she has a split personality now or has a newfoal in her brain.
Well...shit.
The first chapter was something that was out of place in the Spectrum 'verse. It showed a peaceful and calm setting...and then, it shocks you with the booby trapped statue and those spy pillars and Celestia's pronouncement.
I just noticed that the whole scene with Kith and Kin Crowing Harmony is symbolic of the whole 'verse. The statue shows the ideal of all species in Equestria in harmony; its explosion symbolizes the death of said harmony and how it will drench Equestria in blood.
Minor gripe: you did not italicize the ship names.
And that new potion...ugh. The Royal Guards are as immoral as they come.
well, they have A LOT of Parts to keep 9782 going, seeing as she has 437 Sisters in the CP Rail System, as well as any spare parts CP Rail may have Stockpiled from GE.